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Eyes-S — The Phenomenon Called Time
Published: 2006-06-12 17:43:43 +0000 UTC; Views: 1087; Favourites: 4; Downloads: 19
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TimeIt's such a strange thing
Goes by ever so slowly
Making you wish for the next day
Time
No one can control it
Goes by ever so fast
Making you wonder where the moments have gone
Time
Your life depends on it
Goes its own way
It can heal your pain and make it better
Time
It's never the same
Goes on and on
It can change your world into darkness and make you feel lonely
Time
It will never be figured out
Goes like it's suppose to
One day you'll wake up and be at peace
My time has come
Farewell, everyone
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yeah, i was just filing critisizm as if you were intending to publish this piece or share it with a broader audience. Do you just write for fun, or do you want to make a career out of it? just curious
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Oh no, just fun. And even right now, I don't even write much anymore. I write mostly when the feelings are there. Which feelings? I don't know. Usually sad ones for me. But that ain't correct right now. I guess I need to be inspired to, there has to be something that inspires me. Not sure, really.
I think it would be cool to be featured in a magazine one time or to share it by reading it for an big audience. But it ain't a real goal of mine.
It would be with a poem that I find good myself and really saying more than the usual things or something like that.
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I like the image a lot, but I gotta say that I'm not too fond of the poem. Elements of time have been examined so much in writing and I didn't really think that you added anything new, creative, or interesting to the image of time. The stanzas speak truth, but in a rudimentary way. Maybe I'm just missing something- but I dunno. Hope to read more of your gallery!
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I didn't intend to add anything new. I intended to write about time in my own way and as I see it. If anyone would relate and agree, that would be a very nice bonus.
But thanks again.
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yeah, i was just filing critisizm as if you were intending to publish this piece or share it with a broader audience. Do you just write for fun, or do you want to make a career out of it? just curious
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Aww, thank you! I am glad you feel that way, cause that was what I was trying to accomplish.
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Mission accomplished, then! 
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Yes, it seems so! Happy, happy!!
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Reading this poem makes me think back to so many memories, especially the first two stanzas, thinking back to the days of high school, looking outside the window wishing for the class to end as you watch the clock.
"Making you wonder where the moments have gone"- Times shared with friends, laughter, tears, all sorts of emotions running high. Looking back at those memories and wishing for them to return and realising how much has changed.
But as your poem says " Your life depends on it" You can't live in the past forever floating in those memories, somewhat sad but it's true everyone has to find their own path and whether or not they cross is fate hence " finds it's own way"
The fourth stanza with "its never the same" and "change your world into darkness and make you feel lonely" suggests there may be some saddness or uncertainty which scares people.
but the strongest lines to me are "it can heal your pain and make it batter" and "one day you'll be at peace" no matter what, the memories one experiences shape the person and depending on the memory make them stronger as time is the only true healer. Hence "My time has come" as in the person has managed to come to terms with the past and agknowlege it and is able to move forward
phew sorry for over-analysing,but once again you manage to move me with your wonderful poems, a first class piece as always^-^
keep up the great work!
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Thank you so much for putting all your thoughts down. You really did understand it and I am glad it came over that way. The ending, it seems, can be taken in different ways. I had this one in mind too, later on. But the moment I wrote it I meant: be at peace. As in Rest In Peace. You indeed accept things as they are and you are fine with it. But also, your time has come and you say goodbye: death. Cause isn't that the most certain end of everyone's time? Anyway, thanks again for the comment! I appreciate it a lot.
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I love the poem. So heartfelt, and ethereal and alluring. i love it. I LOVE IT!! It's so fantastic!!! *glomps, huggles, snuggles, cuddles, and kisses*
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You're welcome!! ^_^ *glomps, huggles, snuggles, cuddles, and kisses*
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ah sammy, another good poem from ya 
it's so very true and the end of it is just a great way to end the poem.
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Thank you! I am glad you think so.
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Wow, what an analysis of that image, hehe. Very cool to know your thoughts behind it like that though. And I'm glad you like the image
So anyway, the poem. Already told you it's a great poem! But why? Well.. I like how you made the first five verses look pretty much the same, yet completely different in their meaning. And the meaning of each verse is just so true, so true that no one can just go "Hey, that's not how things are.". Also, the last verse is a completely unexpected end. The last line before it goes like "One day you'll wake up and be at peace" and then suddenly someone's dead, to say it like that. Very unexpected. Also, it just occured to me, that you don't have to read it like someone died. Could also be that someone just packed his/her bags and is leaving town after some bad events in his/her life.
So in other words; great poem, well done!!
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Yeah, I wanted to show you it. But then I didn't want to wait any longer and I knew you would comment then anyway, so I posted it. hehe
And now it's my turn for the wow. Glad to know how you feel and think about this poem. I did indeed the verses like that. I wanted them to look alike. I tried my best on it. And the unexpected ending was on purpose too. Well, it just seemed to fit when I wrote it. It's like the verses are all phases of your life. So it would make sense if the end of the poem was the end of the life as well. Packing your bags and going could be, but I didn't intend it as such. Still not wrong to read it like that. Depends on the reader.
Thank you very much!
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Hehe, smart girl. Of course I was gonna comment!
A wow? Oh my. I wrote something good then, hehe. I thought you made the verses like that, yeah. Didn't know there went so much effort in it though. Phases of your life.. That's a good one. It's so deep (seriously). And true, depends on the reader a lot. But I like both ideas!
You're so welcome!
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Glad you like it then! And yeah, effort indeed. Though it did kinda flow. Wrote it in about 30 minutes, maybe an hour tops. But yeah, phases of life. That's how I thought of them. Moments in life more like. But still, they all lead to one defenite thing. Demise, to say it like that.
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'Course I like it! And well, 30 minutes to one hour is effort to me ><
And too true, how they all lead to one thing; death (no fancy word for me 
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I can't write poetry at all. xDDD It's awesome how you can write great pieces in such a short time.
I love this one. ^___^ The words are so honest and true.
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Thank you so much. That means a lot to me.
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whoah! nice I miss writing prose and lyrics though! it's a great piece sami! well done
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Even though I totally hate poetry (sorry I'm committing a sin in your eyes xD), this really caught my attention. The repetitive use of 'Time' has an echo which could well be echoes of time, and the last verse, 'My time has come, Farewell everyone' is an implication of the end of your existance (Am I right? Or wrong, most likely 
Oh well. That was actually one really crap comment because I'm the worst at poetry and prose in my class xD
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No way! Not crap at all. You totally got it. And the echoes of time? I didn't even think of it like that, but it totally fits!
And I am glad you understood the last verse. I thought of writing: "My time has ended". But that would have been to obvious, I wanted people to understand it themselves. And you did! So yay! hehe
Thank you for the comment.
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Woo, all these English lessons that I wasted away by drawing FF stuff, I actually was paying attention to the imagery and assonance of poetry! Go meeee xD
Yes, it would have been too obvious, but it would also stilll fit in the poem ^^
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Go you! haha
Yeah, I know it would. It did sound fine. But me being me, I didn't want it to be obvious. If you read more of my poems, you can notice it there too. hehe
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