E5C4P3 [2013-01-14 00:52:51 +0000 UTC]
I don't know why you think this needs to be edited. Sure, there are a few grammar mistakes here and there, but hardly. This is awesome! You're extremely good at writing! It's very detailed, and the plot is very good. You were able to keep the story interesting rather than it be a drag. You're a natural writer, no doubt.
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