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Morder landing atop a skyscraper to feed on some bodies killed the previous night.Related content
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Me too, although that probably won't do much good.
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Makes me wonder, can Morder be killed? Being at least part animal means something is organic and can be destroyed. A weakness, perhaps. Then no one will ever be scared of Morder if he's dead. Funny how I'm calling Morder a male, when Morder has no gender, being part machine.
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Yeah, he usually roosts on top of tall buildings.
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ah that's interesting.
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1. Thank god this isn't in color.
2. Mordor is a badass.
3. Is that guy crushed?
Either way, I love it. There's a reason the planes eat on the rooftops. No bloody evidence on the ground. Stealth is required for the species, which if found by the humans would quickally be eradicated. Or not.
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Hell yeah Morder's a badass.
None of those people are crushed, just partially eaten.
Thanks. Yep, that's the reason planes carry their prey off to rooftops to eat. Morder is a very stealthful plane since he only attacks at night and takes humans only in seculuded areas such as parks and parking lots.
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Oh, trust me, he really doesn't like messy killings.
Oh, I have to show you this part. Poor Mako is gonna be scared for life after this lol.
Since I'm trying to emulate you, here's my Juvi's first kill too.
This is without a doubt the goriest thing I've ever written. Enjoy. I finally came up with the title. I think you'll like it.
Urban Jungle
Charter 3
Blood calling
First Kill.
Mako soared into the open sky, up into the cover of the clouds. It was a warm, late afternoon in the peak of summer, but the warmth of the sun was lost to the young King Air. He felt only peircing coldness, broken only by a kind of fever heat which had laid a pulsing red haze over hgis vison. He was aware of every hydrolic muscle in his entire streamlined body. For maybe the first time in his short life, he thought about how his body had been put together. He's become alert to his sharp claws and sharper teeth, and now realized what Mordor had been trying to teach him all along. That he had nothing to teach, because he'd known how to do this since the day he hatched. His parents, whom he'd never met, had killed so that he may be born, and in turn he himself had been born to kill. The sounds of the city were to him as the sounds of the jungle were to the jaguar. THe scent of exhaust was as strong as the scent of blood. All around the city humans lived out thier puny lives, completely unaware of the deadly game being playes out on the rooftops above thier heads. They thought they were safe. But the King Airs were smarter then they in this regard. Saftey was an illusion, a trick, a myth. It did not exist. Not here. Not in the Urban Jungle.
Mako was aware of all this and more, for something that had lied dormant in his mind was now wide, wide awake. It had sharpened Mako's senses to razors, everything smelled richer and looked brighter. The young King Air noticed everything around him all at once, his windshields sweeping the city like radar. All of the sudden his gaze stopped on a lone car, which to him was somehow brighter then all the surroundings. His predator sense had spotlighted the most vulnerable target for him. Mako started descending towards the street just far enough away from the car. His instincts kept perfect track of the car, using the sound of it's engine to judge it's distance and location. This was done almost automatically, with almost no concious thought on Mako's part. Mordor had known all along. If he'd told Mako to do this, he wouldn't have been able to. Mordor had also known how to awaken the part of him that captivity had put to sleep. He himself had been rasied the same way, caged and in chains. Subconciously Mako realized this, but right now he was completely focused on his prey. His senses sent endless streams of data to the central computer of his mind. The location of his prey as well as his own were constantly updated. At last Mako landed behind a building, just the right distance ahead of the car, his legs retracting, lethally sharp claws unsheathing just before he touched down. He did not feel fear or anticipation, for the most part he had become emotionally numb. All that was left was cold and a kind of savage thirst. Bloodlust. He also felt a sense of place, of purpose. This was his role in the world, as a hunter, as the only species that was prey to modern day humans, who did not yet know they were back on the food chain. King Airs, in fact all the carnivorus planes, were perfectly designed for hunting humans in their natural urban enviorment. At high altitude they were indistinguishable from normal, nonliving aircraft. Bullets only bounced off of them and they could not be gassed, for they didn't breathe. Thier bite was paralysing as well. Also, unlike most flying creatures, they were as comfortable on the ground as in the air. Mako was a fine specimen. His hydrolic legs were powerful, his claws and teeth sharp as razors. Although he's been fed his entire life, it had taken only one day to kill. And now he was about to kill for the first time.
