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Published: 2007-01-15 19:18:09 +0000 UTC; Views: 197; Favourites: 3; Downloads: 1
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Description
Stumble, tripListen to the remain-ing, lip
What people have to say,
The noise inside their heads, lay
Conveyed, spoken
Reminiscent, broken
Steal from me, my sanity's token
My calmness, my
Integrity, why
I'm taken down
After, after, so many days, frown
Keep frownin' away at the struggles
This child has, hear the
Crying tears of trial
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Comments: 20
I love your latest pieces by the way. I wish I could contribute more to your global understanding.
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Interesting... and very different! A fresh approach, and I like it.
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The rhymes are nice and thought out but I just can't grasp the rhythm and flow; sorry.
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Maybe there is intentionally none?
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It's your deviation; shouldn't you know?
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I've been staring at this for forty five minutes and I still can't think of anything to say that ~adrift-in-a-crowd and *Kasaira haven't already said. So I think I should at least get a point for trying.
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I love this! The rythmn is awesome and the words also convey so much meaning!
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Pretty good. It was difficult the first time through, but after I read your description I went back and read it with more of a rhythm. It sounds really good like that.
I wish there was a little more detail, it definitely has the emotion for a good recitation but an audience would relate better with a story behind it.
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Short and sweet. I like it very much. You have a good picture to go with it also
I really like it. Nice job =]
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My next one is going to be better.
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