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PinsterWGlasses [2019-05-06 20:22:37 +0000 UTC]

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I think you did an overall great job with the facial structure and composition of the face. The eyes really capture my attention with the bright contrast against the dark boarding of the hair. The eyes have great shape and work well with the nose and lips, I think. I would like to see the same amount of blending done on the body as there is on the face. I think a little more time and care put into it would really smooth out the body's shading and make it look just as appealing as the face!

I find some issues with the neck, however. I feel it may be just slightly too long, though that could definitely be because of your style, as well. The most issue I take with it is the shading of the neck tendons. These tendons wouldn't be sticking out like they are unless she was stressing them, cause them to tighten and bulge out against the skin. A relaxed neck has the opposite shading; a light stripe down the length of the neck with darker shading on each side. I would be careful of how you shade the neck, of course, as it's easy to make females appear to have a slight Adam's apple.

The shoulders feel are a bit too small. For females, two heads should equal the length of your shoulders. The neck should gently slope off and the should should dip just slightly right before shoulder bone and then curve toward. I think you have it the closet to form with the right should (-->).

The armpits are a bit too dark in contrast with the rest of the skin. Their fold should be softly shaded, with a stronger, thinner line of shading in the very crevice. The overall width of the chest area (not just the chest) should be wider as well. I think this issue would be alleviated with extending the shoulder length, as mentioned before. The creases of the armpits should roughly line up with the dip in the shoulder right before the shoulder bone.

The shading of the cleavage is almost there! The shape created by the contrast of shading is just winged out a little too much. It should be more of a slimmer triangle that fades off more at the base, blending in with the rest of the chest shading. The clothing/armor on the chest is slightly off center right where the cleavage ends and the definition of the under breast is lacking just a bit which makes the overall clothing look a little flat.

The shape and flow of the hair is really well done and it keeps my eyes looking in a circle. This is really great composition technique and keep the viewer looking at your piece for longer. Doing similar compositions for headshots, when applicable, would be a great way to keep people interested! The only issue with the hair that I see is that the blending of shadows isn't quite there yet. The highlights look a little too scratchy rather than silky or glossy. Hair is very tricky and it's easy to get overly detailed with it. I would suggest started with minimal details that look nice and adding contrast and strands carefully. You've got a really good shape going for the most part, just perfect that shading and I think you'll see a vast improvement!

The last thing I'd like to touch upon is what I presume to be metal bits? If so, they are a little muddy with shading and overall flat. Metal should be shaded more smoothly to since the dark contrasts can become very muddy with messy or rough shading. I'd also suggest adding spotlight reflections. Most metals have somewhat of a reflection. Perhaps not as good as a mirror, but it does reflect light intensely.

I think you did a great job overall and I would absolutely love to see more pieces from you!

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Mazena [2019-05-07 12:25:42 +0000 UTC]

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PiecesOfSteel [2019-05-06 10:47:35 +0000 UTC]

You should definitely be proud! It looks wonderful! Don't be scared to fail, those are also progresses

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