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Gabythedinogirl [2012-03-12 04:17:48 +0000 UTC]

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alright, this may be a bit harsh. sorry.

I'm not sure what to think of Mr. Abdulaziz Neon. on the one hand, you certainly know way more about digital art than me, and you probably know quite a bit about drawing dragons. also, I think you're older than me? So take my advice with a grain of salt, because we're at around the same level.

I don't think the neon stripes are working out for him. it's a bit flat. actually, it's really flat. You should try to imagine him in a more three-dimensional space, and try to wrap the stripes around his tail accordingly.

This is a matter of personal taste, but I think the feather/wing combo is kind of silly. reminds me of those sparkledogs that try to be everything at once. not that he's a sparkledragon, nooo. If you want to have leathery wings covered in feathers for whatever reason (maybe it keeps him warm?), you should make them completely cover the wing, and the feathers will likely all be down feathers. while we're on the subject of wings, look up bat wing anatomy, because they don't work that way. (hint: bat wings are like arms with giant spindly fingers and webbing between it all)

Kudos for doing the quadruped shoulder bump thing that I keep forgetting in my work, but the back legs need work, because DANG THOSE THIGHS BE POOFY. and also, they're not connected enough to the pelvis. it's hard to describe. just look up the anatomy of any quadruped. any. the feet are poofy, too.

There's also not enough room for the wing muscles. it's a common problem nearly every dragon artist has, so don't worry about it. I bet I made the same mistake a hundred times, but I'm just around positive I burned all the evidence.

on the subject of not enough muscle, there is also not enough bone. he totally lacks a pelvis to stick those poofy thighs on, and the stomach looks majorly anorexic. seriously, man, where's he gonna put his intestines and stuff? there's barely enough room for the spine as it is! XD

the tail is also unusually long, it could make him unbalanced. also, crazy-long tails have been done before.

can't say much about the ears, because I can barely see them, but I think they needs more of a lid around the top and the bottom, because it's too flat-looking. ditto for the horns. the skull also needs work. yes, I mean his head. the eyes are too close to the mouth. you need to think of the jawbone and the eye sockets, and give them some room.

ok, moving FAR away from the anatomy...

The pose is not dynamic enough for running/flying. it's doesn't even look like he's running. it looks like he's striking a pose in an empty void. if he were running, the tail would not curve like that, the back legs would be set a bit higher in the air (that was a bit cryptic of me, sorry, look at a running dog to see what I mean), his mane would be swept back and flapping in the wind, and he'd be looking forward. the wings would be spread more horizontally if he was preparing to fly. yes, I know that means foreshortening, deal with it.

I'm not sure what you were thinking with the 1pixel wide lines and the minimal shading. it doesn't look all that visually appealing. you should try a different style, either making the lines vary more in thickness, or getting rid of them altogether, and letting the color define the shapes. your choice.

as for color, it's snazzy, but not very realistic. most animals either have dull colors to blend in with the environment, or bright vivid rainbows as a warning sign/mate attractor. Don't get me wrong, he can stay blue, but if you want to have him in a more realistic narrative, you better have a damn good reason why he looks like the lovechild of a zebra and a blue morpho. especially if he doesn't live in a tropical climate.

Now, what am I missing?
oh, right, something positive.
I must say, for all it's flaws, it looks really impressive as a thumbnail! e.deviantart.net/emoticons/b/b… " width="15" height="15" alt="" title=" (Big Grin)"/>
yeah, that's a sucky compliment.

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BettaWyvern [2016-11-14 01:15:03 +0000 UTC]

I like this!

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Jersey-kun [2012-03-28 02:54:39 +0000 UTC]

Love it!~

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TwilightSaint [2012-03-12 14:02:45 +0000 UTC]

He looks great! Thanks!

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PossumFlavored [2012-03-12 04:45:14 +0000 UTC]

hmm, norammly it would have to be more detailed for me to fav, but for some reason i just like it

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Gabythedinogirl [2012-03-12 02:40:31 +0000 UTC]

what exactly do you want critiquing on?

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shadowfiredragon7 [2012-03-11 16:52:26 +0000 UTC]

i love the shades of blue on this dragon

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ookaookaooka [2012-03-11 06:07:11 +0000 UTC]

I think he looks beautiful, but one thing you might want to consider in a future drawing is the tail thickness as it exits the body. On mammals the hips are the widest point on the body, followed by the shoulders (easier to give birth with wider hips). Your dragon is built more like a mammal than a reptile, so the tail might not be as important a part of the body, and so be narrower than the hips. But the best thing about dragons is that nobody knows what they "really" look like, so you can, um, improvise and people will still know it's a dragon.

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amberpretty17 [2012-03-11 05:06:59 +0000 UTC]

awesome

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