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sukie410 [2011-09-05 17:33:05 +0000 UTC]
Has written a paragraph of my character being introduced. I've tried not to change the story too much;
* Just as I was about to leave, the clouds parted and a bright light shone down on us. For a moment I thought it was God about to smite me for my seedy underground operations, but no,I could hear the sound of a helicopter.
All of a sudden a rope fell and a figure slid down it dressed in all black. It was a girl, about my age. She had a beehive hairdo with a bone shoved crudely through the middle.
" Good morrow!" She called as she jumped down. " Please climb in to my carriage of wonders and amusement!β
At first we were confused but then out of the blue, but as if it had always been there, a brightly decorated vehicle appeared, pulled by a black horse with a feather on its head.
Very excited Mikey and Gerard began to climb in, but I had misgivings about the whole thing.
β WhaT ArE YoU?βI enquired.
The girl smiled at me and took out a small flute from her hair. She began to play and jig on the spot.
β They call me Billie! And I am not but a man nor a woman, follow me my little darlings and we shall have candy and meat for all...o and this is Beth by the way.β
She indicated to the squalid little man driving.
Me, Mikey and Gerard climbed in, only to find out it was not a cosy little caravan, but a cage on wheels. Billie cackled madly waving her arms like a lunatic. I was afraid, but Gerard put his muscular arm around me.
β If we use the power...we will be okayβhe said.
β The power?β I asked, confused.
He glanced at his hand, and I saw both him and Mikey were wearing gold rings with red in them. He gave one to me and I put it on. We all pressed our rings together.
βOne..Two...Three...KILLJOY POWERβWe all chanted.
A red light blasted from us and we rose in to the sky and hovered above Billie, who was shaking her fist in anger.
β MCR and away!β We shouted. As we shot up in to the atmosphere I heard Gerard give a shriek. I looked down and to my horror saw that the thing named Beth had attached itself to his foot. He kicked frantically, but it was too late, he was falling...falling...falling..gone.
To Be continued...
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eddietwang In reply to sukie410 [2011-09-05 19:14:34 +0000 UTC]
The mind Fuckary XD this made me cry so hard with laughter it's great X)
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sukie410 In reply to eddietwang [2011-09-05 19:53:47 +0000 UTC]
so, what ya think? will you consider my characters?
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eddietwang In reply to sukie410 [2011-09-05 20:02:23 +0000 UTC]
hmm what a perdicament, i shall look it over after reading the newspaper and drinking a glass of red wine (:
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sukie410 In reply to eddietwang [2011-09-05 20:22:52 +0000 UTC]
Do you like where I've gone with it?
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eddietwang In reply to sukie410 [2011-09-04 16:53:31 +0000 UTC]
I actually laughed out loud when you posted that XD thank you, alough i cant ever imagine you punching anyone :L
BILLIE PUUUUUUUNCH ------>
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sukie410 In reply to eddietwang [2011-09-04 16:58:27 +0000 UTC]
:L:L well I try. Ellie read my story! I wrote it a couple of months ago but hey..
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eddietwang In reply to sukie410 [2011-09-04 16:59:39 +0000 UTC]
Oh yay you wrote a story hehe i wanna read (:
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sukie410 In reply to eddietwang [2011-09-04 17:01:13 +0000 UTC]
it's sunny and his sewing machine :L
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eddietwang In reply to sukie410 [2011-09-04 17:11:20 +0000 UTC]
i know its cool i read it (:
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MewPocky [2011-08-28 14:06:34 +0000 UTC]
AMAZING!
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MewPocky In reply to eddietwang [2011-08-29 13:30:12 +0000 UTC]
Oh, you're so welcome! Keep up your good work!
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AndySixPadackles [2011-08-20 01:15:37 +0000 UTC]
'Tis a good story. But I have a question. Why is it in the description?
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AndySixPadackles In reply to eddietwang [2011-08-25 05:34:48 +0000 UTC]
The part where you as the author write comments about the deviation. Why is it in there, not as a literature deviation...
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eddietwang In reply to AndySixPadackles [2011-08-29 12:01:07 +0000 UTC]
Yh I don't really think things throughout very well XD
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Chem-Girl95 [2011-08-19 23:34:55 +0000 UTC]
i love the story
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