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Natasha's birthday at Kalemegdan - BelgradeRelated content
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I normally don't write critiques for pieces with a watermark but I'll do an exception for you my friend.
The good:
I like the model's pose and expression... looks kinda gloomy and fits the surroundings. I like the blurring and vignetting done either in post-process or in camera.
Things that could be improved:
Subject is hard to define... Is it the tree or the girl? The framing is a bit too large and the tree draws a lot of attention in this picture. I think a tighter framing would have serve this pic better. Also, your main subject, the girl is almost dead center. That is, as you know, a no go in most picture. Granted you have some blurred things in front to create some sort of "frame" around her, but still.... Not sure it was the best choice. I would have place her on the left side since she is looking to the right, thus giving the picture a sense of direction.
I understand you wanted to include the magnificent tree behind her, but right now, the tree is competing with her as the main focus.
Overall, a good picture.
Kindest regards,
Instant-Ocean
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Thank you a lot! You write my first critique
You are in right. I think almost same. I would like if I could set girl a left and tree right, but i can't than do this framing through the rocks.
Thank you
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You are welcome my friend.
I understand now that you had constraints by a whole in a rock wall through which you shot that picture. So I see your point... kinda makes it difficult to do otherwise.
Be well!
IO
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my comarade,ΠΡΡΠΊΡΡΠ°Π½ΡΠΈΠΊ ΠΊΠ°Π²Π°ΠΈΡΡΡΡΡΠ° Π²Π°ΡΠ΅! *Π*
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I like this pic but I do agree with Instant-Ocean that the frame is too big, my eyes couldn't stay looking at her because of the tree. I think it'll be better if you make her body on the left side of the frame and have a lot of space to the right so viewers and have a sense of direction and I think you can all together get rid of the tree since its about her
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I'll second :*Instant Ocean: on the dA mark, it's very distracting. Good picture, lovely model. Thanks for sharing your talent!
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Oh man... What's with the unsightly dA watermark?!? That is SO horrible. Picture is good, but please, get rid of that watermark, mate!
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