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Falchion1984 [2016-11-08 03:05:31 +0000 UTC]
I've grown rather attached to this girl while rewriting that chapter-that-became-two-chapters of her story, and I can see why Jerec became so besotted. I really like the way you drew her face, especially those big pretty eyes and her fine cheekbones. The way you drew her hair is also very impressive. I just love the rich color, and the way you drew those ribbon tied tendrils over each shoulder was also great. Although simple, the background is pretty and, though modest, I think you drew her dress quite well. I was wondering, however, if the description ought to be updated since she's debuted? Relaying the story of her...ahem...dilemma might add substance to her for the viewer, perhaps even make her relatable to some. Well, we can discuss that later. For now, great work, and thank you as always for your patience.
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Falchion1984 In reply to Anacybele [2016-11-09 02:08:39 +0000 UTC]
We could stick with what we've already revealed in the first two chapters. Namely that Melanie is a quick-learning woman who endeavors to see the best in people, that she's stuck in an unwanted betrothal, that she passionately refuses to eat anything that requires killing a deer, and that she has quite a bit more grit and gumption that her appearance might suggest. Well, those are the broad-strokes. Let me know if you want me to expand on those points, and only those points, in a note. And, thanks.
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Anacybele In reply to Falchion1984 [2016-11-09 04:19:18 +0000 UTC]
Yeah, that sounds fine to me. But you don't need to expand much, I'd say.
Btw, this election is getting crazy.
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Falchion1984 In reply to Anacybele [2016-11-09 04:48:47 +0000 UTC]
I myself cast my ballot and tried to avoid watching the circus. I myself had made up my mind some time ago, but the spectacle of it all is tiresome on a good day and chaps my hide on a bad day. If you have any anecdotes, please share them with somebody else. Also, I sent the note. I think there are more danglers than spoilers, but I'll let you make that call. Thanks much.
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Falchion1984 In reply to Anacybele [2016-11-10 02:21:21 +0000 UTC]
I'll get to it, thanks for the reminder.
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Falchion1984 In reply to Anacybele [2016-11-10 06:52:52 +0000 UTC]
How about that note with the new description? Did it pass inspection?
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Anacybele In reply to Falchion1984 [2016-11-10 17:19:19 +0000 UTC]
Oh, I'd forgotten about that over the election. lol My bad. Yeah, it looks good to me!
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