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Published: 2004-05-19 15:02:13 +0000 UTC; Views: 130; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 14
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Description I don't know what this means and to me it seems complete but I will put it here until I find something else to complete it. It does seem complete but also its missing something as well. A couple of my friends helped me with this, one of them [link] (go visit her page) helped write it and my other friend who does not have a DA account helped with the title although she doesn't know it...
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caffee - In Passing
Comments: 12

dcmbrnite [2004-08-03 16:25:34 +0000 UTC]

I think this is beautifully written, simply written (in terms of word choice) however that is not a negative thing in fact it strengthens the piece. The title I feel doesn't suit the poem at all because when I read it I got the feeling of detachment of some sort.. like a sense of saddness (mental struggles) but then the second stanza seems to bring the 'lonely ones' together... anyway, perhaps a better title will complete the piece for you, but I think this is complete. You could elaberate if you want to but I think it great as is.

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caffee In reply to dcmbrnite [2004-08-06 07:55:01 +0000 UTC]

Thank babe Yeah I didn't know how to title it and seeing as this is the description that one of my friends gave this piece I settled with that.

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cyrus577 [2004-08-01 03:00:28 +0000 UTC]

I really liked the line "to make dark the sun..." for some reason. It really captivated me. Very well done.

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caffee In reply to cyrus577 [2004-08-01 14:04:12 +0000 UTC]

Thanks ^_^

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ralasterphecy [2004-07-04 17:07:08 +0000 UTC]

Powerful...to say the least. I think this may be your best. Definitely a for me.

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caffee In reply to ralasterphecy [2004-07-06 02:58:39 +0000 UTC]

Aww thanks sweetie. I've missed you, I was waiting for you to come and see my work come and visit me again soon ok you?

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homesickalien-Gareth [2004-06-08 11:46:23 +0000 UTC]

really nice work

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caffee In reply to homesickalien-Gareth [2004-06-08 16:35:47 +0000 UTC]

Thanks

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garberlish [2004-05-20 04:33:37 +0000 UTC]

SHE'S RIGHT IT IS FANTASTIC i helped i helped i came up with one whole word....you figured out the rest or did you find the other copy when you got home?

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caffee In reply to garberlish [2004-05-20 04:35:00 +0000 UTC]

This is the other copy and thanks

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cornflakes [2004-05-19 22:20:50 +0000 UTC]

wow! this poem is awesome!

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caffee In reply to cornflakes [2004-05-20 02:55:28 +0000 UTC]

Ta darl *hugs*

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