The car approached the spot where Mako waited at a pace of about fifteen miles and hour. The road here was poorly maintained, full of cracks and potholes. Mako's instincts had judged correctly that the car would have to slow down here. As it rolled towards the building he was hiding behind, he tensed for a second then relaxed almost every mechanical muscle, sliding easily into a crouch,where he could push off and pounce with all his strength. Yet still he remained perfectly relaxed. Mako instinctivly counted down the seconds.
5...4...3...2...1...
As the car came into his view his entire being screamed NOW. His muscles fired hard as he lunged, his propellers adding further momentum as he crashed into the car with almost half a ton of force. There was a loud shriek as his claws ripped the side of the car, almost tearing the door off and sending it tumbling sideways across all four lanes until it came to rest, Mako half leaping, half flying after it. All the windows were broken and the body was bady crumpled, smoke coming out of the mangled hood. Make wasted no time, he gripped the car with his forelegs and put deep slashes in the hood with the large sicle claw on his right hindleg. He then forced his jaws inbetween, his teeth clamped down, and he jerked back, pushing with his forelegs, and tore the roof off in a loud shriek of tearing metal. The humans inside were half stunned by the crash, but at the sight of a ravonus, snarling King Air they went into panic mode, pulling off thier seatbelts in desperation. Mako bit down on one flailing arm, and yanked his unfortunate prey out of the wreckage, nearly tearing it's arm off in the process. The human screamed with pain, yet Mako felt not a stir of pity or remorse. He was supposed to be doing this, after all. He pinned the human down with one claw, digging his nails in, and tore the arm off in one vicicous wrench, bright crimson blood cplashing over him and then spurting onto the street as the human writhed beneath him, shrieking in agony as Mako gulped down the limb hungrily, savoring the rich, warm taste of man-flesh. His prey pounded on his leg but was rapidly losing strength as he bled out. He tore into it's chest, deaf to it's tortured cries, and started slurping down it's intestines like spaghetti, which were warm, wet, and chewy. Fluids and blood dripped down Mako's chest and muzzle, which was caked with gore, loose strips of bloody flesh hanging from his teeth. This was beyond his wildest dreams, was almost too good. The unfortunate human had stopped screaming, it was mercifully in shock and put up no fight as Mako gulped down it's warm, wet innards, smashing the skull open and popping the nice, juicy eyeballs out of thier sockets and then eating the soft, moist brain. All of the sudden Mako heard a small squeak of terror and turned towards the two very frightened humans still trapped in the car and opened his mouth in a wide, toothy, bloody smile.
(I made the other humans WATCH, lol)
Mordor watched all of this from a nearby rooftop. It was a messy kill, loud and with plenty of blood everywhere. He laughed when he saw that Mako was eating the humans one by one. I can smell thier fear from here, he thought to himself. To a carnivorus plane, this was very funny. Humans, after all, could be toys as well as food. He watched Mako repeat the performance with the other two. He's a messier eater then Rave! After watching Mako eat for a few more moments, Mordor decided that was enough and took wing, gliding down to the ground and landing softly about 20 feet away from where Mako stood.
Mako ate slower now, it was aparent that there were no other humans around. Suddenly he heard a metallic click and recognized it as another plane landing. "That's enough!" Mordor commanded, sounding very stern and more then a bit angry. Mako immediatly stopped eating."It's alright, I got al..." He began to say, when without warning Mordor charged him. Mako yelped loudly as he was knocked off his feet and onto his back where Mordor pinned him down with both forelegs. Mako growled and tried to buck Mordor off. The Alpha was so suprised that Mako almost succeded, then suprised was replaced by savage anger and he snarled back, shoving Mako roughly back to the ground, digging his claws deep into Mako's chest. The young plance whimpered loudly in pain and stopped struggling."You'd better show me some respect, Fledgeling!" Mordor shrieked, his jaws inches from Mako's face,"Or I'm going to make you wish you'd never hatched! Am I clear!?" Mako nodded quickally, fear rolling off him in waves. Mordor realized this was not his fault, he's been raised in human captivity and did not know the ways of his own kind. He felt a rare emotion among maneating planes
When they got back Mako immediatly landed next to Darkwing. She took in the blood and gore on Mako's chest, neck, and jaw, and the frightened, body language he was displaying, and deduced what had happened. Mako had made a messy kill, and Mordor had repremended him for it. She glared at Mordor. He didn't have to be so hard on him, Darkwing thought as she soothed the shaking juvinille. Mordor himself knew he's done his job and so felt no guilt. Still, he decided that it was best he left Mako alone for a while, so he took off and flew the short distance to his own nest. "It's alright, Mako," Darkwing soothed, knowing exactly how the young plane felt. SHe herself had been taught in the same way by Mordor when she was a Juvinille,"You did alright. Mordor only meant to show you how to kill, now he'll teach you how to hunt properly. This will take some time,you'll never stop learning to hunt better. For now though, be happy with what you've accomplished. You're a hunter now. Mordor will make you an excellant hunter. For now, just rest. Youve earned it." Mako lied down and let Darkwing lick him clean. He was indeed very tired, and didn't stir for the rest of the night.
