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Published: 2010-02-18 20:17:03 +0000 UTC; Views: 4293; Favourites: 132; Downloads: 39
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2H, HB, 2B, 3B, 5B, mechanical pencil 2Bdry paint brush, various erasers on rough paper
this one is from the last scene of twilight but probably everybody already knows ^^
I've worked hard to complete this one, thx to and for any improvement in the contrast
i think i'm on my way to actually do smt with my drawning
waitin for every kind of technical critique ^^ tell me everything u think about this piece (not the subject of it)
other twilight saga related drawnings:
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PS i'd like to partecipate to the couple contest and i need suggestions, i thought about presenting this one but i think that edward and bella are too common during this period so i need smt else, pls help ^^
EDIT: I uploaded a better quality scan
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This is beautiful! I love Bella's hair! It looks just full of life. It's so easy to overwork hair, but you seem to have the technique down pat.
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thx so much for your comment i'm glad in particular that u liked the hair cos it's the part where i experimented most along with her sweater 
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Experimented? It definitely looks like you've got the technique down pat. I love the sweater as well.. I just forgot to comment on it. It takes so much patience to make those two things look really well done - so good job
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nice pencil gallery you got.
why not check out this [link] if you like you can give a watch and i will give you a watch back,thanx.
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oh i will 
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thats great..thanx.
and thanx so much for your watch,you very kind.i will give you a watch back.
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Great piece! *cough* even if it is twilight *cough*... I'm going to try to give an original critique, having read those above, though it may not be 'technical'. I notice looking at the drawing, that the male figure's face isn't on the same plane. What I mean is, his nose and mouth seem to be skewed/rotated a bit from his eyes/head. Otherwise, very nice!
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thx a lot for letting me notice... i have no technical background... i mean i'm completely self taught and so i had a lot of difficulties with the proportions of his face, the way his head is inclined made everything harder and this is the best result i could get back then 
i'm so glad u've liked it anyway
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Oh my!
Very arresting composition with a lot of interesting angles.
Your proportions look pretty good, as does the foreshortening.
You really nailed the look and character of the subjects. You can feel the anticipation and tension in the air. The woman has a great countenance to her face that speaks of both fear and desire.
You have a great range of values in this with plenty of contrast. Her hair looks a bit harsh...almost as if it is sculpted from wood. It looks as if you drew the hair like one would draw ribbons...and thatβs a good idea. Itβs just that the edges of those ribbons, if softened up, would allow the hair to flow more naturally.
Otherwise, good technique use of value changes and transitions to show the planes and contours of the faces and clothing.
It's an excellent piece of work!
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ths so much... about the her hair i tried to experiment a bit, don't really know why... ^^ i'm not good at hyper realistic hair so i tried to do something more "manga-like" but u're right,maybe if they were softened up more it would have been better, thx so much for this critique...
i'm glad u said the proportions where good from your point of view 'cos i know it's my waek point...
thx so much for the critique
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You're welcome! Hey...there is nothing wrong with experimenting with different looks to see what works for you!
As for proportions, yes...they look good. My only question was the man's eye. So i traced an imaginary line from inside his skull to his chin, and it all looked like it lined up to me, so i did not mention it. What you have there, with the guy, is EXTREME foreshortening. Simple foreshortening can be a problem, and you have a piece with foreshortening that is really hard to get right. If proportions bother you, then you can always use a grid to check your proportions.
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thx a lot again
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You're welcome again!
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Gorgeous drawing. Although I'll freely admit I'm not a big Twilight Fan, I can tell you that I still very much enjoy this drawing for its technique and skill!! You have the proportions nicely brought together. Very nice shading and use of tones to give the piece depth and fullness. You have yourself a very nice piece here.
Since you asked for critique on technique...honestly, the only thing I could really suggest or comment on is the shading. Ok, not so much the shading itself since it's gorgeous but more the softening it up. Right now it looks slightly 'rough' as the paper texture shows through the pencil shadings. I've found using some form of blending tool will soften the shading up and take away that paper texture. For the clothing, I say it's up to you since you may very well want that texture, but the skin is where I would definitely recommend a blending tool.(tortillion is what i use, but I've heard of others using Q-tips, kleenex etc...never use your fingers because the oil on your fingers will get into the drawing and will yellow it over time)
Beautiful work! Hope you're able to garner something useful from my long windedness
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i'm so glad u enjoyed the piece in particular 'cos u're not a twilight fan
thx so much for your critique and u spending time over it, it really helped me out
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I am busy at the moment, but as soon as I find a spare moment I will definitely go over and help out as I can! Keep up the great work!
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i'm sorry for asking if u are so busy u don't have to worry at all 
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Oh I really don't mind helping out so long as you're not looking for something right this very second 
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very good job can u see my galary.I expect you to critique
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obviously i'll do, do u like me to critique a piece in particular?
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amazing drawing! i love the shadings and e.g. kristen's eyes and the hair and... everything
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thx a lot dear
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you're welcome
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this is really awesome. and i must say, its nice to see someone who is actually using their talent to make art for twilight instead of using copyrighted material. 
awesome use of pencil!
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thx so much for your comment
thx so much for your compliment on my works
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oh wow thanks, i'll look at their pages now. and you are welcome
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my pleasure
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i ended up watching them both. wow! thank you.
im sorry but i have to watch you too
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u don't have to be sorry at all!! thx so much honey
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I like this piece and your technique is really amazing
But I think Bella's got a different nose and there is no feeling in there gazes ^^
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yeah i know i could do better with the likness in particular in robert case.. it was really difficult for me to draw his face because i have no drawning technical support, i've never studied it at school or anything so sometime prospective and proportion are a little hard for me to get right on the paper ^^
i'm sorry in particular that u found no feeling in their gaze 'cos i tried to work on that ...but it's good to not receive compliments all the time, critics are really useful so i'll try to work harder from now on..
if you have time i'd be really thankful if u'd like to take a look at my other works, to know your point of view and see what i can improve! thx a lot
(sorry if it was long
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Oh don't worry I think you are really talented and you will do it much better next time!
I'm watching you now so I can give you some criticism
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really: thank you!
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