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Bitch assignment #1 - GET TO IT!-For all mah bitches that signed up in the journal, it's time for you to say your most hurtful comments and strict criticism. Remember that there is no such thing as "boundaries" or "crossing the line" at this point. And even though I'm am a little bit terrified of what I'm asking for, do your worst, people. *braces self*
Scene from PMD, we're just gonna pretend that happens in the game. Yes, those white things are supposed to be flowers. (lolololol I'm gonna get a ton of crap for those, they look awful). Fernan (Mudkip) and Ranon (Turtwig) are just running around, being tards as usual.
... It's too damn cold in my house.
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I swear that is one of the most adorable Mudkip I've ever seen fffff. *steals*
Really awesome, can't get over how beautiful the coloring is.
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How freaky. A friend of mine traded a Hoppip called Kaili with me. Because they needed my Kadabra so they could evolve it.
But such a cute picture
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lol, that is weird!
Thank you!
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Gosh darnit. I don't wanna be mean about such a lovely picture. D'8 But...
MKAY, MISSY! D8< Those flowers and grass...we need moar detail, woman! Perhaps shading. And variation with the different shades of green -- it's generally just the same colour all round And Ranon should prob'ly look more turtwig-y -- The pose also suggests that he's on a big slant leaning to the left, along with the shading on the pavement (Which kind of...disappears later on in the path 
...I feel like such a betch. *faves* And soz for the
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What's up with those flowers in the front? It looks like SNOW! D: < And how about adding some more blades of grass in the front and some darker greens! Get some variation in there so we can see the difference between the grass and the HOPIP!
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Why does the grass have to be the same damn color as those Hopip leaves! D< GET SOME VARIATION IN THERE SO WE CAN SEE TEH POKEMANZ!
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Lol, you have the comments arranged from oldest to new. >>;; I double posted thinking it didn't work!
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Alright. Be a bitch, BE a bitch, be A BITCH, I can do this.
One hoppip seems to be missing a tail, you damn twat! The turtwig looks deformed as though somebody crushed it while it was an embryo. The mudkip's fins don't all match color.
Admittedly, I like the flowers.
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... You honestly just made me laugh my ass off xDDDD
Oh jeez, apparently I did miss a tail. Silly me, I must've chopped it off and put it in my soup
lol, I was told that it doesn't look like a Turtwig at all, so I may end up re-designing him (or trashing him) as an OC.
And as for the Mudkip, I don't know what you're talking about >>' There's shading, yes.
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Yay for me? I WAS SUPPOSED TO BE A BITCH, NOT A COMEDIAN.
How was that soup? I personally think hoppip tails are lacking a bit in flavor and add some garden herbs to spice it up a bit.
It looks like a mustache growing a turtle below it. What is he like though? If he appeals to your audience, just re-design him.
...Plot point perhaps? -_^
I tend to like small shiny things, so I didn't notice the shading.
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Well, all the other stuff I'd critique has been said already, so I'll say something else I noticed.
Ranon needs to look, well, more like a Turtwig. D:
I can't see her shell, which should be poking out of her back a little, her lower jaw should be yellow, with her upper "lip" just being slightly more noticeable.
Oh, and as awesomely adorable and great as it looks already... Turtles don't run like that. D:
The anatomy seems more mammalian.
OKAY I'M SORRY YOU CAN KILL MY NOW I'M SO SORRY AAAUUGHGHH
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... Ranon is a boy xDDDD;;;
In Ava's comment the shell was mentioned, I actually forgot completely about it rather than just leaving it out. I'm bad about using refrences >>'
I'm thinking of just giving him a full-out redesign once this whole thing is over, I got a lot of complaint that he doesn't look like a Turtwig, so...
lol, I'll keep that in mind, thanks ^^
YOU DIDN'T DO BAD I SWEAR. I NEEEEED THIS.
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Lawl, i'm late to hope aboard the critiscm bandwagon, sorry. xD
The grass is flat and needs more detailing, the flowers do as well.
The angle of the picture itsself has me a little confused too; almost as though someone is laying down or kneeling in the grass or something, but then there are hoppip that look like they're flying overhead.
