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BLEGH! *stabs first pannel*
I didn't have a referance pic for the Hidden steam village at the time.... The first pannel is so blegh..And I think this was the page that killed the story for me. The second to last pannel is a fail too.
I think it's just the page. Not the story I was upset with. IDK. I'll make more just to see.... Maybe I'll warm up to it.
Random Old lady. Hooray. This story reeks of random people don't it? =_=;
Hidan just called her Ba-Chan. It's not his grandma. Ew. No. >_<
No OC's please. I tire of them. That's why I use the power of the random fill-ins!
Kakuzu and Hidan (c) Masashi Kishimoto
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Dang it, I have conflicting emotions... I'm, like, ecstatic that Hidan finally came in, but I'm depressed 'coz he was so mean to Kusu-chan... Uwah... CURSE YOU RANDOM EMOTIONS!!!
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>D i love that hidans all
:\ well maybe not that girlish but still he made me want to lol outloud .....
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*crickets chirping*
:facepalmplz: that was a horrible pun whats wrong with me?? =_="
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omg im lovin this! ^^ ur hidan show is awesome too! my friend recommended it, and u mentioned having a DA account, but u didn't have a link on ur YouTube account, so i searched your YouTube username here, found a Hidan puppy someone made for you, and they had ur little piccy in their description so i was like "Yayz!" and sicne u mentioned this story on the hidan show i decided to read it and here i am, too lazy to type full words! ^^"
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Geez, this is how Hida-chan treats his new best friend? 
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lol nope
And I just noticed how many random characters this series has
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I only remember
those 2 kids that beat him up
that old lady
and those three kids later on near that tree
GRAND TOTAL: 6
That's all I remember off the top of my head anyway...
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Yep.
And the random guy who sells dangos...
that's 7...
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Yeah, 7... that's not too bad!
... Wait, does that one guy's mom count?
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Oh yeah...
there's 8.
Oh and remember the little girl?
There's 9.
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So, that averages, what, two per chapter? That's not too bad.
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Awww Kakuzu called his stomach tummy soooo cute ^^^^
And Hidan dammit he's had problems clean up ur act and go get laid,prob wouldn't be the first time >=O
*is still a hidan fangirl*
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I bet kakuzu is more sweeter than dango
I WANNNAAAAA EATKUZU OOOOOOWWWWWW SOOO CUTEEE
I must say u know I relly love hidan n kuuzu but I like u make kakuuzu main char here rather than hii-chan
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Aww.. Kaku-chan talking to his tummy x3
LOL. Hidan made me laugh.
Aweosme comic~ <3
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Hehee ! Lil Hidan with messy hair is here for real ! ^^
Maybe the random old woman will give something to Kuzu since he got shoved
and hmm *whisper* i agree with you for the bleghness of the first panel but i can't draw building either
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XDDD awww poor kuzu and WATCH OUT HIDAN WILL TRAMPLE YOU! XD
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he he hidans always getting into trouble x3 lol
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I liked it 
I would love it if I could make manga, but I have trouble when it comes to a storyline...... Could you give me a tip since your really good at storylines? 
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O_O *brain dead*
Meh...
Of all the times not to have an idea... =_=;
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(BTW: I'm not offended, I get flattered when people ask me for advice, which is why I can never think of anything right away 
What I suggest is, Try to brainstorm. Come up with a topic that interests you. It could be anything! Make sure you have vivid characters and main characters in your mind and what you want them to do throughout the corse of the story. And make sure, you establish the characters well at the begining, and have them change a little at the end through what happened in the story. Character Development always wins a major audience.
Now say you got your idea fresh-baked in your head! 
Now, that you have an idea, you have to have a rough idea in your head beforehand, what the climax should be and how the story should end. You don't have to have this EXACTLY planned out, because you can work it out when you get there. Just make sure you have a ROUGH idea of what will happen, otherwise you are sure to write yourself into a corner!
Basically a storline comes with a basic outline that I follow and everyone else should too.
OUTLINE:
1. Establish Character(s), and Setting
2. Something happens... *whatever u want* and the story progresses slowly to the climax
3. Climax
4. Falling Action
5. Resolution
6. Characters might change, or stay the same through the coarse of the story.
Go through my "Fountain of Youth" comic again. See if you can find when these actions take place. Storylines such as these usually win over major audiences. And this is the basic framework of Disney Movies as well. Watch a Disney Movie, you'll see what I mean. I study the experts.
OH! BTW: A little foreshadowing and symbolism never hurt neither! ^_^
*looks up* Wow. Long comment. Glad my brain didn't completely give out on you
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OMG!!!!!!!!
THANK YOU! THANK YOU! THANK YOU~~~♪~♥~❤~!!!!!
This will helps me a lot! *saves the comment in Microsoft word*
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You're welcome... O_o I'm a little surprised by my own answer... *reads my comment again*
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........ the plz icon was too much, wasn't it? >V<;
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