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nightshade-keyblade [2014-10-18 02:24:15 +0000 UTC]
I personally would put the word "Seven" at the beginning of the second stanza instead of the end of the first one all by itself:
When she felt sad, she'd hold him by the ear,
and stroke it gently, and would breathe its scent
slowly and deeply, and be soothed. Seven
years later, and she still has Gingerbread.
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nightshade-keyblade In reply to fernknits [2014-10-19 02:12:44 +0000 UTC]
Iambic pentameter? I didn't notice.
No problem, hope it helps!
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