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blushingsilly07 β€” The Morning After

Published: 2004-08-06 19:55:53 +0000 UTC; Views: 325; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 7
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Description Dust covered
I catch reality with a thin sigh
(and find an aching kiss
on my skin,
where I left it)

Wake with
eyes that glisten
burn
and spill
assaulting the rift
from the night before

But take your sympathies
lock them
behind your teeth
I’m not broken
just torn

It’s the deciding moment
in this room
(in this heart)
the morning after
to pick up the pieces
and think wiser
before
putting them
back
together
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Comments: 32

crypticscorpio [2004-08-25 18:12:44 +0000 UTC]

such strong words
they flow so well
in a matter-of-fact way that exactly fits the poem.

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blushingsilly07 In reply to crypticscorpio [2004-08-25 18:53:09 +0000 UTC]

thank you very much

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genuinecrisis [2004-08-10 21:00:41 +0000 UTC]

"But take your sympathies
lock them
behind your teeth
I’m not broken
just torn"

Love this stanza. The whole piece is very deep.
-tif

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blushingsilly07 In reply to genuinecrisis [2004-08-11 02:38:46 +0000 UTC]

thanks i'm glad you liked it

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frankienexus [2004-08-09 01:07:08 +0000 UTC]

battered and brusied she picks up her soul, used hard used well
she was so strong in that violent storm
how we watched her battle the elements
in awe of her power and her beauty

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blushingsilly07 In reply to frankienexus [2004-08-09 02:02:55 +0000 UTC]

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Trapt-Obsession [2004-08-08 21:06:17 +0000 UTC]

But take your sympathies
lock them
behind your teeth
I’m not broken
just torn

My favorite, though I love it all, I adore that. ANOTHER FAV! Devwatch too.

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blushingsilly07 In reply to Trapt-Obsession [2004-08-09 00:18:13 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much your kind comments mean a lot

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bittersweetpoet [2004-08-08 19:34:06 +0000 UTC]

mandy, i thinkt his one needs work. you have such good ideas but it just seems that you didn't know how to carry this piece. its interesting- yes but you just seemed to lose me in it...not lose me in it where i would be dumbfounded and befuddleded with the attention and care that you would put into it and the stories unfolding...

but you lost me becuase i wasn't sure where you were trying to go

sigh- i'ms orry that i missed this ones message

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blushingsilly07 In reply to bittersweetpoet [2004-08-09 00:21:12 +0000 UTC]

hmm I thought the message was a lot less obscure than usual. Bascially I was trying to convey that after the 'night's' had its way its the next morning that you decide how to take it - and here, i was trying to get through, i wanted to be stronger.
I'm sorry you didn't get the message, but thank you for your comments

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bittersweetpoet In reply to blushingsilly07 [2004-08-09 00:45:27 +0000 UTC]

sorry...i feel like i let you down.

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ParisInFlames- [2004-08-07 19:21:55 +0000 UTC]

The first stanza, after reading back a few times, really makes a big difference in this.. the return to reality, the "waking up" that goes with this poem, so eloquently expressed. It's the coming back down to earth that hurts and that you have to make adjustments for. All the thought and discussion and fights, hurt and emotion that come with a relationship come out in this, which is awesome..
Gorgeous and thought-provoking.

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blushingsilly07 In reply to ParisInFlames- [2004-08-09 00:48:35 +0000 UTC]

thank you, I was thinking so much when I wrote this, i'm relieved to hear you got to the heart of it, i was skeptical at first.

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AoidesProtege [2004-08-07 13:19:32 +0000 UTC]

Wonderful, expression, relative... as usual, Mandy, you astonish me. I wish I had a dollar for every time that your poetry took my breath away, because if I did, I would split the ends with you - and we'd both be a great deal richer.

I love this poem, by the way. It means so much more in this early hour of the day than one will ever know. You are haunting, and your words are lasting. I can't wait to read more; as always.

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blushingsilly07 In reply to AoidesProtege [2004-08-07 15:52:01 +0000 UTC]

wow you always have the nicest things to say to me, thank you Lauren, you are a wonderful person

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xmidnightmelodyx [2004-08-07 11:39:17 +0000 UTC]

This just oozes inner strength and the ability to learn
good job

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blushingsilly07 In reply to xmidnightmelodyx [2004-08-07 12:29:41 +0000 UTC]

thank you! I like that thought, it makes me feel strong

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shadowed-angel [2004-08-07 05:29:11 +0000 UTC]

that is incredible!! i love the last part especially!
when i read the line "I'm not broken, Just torn" i thought of the Natalie Imbruglia song "Torn"

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blushingsilly07 In reply to shadowed-angel [2004-08-07 06:52:03 +0000 UTC]

oo good song. thank you you are incredibly kind and supportive

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fallingstar007 [2004-08-07 04:29:17 +0000 UTC]

wow! i love the 2nd stanza.. it's really powerful! great poem, i get a lot from it!

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blushingsilly07 In reply to fallingstar007 [2004-08-07 04:50:32 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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hatsoff2mrcobain [2004-08-07 04:22:45 +0000 UTC]

Wow, really wonderful work. What else can I say to you? You amaze me everytime.

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blushingsilly07 In reply to hatsoff2mrcobain [2004-08-07 04:25:25 +0000 UTC]

thank you, you are so kind, it honestly means a lot to know my work is appreciated

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Soul-Of-Fire [2004-08-07 01:51:44 +0000 UTC]

As usual, you've outdone yourself once again. I don't know why, but I pictured all of this by moonlight...I don't think that was intended, but you know Awesome stuff.
Keep it real.
~Sha~

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blushingsilly07 In reply to Soul-Of-Fire [2004-08-07 03:44:11 +0000 UTC]

lol, well it was the MORNING after, but that was a metaphor anyway, so I guess nite works too!
take care darling

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LadyVolume [2004-08-07 01:10:03 +0000 UTC]

Mmhm. The last stanza laces it all together and leaves the reader in awe and thinking about their own afflictions. Marvelous!

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blushingsilly07 In reply to LadyVolume [2004-08-07 03:46:29 +0000 UTC]

Yay I'm glad you say that, I have the worst trouble with endings, and to me, that's the most important part because it's the last thing the reader remembers, your last shot at an impact. thanks gal

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wandersalone [2004-08-07 00:12:22 +0000 UTC]

wow. bravo. me loves it. hehe

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blushingsilly07 In reply to wandersalone [2004-08-07 03:48:33 +0000 UTC]

thank you, thank you very much I'm so glad

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DistortedEternity [2004-08-06 23:09:05 +0000 UTC]

This is amazing! I love the last stanza, I shall take that advice lol. Lovely job!

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blushingsilly07 In reply to DistortedEternity [2004-08-07 03:49:30 +0000 UTC]

lol thank you, I had hoped it was good advice, at least something someone would consider. thanks for your awesome comments and for the

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DistortedEternity In reply to blushingsilly07 [2004-08-07 03:54:49 +0000 UTC]

It does have good advice!! Nice job, I really liked it!! nd your welcome!

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