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Description Lightning.

Falling.

Falling.

Falling….

(no time)

Only one thought

don’t let him die please don’t

keeps her going, keeps the water moving with her, keeps her body from collapsing.

But in her arms, silence. Nothing. Where is the warmth--

(he holds her, a simple hug, and she smiles)

the breath--

(he’s heaving, alive, just barely, as the water spills from his lips)

the

h e a r t b e a ting so rapidly, she knows it is the end.

And then--an escape.

She must hurry

(NO TIME)

It can’t be too late, no please it can’t be--

dyingdyingdead

He’s c o l d

and

s i l e n tly she the pulls out the water

(special how? Not even she knows, just special, use it, try it)

Failure.

(or so she thinks)

Her cries s h a t t e r the silence, crICK crACK, and what should she do and--

A g l o w

and

a groan

he’s awake and smiling and not--

She silences the thought and holds him.

And then--he’s unmoving.

Un

m o v i n g closer, his breath floats up

In

Out

In

Out

warm and relieving.

Eyes look out to the dark sky, blanketing, coating the world an ominous tint

(light in the dark, no matter how dim and wavering it is)

How long…

…until she sees that smile of his again?

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PLEASE READ THIS ON MY LIVEJOURNAL. IT SHOWS HOW I REALLY WANTED THIS FIC TO LOOK. [link]

I wanted to capture the moment of Aang's failure at Ba Sing Se, and the idea of using this type of writing really struck me. I'm not sure I did it well, but...!

YAY FOR THE PICTURE THAT IS NOT MY FAVORITE?

Aaaaand... Kataang Week is over. *sigh*
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Comments: 51

avatar1214 [2012-12-25 18:36:36 +0000 UTC]

This made me tear up. Beautiful.

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KGerrelleA [2010-10-02 03:04:02 +0000 UTC]

lol she looks like a maniac with tht crazy look in her eyes XD

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ObsessedKatie [2010-05-25 23:24:26 +0000 UTC]

oh, how sad she must have been when he didn't wake up for a few weeks!

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an-angels-tears In reply to ObsessedKatie [2010-05-26 18:38:38 +0000 UTC]

I know. :c It must have been hard on her.

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Spootay [2008-08-27 06:21:06 +0000 UTC]

So sad and yet...so beautiful.

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an-angels-tears In reply to Spootay [2008-08-28 22:05:35 +0000 UTC]

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Kuzonji-Kataang [2008-08-27 00:14:26 +0000 UTC]

Have you ever played Lost Odyssey? Your writing reminded me of the dream sequences. Bravo.

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an-angels-tears In reply to Kuzonji-Kataang [2008-08-27 00:27:46 +0000 UTC]

You, my friend, are the first to notice my influence! I really loved how they did those parts in the game and really wanted to capture it~ I'm glad it turned out well.

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Kuzonji-Kataang In reply to an-angels-tears [2008-08-27 19:07:49 +0000 UTC]

also, whats your gamertag? Mine's dragoonice1993.

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an-angels-tears In reply to Kuzonji-Kataang [2008-09-04 21:55:59 +0000 UTC]

I actually don't have my 360 online right now! D:

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Kuzonji-Kataang In reply to an-angels-tears [2008-09-06 12:47:02 +0000 UTC]

Aww. Man, My wii just broke!

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Kuzonji-Kataang In reply to an-angels-tears [2008-08-27 19:06:31 +0000 UTC]

Yeah, like the dyingdyingdead part, I could just imagine the words slowly falling down the left side of the screen before the music screeches to a halt and breaking glass echoes in the background...

Excellence...

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paintedbluerose [2008-08-26 22:32:47 +0000 UTC]

When I saw the title, I thought of the song "Comatose". I love her eyes. Widened with fear and shock. Is he going to live? Who knows...

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an-angels-tears In reply to paintedbluerose [2008-08-28 22:09:57 +0000 UTC]

Thank you~ That's exactly what I was trying to capture.

(Also, I love your new icon!)

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paintedbluerose In reply to an-angels-tears [2008-08-28 22:25:27 +0000 UTC]

YOu're welcome. ^^

Thanks.

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river-bird [2008-08-26 13:09:31 +0000 UTC]

She looks so worried, poor Katara. I always thought that Aang dying was what changed her for the final season, it was the first time she held someone she knew (and loved) as they faded.

Great job, the way you wrote the fic with it (lj version) was really creative as well. : )

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an-angels-tears In reply to river-bird [2008-09-04 21:54:34 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

Yes, I think that was a major thing for her--very trying.

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mikayce [2008-08-26 06:39:53 +0000 UTC]

ummm...ummmm.....uhhh......i dont like katara there. i said it....so shoot me now. i guess its just her eyes that get me, cuz i like the way u did EVERYTHING ELSE about her....just um...yeah?

