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A story of an entire life.I Am Child, I Am Man. written in a hand that can.
I Am Love, I Am Hate. spoken words on writtens cave
I Am Fearless, I Am Fear. the light of life casts a shadow.
I Am Many, I Am None. on my first birthday I was One.
I Am Telling, I Am Known.
i am selling the peoples clone.
I Am Teachers, I Am Legion = one in six makes six one, divide to mulitply and change the sum.
I Am Student
I Am Hear: "r, a". eHm! AI|
|Written in BLOOD deep beneath the skin tells me I believe in sin.
I Am Lost.
I Am Here, how did I just disappear?
Sleeping in front of the mirror, it came to pass I awoke right here.
I was absent of thought and full of emotion. I began to smile and felt a tear.
The answer was truth and the truth was simple, forget what you know right out the window.
The I Am & the I ams.
my life and yours, so differently were we the same, seperated in communications game.
before we knew hate we first knew love, love was lost, and returned above.
we made an image in place of love, since love knew not hate not even today.
the image was not enough for us, so we created more and called it trust.
we placed our hope in our creation, and said we will build all nations.
secretly we thought one against the other not knowing ourselves we faked a lover.
i was right in my own mind, you knew that, so you left me be. likewise, I agree.
this is what they want me to be, i saw it all and called it tv.
why do we hurt each other, i really don't know! i really don't know!
i matured much in seek of truth, and told my stories to all the youth.
the day came, i was born again, i was free from all my sin.
i felt ashamed for misleading the youth, i repented from all i knew.
i had lived many lives, while the me inside slowly died.
i had to forget all i'd learned maybe then love would return.
my head was clear the canvas was finally empty and pure.
shh, just wait, listen and hear.
the mystery above it's all right here,
"r, a". eHm! AI
have you figured it out?
The answer was truth and the truth was SIMPLE.
Copyright 2007-2008 ck www.artravingmad.com
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Comments: 64
I love this~! I especially like the long stanza towards the end. The beginning was okay, but it made me smile none the less.
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I couldn't find the deviation you just linked to in thumbshare, so I ended up here ;D
I think you have some interesting ideas...but the repetition and overuse of rhymes isn't doing it for me. But since it's a ballad it has the potential to work. I don't believe the text alone is strong enough, but with some musical accompaniment and creative tempo it could make something really good
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Thanks for the comment, sorry I took almost 3 years to reply
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" The answer was truth and the truth was SIMPLE."
that.. is.. ..kind of deep
this is beautiful, thanks for writing it
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I am speechless, this is so deep and beautiful. It holds a truth that I can relate to from within, yet I've never felt a connection with that truth until now. I'm in awe, superb job.
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I am very glad you liked it
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touched me on so many levels you might as well be a rapist.
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You managed to convey a very powerful message. This piece is fantastic.
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thanks, I'm very glad you liked it.
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i must comment again on how much i love this.
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Wow, if this was meant to be as deep as I interpreted it; That being, throughout reading it I had so many thoughts stimulated and really felt a connection with what you wrote in its entirety. Not to mention, your main topic seems to soar across so many different topics, and within every emotion. Combine this with your art, and I'd conclud that you're a genius. I'll have my eye open for you in the news, I forsee it not being long until you make it big man.
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Thankyou very much for your support, I really appreciate it!
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hey how are you?
You had a nice christmas?
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months later, yes 
so how ya doin?
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well explained
it's something we will continue to struggle with for awhile...
but, yea, Lit-wise = It was a great piece, good rhythm, good choice of words and good usage of said words...
Good Job.
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reminds me of the book i`m reading ~liquid love from Zigmund Bauman~
great job!!
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"Written in BLOOD deep beneath the skin tells me I believe in sin. "
I love that line. This entire poem is amazing, especially that first stanza.
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thanks, I really appreciate your comment
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the mystery above it's all right here,
"r, a". eHm! AI
have you figured it out?
It's "I Am Hear" backwords ^_^. So is the secret you mention implying if we had not language we'd become perfect? That as a youth prior to learning a language we know not any of mans corruptions? Am I following you at all?
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