It just clicked; it almost looks like they're going into like, a grass tunnel. .... Not sure why that came to mind. O.o
The mudkip strikes me as near perfect. The pose it's in looks wonderful, and the expression is cute. However, the mouth seems to be places a little low, maybe scoot that up a wee bit?
The turtwigs' face and head look awesome, but the body somewhat reminds me of something playing leapfrog. If you changed the position of the back legs, I think it would look fine.
....
I failed. xD
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No, it's never to late~!
The grass, the flowers, I know xD I've got plenty on that, lol.
You got it right! 
If you mean how the mouth is usually connected to the line on the mouth, I know that's misplaced. A lot of people change the design on that for OC's because it's much easier to draw, so that's what's going on there o3o Ranon is just supposed to be running, to clear any confusion there, but I'll remember that for next time
You didn't fail, that was actually better than some people xD;
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Ohlawd, reminded me of that three days grace song or whatever.. xD
Yeah, i'm aware that people alter the designs for their oc, but.. I thought i'd say something, it was bothering me. Sorry. xD
Whoot, glad I helped, somewhat.. xD
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Brace Yourself.
1. The hair; it's awful. Pokemon don't have hair like that, so it it looks very awkward and unnatural, like a bad toupee. I would omit entirely.
2. That does not look like a Turtwig. At all. I was thinking maybe Chikorita with weird coloring and head leaf. Mostly it's the face that does it. I know that it's just drawn in your style, which is aimed to be cutesy, but in this instance it just doesn't work. The leaf on the head is kinda too big, making it very reminiscent of Chikorita's. The feet are exactly like the Mudkip's, whereas Turtwig has more blocky feet; think of an elephant. Also, his shell is nowhere to be found on this drawing, making it even harder to tell this is a Turtwig. You can give bologna about how at this angle you wouldn't be able to see it, or what have you, but for the sake of translation I think you NEED to include it; this might mean changing how the Turwig is placed.
3. Flowers. They bother me, but I don't know what you can do to fix them. I keep looking at them and I just come up with blanks...my only suggestion would be to play with them more. Try anything when you're doing them; different colors, more shading, adding stalks, etc. You'll be able to tell when you got something good.
4. This is more about your general style. I notice that when you draw/color everything is very soft and light. This can be good, but sometimes your things look like they lack definition. Also, it adds visual interest when you have more varying colors and shades. When everything is so light like it is here, the picture gets extremely washed out.
Ok. Hopefully not too mean, Bffle, but I want to give you some real criticism. No hard feelings : D
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Ah, okay, this is actually the first Pokemon OC I've made with hair (I got inspired by freaking Eevee's, blaugh), so I didn't realize that would make it appear badly. Unfortunately, since his design has been "published" since last month, there's not much I can do about it now.
Again, the whole OC thing xD; I thank you greatly for being the first to remind me of the shell, I honestly forgot about it rater than just leaving it out. I've now bashed myself in the face for it, congrats xD And I know the placement/angle needs to be different. Just a bad decision on my part >>'
Indeed, flowers. They're supposed to be those puffy-dandelions, so I'm not quite sure what I'd do with the color, but my friend also suggested adding stems. I think that would've helped. Shading, indeed.
This is just me being stupid, but I don't really understand the varying colors part >>' Could you use this as an example? Cause I kinda figured it was supposed to be bright.
I know you're not being mean, and you actually didn't seem mean at anyway xD It just sounded like the truth, lol~
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Like I said above, the fact that this is an "OC" does not exempt you from how this looks nothing like a Turtwig. To some extent it does, but if no one can tell what the thing is, than you have a problem, OC or not. Then again, you can choose to take this advice, or just simply ignore it >.>
The colors. So, I know this is supposed to be bright so don't get smart with me. What I'm trying to say is you need more VARIATION, as in lights and darks, shading. Obviously I can see that you shaded this, it just need MORE if you really want it pop. To be frank, this picture is very bland to me because everything is so flat in color. Hopefully this helps you more.
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Ok, I had to add this after reading the other comments on here. I agree about the wind direction and all, but it's really not the most important thing to worry about at this point, it's pretty nit-picky actually. And someone mentioned that you should clean up your sketchy lines. DON'T DO IT. I think the sketchiness is working for you here, especially because there is wind blowing.
