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Jacques-Chat [2010-08-15 03:28:06 +0000 UTC]
First off, I think you mean you're on a roll... and you are, a good chapter... We seem to be finally reaching the long awaited beginning of tie in to the title...
Sorry but setting issues again....Sherlock wasn't created yet...beyond that pretty good on everything else...
"...his brothers, Liham and Dave got..." ...Dave,
"his Grandfather's stories" just...grandfather's no need to capitalize grandfather
"two weeks!" two weeks? ... ?!? for added emphasis
"Typical, Travis. He couldn't come get me himself, he had to get someone else to do it. " Typical, Travis needs to also be in italics if it is part of the thought.
"repeat myself. " myself?
"...goes wrong, they'll be back up..." there will...or they'll if you mean David and Liham as back up
"...He said to himself " italics signify thought...so said needs to become "...he thought to himself..."
"...smelled lovely to dog breath..." lovely too, dog breath
"Likos arm" Liko's arm
"...Liko, its none..." it's
"the only that" I think you mean "one"
"If its important" it's
"letter, what ever it" whatever
"Your just going..." you're
A very good chapter...and I can see where this is going...well I have an idea where it's going...
Any who... great plot and I wait patiently for the next chapter.
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abbycats In reply to Jacques-Chat [2010-08-15 20:56:24 +0000 UTC]
Oh wow. Yeah I'm gonna stop and reread everything. ahaha I fixed those too.
Thanks for tell me about all these things like you've been doing. It helps a lot.
I'll read over the 6th before I post. ahaha
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Jacques-Chat In reply to abbycats [2010-08-15 21:02:08 +0000 UTC]
Yeah right now I'm going back and making corrects before I move on to my next story.
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Jacques-Chat In reply to abbycats [2010-08-15 23:53:52 +0000 UTC]
yes there might be another after Ears also...
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abbycats In reply to Jacques-Chat [2010-08-16 00:25:54 +0000 UTC]
Oooooo ahahahhaha That's great!
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abbycats In reply to Jacques-Chat [2010-08-16 01:08:30 +0000 UTC]
a sequel? You know I haven't thought about that. I think it was you who I told that I was writing this story with a friend? (Mandy) hmmm I don't know. haha
Well I would have to think of something and it would probably just be me writing it, and my ideas too. So maybe. hahaa I wanna see how this goes, ya know?
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Jacques-Chat In reply to abbycats [2010-08-16 01:23:03 +0000 UTC]
hmm... your comment gave the idea that there was only a few more chapters left...but I saw that there were more coming.
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abbycats In reply to Jacques-Chat [2010-08-16 01:24:04 +0000 UTC]
oh no no no, there's more coming ahaah a lot more.
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Jacques-Chat In reply to abbycats [2010-08-16 02:05:33 +0000 UTC]
good I was about to say it's just getting to the good parts.
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abbycats In reply to Jacques-Chat [2010-08-16 15:58:05 +0000 UTC]
Yeah it's still going. lol
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