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an-angels-tears In reply to mikayce [2008-08-26 07:32:37 +0000 UTC]

Haha, nothing wrong with that! xD I was going for the moment "Dyingdyingdead" in which she realizes he's cold and silent. It's that moment of shock and fear that just... takes over her face. I guess she came off as creepy? *sigh*

Thanks~

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inukaglove [2008-08-26 03:51:19 +0000 UTC]

Nicely done. I love it. Keep up the good work.

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an-angels-tears In reply to inukaglove [2008-08-26 07:33:18 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

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Tian1 [2008-08-26 03:36:44 +0000 UTC]

Wow. This is nice. I left a comment on your LJ one too.

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an-angels-tears In reply to Tian1 [2008-08-26 07:33:29 +0000 UTC]

Thank you~

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TTAvatarfan [2008-08-26 00:28:00 +0000 UTC]

Aw, the epic week is over! DX I need to get my last deviation up later. -sigh- I think it's pretty anyway, poor Katara. Purttyful. :3

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an-angels-tears In reply to TTAvatarfan [2008-08-26 07:34:33 +0000 UTC]

Ahh, postpostpost!

Aww, thanks~

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hyperaang [2008-08-26 00:16:00 +0000 UTC]

*sniff* This reminds me of when TCOD first aired. I was drowned in tears! :'(

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an-angels-tears In reply to hyperaang [2008-08-26 07:35:10 +0000 UTC]

OH SO WAS I. Aaaaaaang.

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shinigami-no-negai [2008-08-25 21:58:20 +0000 UTC]

Aww...

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an-angels-tears In reply to shinigami-no-negai [2008-08-26 07:35:17 +0000 UTC]

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shinigami-no-negai In reply to an-angels-tears [2008-08-26 16:01:13 +0000 UTC]

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myth12 [2008-08-25 21:37:33 +0000 UTC]

Fantastic job... I'm kinda sad that kataang week is over (eventhoughIhaven'tstartedyet)... I'll miss the art.

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an-angels-tears In reply to myth12 [2008-08-25 21:44:06 +0000 UTC]

Thanks!

Same here. I'll def miss the art! Are you going to post entries for it later?

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myth12 In reply to an-angels-tears [2008-08-25 22:01:28 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome!

I'll definitely be posting some stuff later, but I've been having a hard time getting these things drawn...

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Vags777 [2008-08-25 20:59:53 +0000 UTC]

She looks like something just broke inside of her. Her gaze is quite scary...

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an-angels-tears In reply to Vags777 [2008-08-25 21:43:32 +0000 UTC]

Kind of what I was going for~

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Vags777 In reply to an-angels-tears [2008-08-25 22:05:29 +0000 UTC]

Shows.

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ss3dj [2008-08-25 20:57:11 +0000 UTC]

Katara scares me, that look is creepy. Still a very nice pic.

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an-angels-tears In reply to ss3dj [2008-08-25 21:43:15 +0000 UTC]

Haha! I was going for the shocked "HE CAN'T BE DEAD" look. xD

Thank you!

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pyrokingdragon [2008-08-25 19:52:47 +0000 UTC]

She looks disturbed >.> or at least sleep deprived

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an-angels-tears In reply to pyrokingdragon [2008-08-25 20:16:28 +0000 UTC]

;.; She's upset because he's dying in her aaaaarms.

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pyrokingdragon In reply to an-angels-tears [2008-08-25 22:54:50 +0000 UTC]

>.> Doesn't look like it. Looks like shes been up for like a week <.< Also Hes the Avatar right? Miraculous recoveries have to come with the trade don't they?

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an-angels-tears In reply to pyrokingdragon [2008-08-26 07:36:16 +0000 UTC]

Not when you're shot with lightning at your most vulnerable state. He was just lucky Katara had some magic spirit water--'cause I'm pretty sure he died. D:

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pyrokingdragon In reply to an-angels-tears [2008-08-27 02:05:21 +0000 UTC]

Hmmm doesn't that count? I mean that seems pretty "Miraculous recovery" to me >.>

lol Magic Fishies?

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nightkinks [2008-08-25 19:36:09 +0000 UTC]

Very emotional and very moving!

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an-angels-tears In reply to nightkinks [2008-08-25 20:16:02 +0000 UTC]

Why, thank you, dear~

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TwixBar [2008-08-25 19:34:15 +0000 UTC]

Awesome. Just Awesome.

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an-angels-tears In reply to TwixBar [2008-08-25 20:15:45 +0000 UTC]

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Avatarded99 [2008-08-25 19:29:47 +0000 UTC]

So sad, but the way u drew it gives it so much emotion!! great work! ^^

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an-angels-tears In reply to Avatarded99 [2008-08-25 20:15:24 +0000 UTC]

Thank you!

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Avatarded99 In reply to an-angels-tears [2008-08-26 00:45:12 +0000 UTC]

ur very welcome!

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