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Augustus13 — Prologue- Who are you really?
Published: 2018-07-20 17:31:42 +0000 UTC; Views: 181; Favourites: 7; Downloads: 1
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Finally done! This is the prologue of my new comic, Who are you really? I don't really had any name ideas, but I hope you like it. I am sorry that it took so much time to make this , it's because of my poor background drawing skill...I know I was inactive for a long period of time and I am so sorry for all the comments I didn't answer Sometimes if you see me online and I don't answer or post anything , that means it's probablly my cousin derping around.
With that being said, I will try to post new episodes of the comic but I don't intend to do it regulary and I would probablly stop doing it when the school starts, I am sorry about that but I hope you like it anyway
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I believe it's a good start. The Scroll-down type of structure shows off great at panel 3 when the sky takes so much time to approach and then you see the building with the news panel and the information gets revealed that the corpse found was only one of several others. That's a great usage of building op some excitement. If the rest of your comic is structured similarly, I'd really like to see that being used more often.
The one thing I wanted to address for your comic to get better is that to make sure every single panel is informative or acts with a reason to be there. It really much is down to the amount of work you put into your comic, make sure that it's not there for showing off your skills by throwing effects and shades at your viewers. I'm talking about panel 6 here. The only reason why I believe you might have chosen the shot of your character is to tell the viewer that the story is being continued around him. Maybe that is a little too personal to start off with him, but that's just me.
Oh and I'm not really a fan of the 'time will tell us' - line in entertainment products. It basically tells us that we'll have to wait to see what's really going on. You could use a line like:
"The investigations have lead to only one individual connected to the crime.
And the question the police couldn't answer was; could he be the next victim or is he the killer?"
That way you can give your protagonist a heavy dose of importance in the prologue right there. Have some speculations thrown into the room and make your viewers ask your question for themselves.
That's that, I hope you keep going!
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Thank you so much for the feedback, it means so much for me to see that you spent some time analyzing every part of my comic to tell me everything that needs emprovement , I am sorry if this is not as much as you expected this comic to be but it is my first comic and I will try to improve in time. Anyways thank you again for being here for me and helping me! I hope you have an amazing day!!
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It was a pleasure helping you out
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My Brain: "And on the last panel... INCEPTION HORN!"
Late night randomness. XD
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I really like your ''Late night randomness''
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Well that's great to hear! lol
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You are quite welcome, Augustus. ^^
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