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Published: 2011-11-21 09:09:10 +0000 UTC; Views: 12821; Favourites: 251; Downloads: 20
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In Chinese中文翻譯-----------------------------------
我以前總是希望我的孩子們能成為一個醫生或是運動員.
但當他們長大之後,居然全都去做那種危險的工作!!
噢~甜心,我想你擔心的太多了!
他們可是個幸運兒!畢竟他們都遺傳了你的幸運眼!
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Hope you'll like it!!
If I have made a mistake in my English please tell me!
[link] (first page)
[link] (page113)
[link] (page115)
Art commission open開放藝術委託-> [link]
And if you wanna see the comic about Medic and Heavy in the same battlefield,you can go here ,
it's my story but drawing by ,I hope you'll like it too
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Comments: 44
"will become" -> "would become"
"worring" -> "worrying"
Kenny and Johnny are so alike from their eyes to their enthusiasm. If Kenny wasn't older and bigger than Johnny, you'd have thought they were twins!
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"I used to hope my boys will become a doctor or an athlete." Awesome plot! I only saw one thing. The "will" in the first bubble is the present tense. One she is talking about the past, she should be using past tense. Will = Would "I used to hope my boys would become a doctor or an athlete."
Story's going good, though! Keep it up!
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Aww, i wish i had a pair of lucky eyes! *crawls into a corner and cries*
=]
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Mom's last speech bubble should be "But then they both grow up to do such dangerous jobs."
I love how they both look the same when they spend time at home. Their cute!
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"I used to hope that my boys would become doctors or athletes."
Sweetheart is one word.
It's 'worrying'
Other than those, the page looks great :3
Om nom nom, turkey legs
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Hrm... I wonder where the other five brothers are.
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"Will" should probably be "would" instead.
*phew* This is the first page in a long while that hasn't been a cliffhanger...
I STILL WAIT EAGERLY FOR THE NEXT PAGE, HOWEVER. *camps out in front of Gallery*
His mom is so cute~
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lol d'awwwww look at those two eat...
wait... where's alex? ...
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I love Mommy's shirt! Not as much as I love your comics though, keep up the good work!
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"Hug me?" XD My friend would wear a shirt like that
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D'aaw >w< Johnny's so awesome.
"I used to hope my boys will would become"
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I just realized the father has grey eyes. I could imagine another little child they have having grey eyes, or grey/blue, or grey/green
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aw no alex on this page D:
xD but thats ok i still like johnny and kenny
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I'd hug you, Johnny and Kenny's mum!
Also, I agree, heterochromia is lucky!
This is the cutest family EVER!
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was the mom always wearing that shrut cause i just noiced it
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They seem to be taking this lightly. Both their kids could DIE and they're going on about their eye thing.
Last bubble: "They're lucky guys! After all, they *each HAVE* a pair of lucky eyes from you!"
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awww mom is so sweet! yah they do have lucky eyes!! <3
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great! but there are some grammar mistakes It should be "But then they both grow up to do such a dangerous job" and "they have a pair of lucky eyes from you"
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"Aw sweet heart, I think you're worrying too much"
or "Aw, sweet heart, you worry too much."
and
"but then they grow up to do such a dangerous job"
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Daddy is nice ^^
but, yeah... I agree with Mommy >__>
nice ^^ we're waiting for next page
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