2 hours after the police came, helecopters touched down all over the city. Big ones.
Army ones.
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So, how did I do?
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So far I really like your story. I like your writing style and how everything is so well-described. And oh yes, I love the gore. You described the mulitation very well.
Man, Morder was sure hard on poor Mako. He's going to remember that for a long time. At least he'll carry his prey off to rooftops to eat from now on. Darkwing seemed really sweet and affectionate, far from the bloodthirsty killer she is.
I'm really looking forward to see what happens next with the army coming in.
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Blood thirsty killer to humans. Not to frightened juvinilles. The point is they are not mindless bloodthirsty demons. Well, not to each other. We're just thier favorite food.
Today I had someone reading that part. It was funny to watch thier facial expression go from blank to "Oh god that's nasty!" I was laughing my head off.
Did you notice how sick I am that I made Mako eat one human while the other two trapped ones had to WATCH? That's about the sickest thing I've ever done in a story.
It's Mordor's job to be hard on him. With a normal juvi he wouldn't, but since Mako has been raised in captivity he has to give him the proverbeal shock treatment. Half his childhood was spent either chained or caged.
Oh, trust me, the army does something really bad to make the planes really angry.
Hint: What's the most important thing they do in life? And what could you destroy that they hold most precious?
Also, I think I came up with the very last part, I mean the very end. It makes sense, since the humans created them, then they might know how to communicate to them. So in the very end the humans try to make some sort of peace offering. Mordor says this:
"The sounds of the city are to us as the sounds of the forest are to the jaguar. Do you really think you are safe? Saftey is an illusion, a trick, a myth. It does not exist. Not here. Hunting your kind is our birthright, our bloodright, our purpose in this world, and on the rooftops is where you die! The blood and oil will flow freely, and death will fly on wings of blazing steel. I have only one thing left to say to you, human beings.
Welcome to the Urban Jungle!"
You just made an epic speech, Mordor. Nice.
And no, I didn't put "Do you really think you are safe?" in there for no reason.
For some reason, when I envison the planes hunting humans, I'm always reminded of this song.
[link]
The humans are the scum of the earth, and the King Airs, Concordes, and Boeings will cleanse the world of them forever
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Yeah, they aren't just vicious bloodthirsty mindless killers. At least not to their own kind. I like to think of them more than just that, but it's kinda hard to see that since I always draw my planes killing people.
lol I did something like that to someone once. But it was with some horror movie.
Yep I did notice that when the people in the car were forced to watch Mako devour the other one. Most people would consider that disturbing, yet I thought it was awesome 
That makes sense. Since he was raised in captivity, Mako probably doesn't know much about proper King Air behavior. So when Mako adapts more, will Morder ease up on him?
Probably the most important thing to the planes are their nests. Not only would it be a tremendous blow to them if they lost their eggs/young, the nests are the planes' place of refuge as well as the central point in the pack's territory. If the nests were to be destroyed, the planes would no longer have the place of refuge and would be constantly feeling vulnerable.
I love Morder's speech. It's really powerful and I feel like it's a good strong ending for your story.
I love that song. Rob Zombie is awesome.
Another point about the planes that you might find useful: the King Airs' saliva contains a potent neurotoxin that paralyzes their prey's legs. It is delivered when a King Air bites deeply into a human and takes about an hour for it to set in. They use this to their advantage when they carry humans to their nest to eat later. However most of the King Air's prey is eaten right away.
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I do know they paralyze. And you guessed right. An A-10 apache longbow, aka the millitary, blow Mako's young sky high.I can't wait to write in his reaction.
They actually planned to eradicate the species by killing off all thier young, since they were the weakist targets. This makes the planes so murderous they all turn into a frenzied swarm and kill every single human in New York city. At this point the humans know what they're up against and have to prepare for battle. The prize is existance, the loser becomes extinct.
Mako:
O.O
That helecopter won't be in mint condition by the time he's done with it.
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I can't wait to see Mako's reaction after his nest gets blown up. He'll probably go on a huge killing spree.
