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Published: 2011-04-11 01:27:27 +0000 UTC; Views: 1273; Favourites: 65; Downloads: 6
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I can still taste you on my tongue.I can still feel your body next to mine.
I can still hear you whispering in my ear.
I can still smell your scent on my skin.
But the truth is,
my room is completely
still.
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hello,
i'm trying to understna this human emotion for "cuddles"
- so
CUDDLE is a verb for your missingness.
- seems liek one could self cuddle,
is that the smae.
- . must fav all cuddle stories
-- from you local alien ..
i study you wierd humans,
so sweet you are
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why did it send it twice ><
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The room is still and so is life when it turns that way huh?
nothing moving other than your mind.
well written, the repetition is good and not over done.
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Whaaaat? No one's commented yet?
I really feel for you. Though being a ninja favouriter quite often myself, I'm no less guilty than many others.
After seeing no one else had commented, I just had to leave one and say: this is brilliant. I love, love, LOVE how you refer back to your use of the word "still" at the end of this poem. It really resonates with me. I can really feel how "still" life and that moment and the viewpoint's environment is. It's so simple and poignant, and I think that's what nailed me between the eyes concerning how you tied this piece up.
Beautiful work, keep writing!
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oh wow thank you! I normally dont reply to comments but you deserve it thank you very very much!
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Not a problem! This was a pleasure to read.
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