Ok, really done now XD
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Is Turtwig(Sp?) Sitting on the ground....? I can't really tell so that may be something you work on, like make the pic bigger or show what they are running down.
Like some other people said, the grass and wind thing needs to be better and the flowers could be more in depth.
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Did you try clicking on the picture to enlarge it? The thing is already gigantic, I don't think I could do anything bigger x.x'' He's actually in a mid-run, do you see it now?
Bah, I know, I know xD
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Even with the bigger pic it's kinda hard to tell what he's doing. Maybe draw a shadow under him to show that he's in the air at the moment?
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lololol, there is a shadow xD;
I guess this means I have to start doing darker shading, huh?
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Oh, lol, well then....
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Very cute picture. Good mood, poses, and color choice. A couple things that could use work are the lineart and the shading. Maybe for the lineart, be a little less sketchy, especially on the hoppip, but it doesn't look bad. :3 And perhaps define the shading a little more, so there is a consistent light source between characters. It's kinda hard to tell. ^^'
It looks very nice, though. ^^
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Alright, here goes... *deep breath*
Turtwig looks too much like a cross between chikorita and pikachu with a blob of hair thrown on. Mudkip should look... more mudkippy. On a mudkip, the mouth is where that line on it's mouth is. The grass looks more like a bunch of random squiggles than grass, and they don't even go in the same direction- not a very good wind effect. The flowers are a half-ass job, they need to be more detailed in the foreground rather tham be little puffballs. The hoppips look as if kirby ate a salad and grew two leafs from his head/body.
(....I feel terrible)
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Haha, don't feel terrible, but I must disagree on a few things...
Turtwig and Mudkip look that way because they're PMD OC's. I made them to look that way, because I didn't like their original looks. Like, how some people make their Eevee's half pink or their Riolu's to have a star-pattern on them. That's just the way I "created" them, for cuteness purposes xD
I know about the flowers and grass, lol. I don't think I could've done much else for the lower ground, but I absolutely agree with the close-up part.
... That's what Hoppip's ARE, Enya. They ARE bloated Kirby's that sprouted two leaves from the head. Have you ever looked at one before? xD
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ok.
ok.... (I'm not that good at this criticism thing, huh?)
Yeah, it's just that the leaves are normally bigger (from my pov) That way it doesn't look to much like they just took kirby and made him eat grass until he got bloated. And besides, I can't stand those things..... I STAB THEM WITH FORKS. 
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Don't worry, I can tell you tried xD
The leaves actually aren't too big, I just chunked them up a little more. Here's a refrence I used: Pok%C3%A9mon
And baw, I own a Hoppip D:
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I'm just too nice.... ): wait, is that something to be sad about?
Hmm... I see your point.
I'm sorry. DX I shall only harm the hoppip in my diamond game that just. won't. stop. appearing. even though I keep beating the shit out of it. (Yeah, it's the same exact one- same gender, same level. It's annoying)
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I'll be nice first. Just cause. :3
Okay. I love the color scheme. I like the white dots effect on the grass. It's a clever idea. But some of the dots just look like . . . umm they're flatly put onto the page ... Idk how to describe it.
I like the perspective with some of the pink pokemon all big and some all small. But, One of them doesn't look like it's jumping like the rest appear to be. The one in the top right corner appears to be laying in the grass.
The path starts good at the base of the hill, then gets really flat looking.
The green pokemon is at an odd angle. Like it's tilted in the air. D:
I feel like an ass.
I really like this though. It's really really adorable.
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Hmmmm... I agree with previous posters about the the grass.
However, I can't really think of anything else to say about it... I love the sketchiness, and the lack of detail in the flowers helps to draw your eyes to Fernan and Ranon, who are the focus after all.
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Indeed, the grass xD
Really? A lot of people have complained about the sketchiness and lack of detail in the flowers. At least someone likes it xD;
Thanks!
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You're welcome. Btw, you'll never see me complain about sketchiness. I love it!
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...Dammit, you just HAVE to start on one that I think is beautiful...
