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ardajoolg — All I Need
Published: 2003-08-27 02:19:18 +0000 UTC; Views: 130; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 23
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Description floating passions
in the breeze
last thing that I expected

slowly revolving
love's doors
last thing that I need

gentle tendrils
beautiful
wrapped around my heart

all I dream
all I eat
all I think of is love

all I sleep
all I breathe
all I need is love
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ardajoolg - Pondering
Comments: 11

trillian- [2003-08-28 01:28:29 +0000 UTC]

Your piece is so sweet and nice. Everybody needs love. I really like the third stanza (is that what you call it?).

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ardajoolg In reply to trillian- [2003-08-28 01:40:29 +0000 UTC]

that's what I call it. and I'm glad you liked it. thank you.

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echodyneharmonic [2003-08-27 22:16:19 +0000 UTC]

This is a great piece. Makes me remember times when I just cant get someone out of my head. Kind of makes you appreciate how fun that feeling is. Keep it going, im loving it.

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domeafavor [2003-08-27 12:12:28 +0000 UTC]

I agree about the that thing, but otherwise, it was great. I like it.

Moulin Rouge... *sigh* love. that. movie.

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poeticaftermath [2003-08-27 06:23:00 +0000 UTC]

So peaceful to read... almost like a fairytale. The only thing I'd say could be better is, try to eliminate using the word "that" whenever you can. It's often not needed, and could streamline things some.

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FragileEntity [2003-08-27 04:42:13 +0000 UTC]

awwwwww that's awesome. very beautiful

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ardajoolg In reply to FragileEntity [2003-08-27 04:43:11 +0000 UTC]

thank you very much!

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FragileEntity In reply to ardajoolg [2003-08-27 05:11:23 +0000 UTC]

you're very welcome

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drago-mortale [2003-08-27 03:23:00 +0000 UTC]

It reminds me of the Beatles song! Now its stuck in my head "all I need is love..." +fav for sure

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ardajoolg In reply to drago-mortale [2003-08-27 03:33:03 +0000 UTC]

yeah, that's kind of what I was thinking about when I wrote this . . . well, no the beatles' song, but on Moulin Rouge, their song is sung and I was thinking about THAT song, but yeah. thanks for the fav, and I'm glad you liked it.

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unheard-voice [2003-08-27 02:24:46 +0000 UTC]

this is beautiful... i really like what its about. thats what i need.

great writing here...

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