That sounds really awesome. No doubt since the planes are so rageful and want vengence. And also they are predators. No one stands a change against a swarm of flesh-eating planes. I hope the planes win the battle for existance.
That helicopter will probably only be pieces of charred wreckage.
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He kills the pilot and the helecopter crashes into the side of a building, smashes glass, then falls to the ground and explodes.
Oh man, it's so sad though. I cried when I wrote it. I decided to have the chopper use it's guns instead of a missle. The nasty part? Rynn dies instantly, but Galm doesn't. Galm dies in agony. He was the more innocent of the two. He didn't die just because I wanted to be grizzly, he died because of the effect it would have on the reader. It's a very sad scene, and I think it shows that despite being loveless beings these planes have hearts. And those hearts can be broken. It's really, really sad. Also, shortly after Mako hears machinegun ratttles all over the city and knows what happened. And then he, and the reader themselves, will get very VERY VERY angry. If I can't desensitize the reader to theier own kind, the least I can do is make the reader H-A-T-E the humans in this story.
I'm afraid they wanted Mordor back, so Mordor is gonna be my toy angry prisonar for a little while until he gets busted out. I expect him to be very entertaining 
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Awesome scene of destruction you got there
Aww, poor hatchlings 
Morder will not be taken prisoner easily. Since he was already caged, he would probably fight back more viciously than most other planes. I wonder how he'll escape.
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Mordor is going to have an electricity hangover
Dart with electrical discharge battery.
Also, he's going to be cranky when he wakes up to find he's tightly strapped to the ground
Actually, I think Mako will spring him, though. I wanna keep him humble
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Ouch. Poor Morder. Those humans had better be careful around him when he wakes up. Hopefully he'll escape somehow.
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Of course he will. But I think he might, I'm not so sure, but I think they'll get him in the end. At least that's how hollywood would do it.
The very end I've figured out. Mako is going to find a plane that escaped from captivity, a very young hatchling, and the story will come full circle. That would be the best way to end this, I think.
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Yeah. Gotta have the hero escape somehow. And also this is Morder we're talking about.
That sounds like a good way to end it. It feels right to me.
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And I end it there, where everyone wants more. Evil writer is evil
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ALL the planes heard the gunfire and screeching. They all did.
I got some good ideas for the fight itself. One of them is that when they shoot missles at the concordes, the concordes respond by grabbing cars, diving straight down, and letting them go so they hit the missles. I think it would be nice to have those cars not so empty. And of course the Empire State Building will be going bye bye. Also the Sears Tower, which is VERY big. I can imagine it won't fall down neatly, probally decimate a couple buildings.
There's a very simple way for the planes to pen everybody in. New York is an island, and it's connected to the mainland with about 3 suspension bridges. All the planes have to do is chew a couple cables.
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That's a good way for the Concordes to avoid the missiles. Another way could be the planes would fly toward a building and veer away sharply just in time so the missile would hit the building instead. That is really awesome that your planning to destroy the Empire State Building and the Sears Tower. I love scenes of destruction like that. Of course the planes would love that. Lots of humans trapped in the wreckage for them to munch on.
I love your idea of them penning the population of New York by having the planes chew through the bridge cables. Once again, I love destruction scenes, especially if it's being carried out by killer planes.
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Awesome. I like your shading, especially on the buildings and sky.
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I luvs it, its awesome!!
The only thing i'd suggest is to go over the teeth again and make them darker. they're a little difficult to see.
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Thanks.
Thanks for the advice. The teeth are kinda hard to see. I'll go over them again.
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DO IT! or i'll turn into a plane and flop on your house
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just some Wall Street scums...they won,t be missed by anybody! Death to Corprate Facists!
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can,t wait till it all blows up in their faces!
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Thank you. Yep, he's had good hunting.
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He must never miss a kill.
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Yeah. He's a very successful hunter
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Oh yeah, but not as successful as the Killer Kingairs.
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Well, I think they're more agile and maybe a bit quicker. I don't really know
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Morder is faster than King Airs, but both planes are very agile.
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True... but they are both out-matched... by the Concordes.
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Maybe, but Morder and the King Airs are both vicious predators but the Concordes are faster and attack in larger groups than the King Airs, and Morder is a solitary hunter.
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So... who's your favourite then?
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I don't know, I like all my killer planes.
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Okay then, cool. I've always like Morder and Scar the most.
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As much as I love all my OC's, I think I like the Concordes better, because the Concorde is my favorite plane and they are the first killer plane I came up with. Morder is a close second.
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I actually got the idea for the killer Concordes in 2002, when I was 12.
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