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Burr-Rose — Taste of Freedom
Published: 2008-09-25 02:04:56 +0000 UTC; Views: 143; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 5
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Description You surprised me.
You opened my cage door,
And let me out.
Even though I was still chained,
The taste of freedom was potent.

Being able to spread my wings a little.
Being able to walk on my own.
Being able to see the world anew.
Being able to touch a friend,
Without steel bars between us.

All are things most take for granted.
They have those things at their finger tips.
They wouldn't last,
Wouldn't survive,
If all those things were taken from them.

That's what happened almost four years ago,
When they gave me to you.
I thought nothing could be as bad as before,
When I was with Her,
But I was wrong.
At least before I was not bond,
I was free.

And nothing,
Nothing at all,
Compares to being free.
The air beneath my wings,
The ability to choose where I went,
The chose of what to do,
All so sweet to the soul.

Four years have passed since I remember tasting the sweetness.
Four long, lonely, empty years.
There were short times,
small tastes,
of what my soul desired,
But what those memories are gone.
I can't remember.

That must be why it hurts.
I'm sure you've done this to me before.
What my minds does to prevent the pain,
Only makes it worse the next time around.

You opened my cage door,
And let me out.
Even though I was still chained,
The taste of freedom was potent.

But when I tried to fly,
like any caged bird would when given the chance,
You yank the chine still binding me,
Throw me back in my cage,
And close the door.
You yell at me,
scold me,
for trying to fly.

Who do you think you are, trying to be like everyone else?
Who do you think you are, trying to have a life?
Who do you think you are, trying to have dreams and make them come true?
Who do you think you are, getting angry when I insult you?
Who do you think you are, trying to better yourself?

You are nothing.
You are worthless.
You are stupid, ugly, and sinful.

If I'm so bad,
What about you?
You let me out of my cage,
But only briefly,
Then torment me for wanting more,
For wanting to fly.

One day,
I pray,
I will be truly free.
I will not just taste this sweet freedom
Every now and then,
And then have that memory tarnished.
I will have it all.
I will be truly, completely free.
I pray.

So, after all, you didn't surprise me.
I had just made myself forget
The taste of freedom.
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Comments: 20

BBKatsu1 [2009-12-06 23:24:44 +0000 UTC]

oh and i forgot to say
i like how the first line is that you were surprised to be let out..

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Burr-Rose In reply to BBKatsu1 [2009-12-07 06:55:47 +0000 UTC]

Thanks so much for the comments and favorites. I truly enjoy all such support.

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BBKatsu1 In reply to Burr-Rose [2009-12-08 00:41:49 +0000 UTC]

you're welcoome

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BBKatsu1 [2009-12-06 23:24:11 +0000 UTC]

wow that is a very emotional peice..
although it is long, this does to consolidate the feelings, as opposed to ramble on, so thats GOOD

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3wyl [2009-03-08 21:50:17 +0000 UTC]

The emotion is so raw in this piece. The repetition emphasises that and the message is just... wow.

I've felt like that too.

Are you ok now?

Well written indeed.

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Burr-Rose In reply to 3wyl [2009-03-09 00:05:49 +0000 UTC]

Thank you very much. I am glad that the emotions got through. I am also glad you liked it.

I feel much better after venting through poems. I tend to do it a lot. I don't know if I have posted any of my other poems on this site yet.
Thank you also for the fave and watch.

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3wyl In reply to Burr-Rose [2009-03-09 19:45:50 +0000 UTC]

Ah yes, I am the same.

Likewise.

I'm looking forward to reading more of your stuff.

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Burr-Rose In reply to 3wyl [2009-03-10 02:54:05 +0000 UTC]

I don't keep this site very up-to-date. I always forget to and DA isn't too writer-friendly. I am a member of a writer's site that is almost completely up-to-date.
I really need to start posting again.

I just remembered how lazy I've gotten in the past while.

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3wyl In reply to Burr-Rose [2009-03-10 08:26:36 +0000 UTC]

How do you mean writer-friendly?

Lol

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Burr-Rose In reply to 3wyl [2009-03-11 01:55:32 +0000 UTC]

I hardly see literature on the "Most Popular" pages and I don't think most people take the time to read stuff that isn't short. They come to this site expecting pictures and don't pay much attention to writing.
But I'm biased. My writing doesn't get a lot of attention and it saddens me. And I have only met 2 really popular writers on this site in my time here, and one of them was kicked off because of her Twilight lemons. That saddens me, too.

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3wyl In reply to Burr-Rose [2009-03-11 20:20:09 +0000 UTC]

Ah...

Yes, quite true.

Hmm... Twilight lemons? O.o

Eh, the literature spirit is still there. Just have faith, or whatever it is.

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Burr-Rose In reply to 3wyl [2009-03-11 20:25:50 +0000 UTC]

Apparently DA bans lemon writers saying it is porn.
That, of course, makes no sense considering some of the filtered artwork I have seen over the months of browsing are just like lemons, only a different medium, and those artists aren't blocked.
I should shut up now before I rant too much.

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3wyl In reply to Burr-Rose [2009-03-11 20:44:01 +0000 UTC]

Lol, I see now.

Tis sad indeed...

How long ago was this?

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Burr-Rose In reply to 3wyl [2009-03-11 21:46:55 +0000 UTC]

Hmmm.... Crap. I have a horrible memory for dates.... about 3 to 5 months ago, maybe. Thankfully she posts on FanFic so I can keep myself updated on her work. But DA shouldn't have had a problem with her because she took great care to forewarn readers of her piece's content and it was wonderfully done. Such unfair treatment is completely uncalled for.
Sometimes I think DA has a popularity complex. When someone gets too popular they ban them.
But that's another biased opinion and just plain spiteful.

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3wyl In reply to Burr-Rose [2009-03-12 08:14:53 +0000 UTC]

Lol, fair point.

Ah well, it's in the past. Can't she rejoin?

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Burr-Rose In reply to 3wyl [2009-03-13 01:37:50 +0000 UTC]

They would just ban her again if she did. Besides, if they can't accept her genius than they don't deserve her.

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3wyl In reply to Burr-Rose [2009-03-13 20:39:40 +0000 UTC]

Quite true there.

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Burr-Rose In reply to 3wyl [2009-03-14 03:25:26 +0000 UTC]

Mmhmm. I will just hold my grudge in silence and try to remember to actually update my profile.

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3wyl In reply to Burr-Rose [2009-03-14 11:53:26 +0000 UTC]

Lol

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Burr-Rose In reply to 3wyl [2009-03-14 16:16:40 +0000 UTC]

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