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... I'll have Paris in Flames.Illustration connected to those Poems I've been doing lately. So, yes, he's the character the point of view of the poems is from. I guess I don't say much about RamJak and his story because as a character he's something very close and personal to me. He's got a name created by my mother, the looks and personality of a dear, dear friend whom I've been proud to call my brother. As a character, he's a father, he's way too young to be a father and he's had to grow accustomed to that responsibility. I've always respected the roles Dads and Fathers play so much.
I suppose when it comes down to it, RamJak is my "anima" by Jungian terms... not "manself", that term is way unfitting.
He's also an evolving character. He changes as his story progresses. I may never write his story down except in hints and poems, because like I said. It's personal. And it's hard for me to go into personal stuff without feeling like I'm being criticized, or adversely, feeling like I'm being retarded.
Advanced critique on anatomy if you can ]: *is practicing big time*
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Maybe it's just me, but this made me cry more than I think it should have. ;A;
*would help critique anatomy but sucks at it too much lol*
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<<; i'm afraid to critique sometimes. My friends tell me i get kind of harshe. x.x;
But.. here it goes:
The elbow of his right arm (the arm holding the sheet) seems too filled in. Like a whole chunk of arm verses an arm and a forearm. speaking of forearms.. work on your muscle definition of his biceps. His left arm seems unatural as well. For both arms, work on connecting them to the shoulder. His right arm seems a bit dislocated. And the skin connection with the armpits can use some work as well.
Another thing that i noticed was his torso, The line that leads to his crotch seems a little low. Or maybe it's his neck that's too long that throws me off a bit. I think it's his neck combined with his shoulder.
The last two things that bother me are the heads. On the left side of the picture, the browline for the head seems pushed too far forward. peel it back a bit to make him look less cave-mannish. The last thing that bothers me are the two heads that are facing the viewer. Now, I have this problem too, so you're not alone here, but the jawlines on the left side are curved properly, while the right sides is completely flat.
A good way to catch these problems next time is to flip your paper backwards and shine the art into the light with your sketches. A mirror image gives a different perspective from what we've been looking at while we've been drawing.
I use 'we' cause i do this too from time to time when i want to complete a sketch.
Using stick-skeletons and then fleshing them out is a good practice for newbs with proportion till he or she gets the hang of it. I still do it sometimes.
Overall, despite the flaws that I don't care about: A very emotive peice as always.
I've always admired your ability to color and the emotions and depth you put into peices. ... T-T *so jealous* I guess I lack that kind of dedication that you have.
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That's a TON of help THANKYOU seriously. The mirror image thing is a big help.
Only problem is that I. CANNOT. Do matchstick men. I try and the second I start doing one I lose interest in favor of other details of the picture ];
It takes some patience yeah, this was five. plus. Hours. SOLID. of working D% dshggfj. But if you practice on just headshots and angles for a while that emotion starts to show through really well.
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well i draw match sticks with circle heads, circle hips, and sometimes circle joints with triangle hands and feets. i sometimes do awkward ellipses for the chest too. It usually takes a few seconds for me to sketch out the basic pose, then a few minutes for the fleshy stuffs. Stick women/men are usually supposed to be quick. :/
But yea. The mirror thing is very useful. you can use it in ShiPainter even with the invert horizontally tool I think when and if you use sketch lines before ink lines.
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I seriously can't help but to start drawing the face right away. I KNOW they are supposed to be quick they just don't work for me |:
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I think, the best thing about this is all the different expressions, it makes it feel like the piece is meant to be more than just one idea and it really is supposed to be like that, isn't it? It's less art of a person and more a person of art. And people aren't just one idea. At least, that's what I think it seems like.
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There are no wrong answers for something like this darl <: and what you're saying makes a lot of sense. You're very right; If someone's in a situation like this, they aren't JUST feeling sorrow or anger or fear or being sick or being defiant. Experiencing pure emotion is a difficult thing because they all bleed into each other.
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I know, but a lot of times I'll say something like that and the artist will say "that's not what I tried to do at ALL" and I'll feel really bad >:
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but see, that's the artist's fault, I've recently learned. if they can't communicate a meaning, they messed up somewhere ]:
In SOME cases, yeah, there are wrong answers. But art is really up to the viewer to decide.
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This really came out awesome, I did miss your traditional works, and I can kinda see how working with photoshop and the like for a while has given you ideas for blending and placement in pictures. I like how many different expressions you were able to place in this, it's really striking. Those highlights really show nicely, too.
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Photoshop has really helped me experiment with colors and shading and mixing colors more than I thought, even composition, I guess since the colors have that easy-access pallet and stuff I've been able to mess around more.
The highlights are white marker sghdfsda I am going to KILL that thing I use it so much. It mixes with prisma pencils nicely though, turns them almost paint-like right on the page.
thaaanks a ton ;3;
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