OK, so yeah. Grass? Not good. It all has to be blowing in the same direction as the hoppips. The path seems a bit wonky too, and why isn't it continued over the hill? Ranon's left foot is also a bit askew, though I do like the bounce in the steps of your team. Also, flowers up close need more detail. Unless they're dandelions. In which case they need stems. And the sketchy lines need some cleaning. Srsly. >:I
...There, can I go now? D:
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Haha, thank you xD
Indeed, I know, grass and flowers we're the two things I expected the most negativity on xD
Yeah, someone nagged me about the stones too. Do you think random-sized-round-stone path would make it look better? And, uh, it's supposed to lead into a cave. I chose a baaaad angle this time.
I actually considered doing the stems before posting, but again, laziness was like "vknboisg39 no. D:< "
I don't know how to draw non-sketchy! I just don't know, seriously xD;
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Okay, time to try at being critical *deep breath*:
The Turtwig is meh to me (I don't like the hair and he's missing that overbite beak kinda thing)
The flowers look too fluffy (different color, perhaps more detail)
The grass isn't detailed enough compared to the rest of the picture
Besides that I love it
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Okay, let's see here.
Flowers blah blah.
The hoppip in the upper right corner. Its leaves should go along the movement like those of the other two, no? I don't know about the ones at the very front.
The grass patch in the front looks weird. It just doesn't go along with the road. If I'm somehow supposed to understand this perspective, it's that the path leads straight into a wall of stone. Try changing the, uh... angle of the path. Or make it show up on the front patch of grass.
Speaking of grass, it's going in every direction imaginable. This won't do, but the others pretty much said it. Try adding patches of different color to the grass. It should make it look nicer. Also, I suggest trying to make the path out of circlular/randomly shaped stones rather than square ones.
I like the boundary between the path and the grass on the right side, though. And I can't think of anything bad to say about the central characters. I don't know if those kinds of sketchy lines work for the hoppips up close.
That's the worst I can do? That's the worst I can do.
~Lukki
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lol xD Nice try, nice try.
Actually, I meant for it to be that way. The way Hoppip fly is in a bouncing motion, so when they bounce to move upward, the leaves will move down, and when they simly float, the leaves stay in their natural upward position. The two in front haven't jumped yet, so their leaves stay the same.
It actually is supposed to be a big-wall-of-stone, like a cave xD; I suppose you're right though. I was a little iffy about using this perspective in the first place, but then assumed everyone would see it like I did >>'
Gaaah, I know about the grass, I'm sorry xD I'll practice that stone idea, though.
I've been trying to get rid of that sketchy style I have, I just don't know quite how. Big brushes bother me >>'
Haha, thank you for "doing your worst". I can see you at least made an effort to make me feel bad ^^
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I love there expressions! THIS IS SO CUT MY EYES BURN!!!!
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Pfffft. Thanks? xD
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Your welcome! XD
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I mean cute. -_-
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Fwaaahhh I CANT BE MEAN TO YOUU
-slapped-
Like somebody else said, the grass waving in the wind needs to be better, you cant really tell where the wind is, and the flowers need a bit more detail when they're closer up....
And I dont know if its just me, but the Hoppips sort of distract me from the picture. X'D
I think its just me.
And are they going into a cave...?
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BAAAAW SIL, YOU CAN DO IT D:
Indeed, got that part written down in my little brain-notes. I just got lazy because people were like "Post it before I change my mind!" xD;
I think that's the point - but I'm not really sure of what you want to be looking at. The Hoppips have meaning, so...
And yes, it is a cave
YOU WIN A COOKIE FOR TRYING! <3
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I CANT BE MEAN ANYMORE ALDKFASGHLASDGkAd
x'D
Okay, just making sure.
I think the main emphasis should be on the two pokemon heading into the cave, so maybe like, take away a few hoppip or so?
Or put a few in the far bg and take away some from the front. Idunno.
Okay. CB
YAY
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(it's so cu--argg)
The flowers seen uplose should be more detailed!
The road's persperctive makes me wonder they are running down, if it's not the case then, well like my teacher used to say, the perspective Β«stinksΒ».
The closer grass aren't oriented the same direction, what kind of wind is blowing in that!?
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Haha, good first try? xD
Yeah, I noticed that about the flowers - damn laziness. I'll work on it >>'
I don't really understand what you mean by the perspective, can you elaborate? (lol, stinks?)
Ffff - I didn't even notice the grass. I'll fix that--
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it kinda looks like they going down a hill rather than comming from afar...I don't know how to explain it well.
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