n03113 [2004-04-10 21:10:53 +0000 UTC]

Have you had your daily dose of smiggles?

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n03113 [2003-11-22 04:10:34 +0000 UTC]

-RANDOM DRIVE BY SMIGGLE-

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epimetheus [2003-08-14 19:50:37 +0000 UTC]

Ya, you're right. The poem isn't one thing or another. It lacks the liquid language that I'm so good at, right? Ha ha. But I've been moving over it the last couple of days and I can't find a place to change it. Or maybe I'm afraid to deconstruct it and rebuild it entirely. That's a possibility as well. I don't know what to do with it, so for now until I find a niche in its armor it will remain unharmed.

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wildmonky [2003-08-04 09:03:51 +0000 UTC]

sure there could be night in a Dyson Sphere. Orbiting satelites blocking out portions of the sun.
Surely a civilisation capable of building a Dyson Sphere would be able to devise a system for night.

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boxingrebellion [2003-07-26 04:46:08 +0000 UTC]

Yes! Constructive criticism! Thanks so much for giving me the note about the rhyming rhythm of "Song of Myself"-- I'm gonna go back and look at that again. It's a good point, and prolly one that I wouldn't have thought of myself, since I haven't done rhyming stuff in a while. You rock!

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epimetheus [2003-07-18 03:58:49 +0000 UTC]

It's entirely possible that death is an uncurling armadillo. It's also possible that it's a zig zagging trout or a napping dog. Maybe death is all of these and more.

Adam

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epimetheus [2003-07-11 00:41:37 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the comments and the fav. Haven't been around much, don't know that I will be in the future, but it's nice to see you're here once and awhile. Until later.

Adam

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epimetheus [2003-04-23 08:40:44 +0000 UTC]

So, you seem to be back. Is that just a momentary thing or can I expect something more, you tease?

The end of the world was really just the rising of the sun and the feeling that the world that two people can create within the context of a single evening seems to dissolve upon the dawn or the departing whichever comes first.

And as for let it drown, I don't think it was forced so much as left raw. It was more verbal than scrpited, and I'm not as familiar with regular rhythm as I'd like to be so it came out pretty lame. I'm not going to go back to it, but I am going to continue working within the strictures of rhythm and rhyme.

Thanks for the comments.

Adam

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spyed [2003-04-10 10:15:49 +0000 UTC]

Have you ever had a dream, that you were so sure was real? What if you were unable to wake from that dream? How would you know the difference between the dream world and the real world?

What you know you can't explain, but you feel it. You've felt it your entire deviant life, that there's something wrong with the story. You don't know what it is, but it's there, like a splinter in your mind, driving you mad.

You take the blue pill, the story ends. Your browser closes and you believe whatever you want to believe. You take the red pill, you stay in wonderland. And, I show you how deep the rabbit hole goes.

I offer only the truth, nothing more.

Take: The Red Pill
Take: The Blue Pill

spyed, nobody has ever done this before.
I know. That's why it's going to work.

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n03113 [2002-12-12 19:36:12 +0000 UTC]

Morning! or afternoon... or something.

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n03113 [2002-12-08 19:40:48 +0000 UTC]

Good Afternoon...

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epimetheus [2002-11-21 07:01:40 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the compliments. And I think you're right, that pieces is more about anticipation than it is about consummation, but I didn't feel right moving out of the bedroom as they hit the bed, it seemed unfair, but I couldn't think of a way to bring them together gracefully. I guess I painted myself into the corner and left my footprints escaping. Thanks again for reading.

A.

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rask [2002-11-08 16:51:25 +0000 UTC]

woo-oooh

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epimetheus [2002-11-08 10:33:51 +0000 UTC]

Rask,

Thanks so much for the enthusiasm and the favorite. I appreciate it. It's nice to know that someone is reading, and commenting.

A.

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antigrrl [2002-11-05 06:45:32 +0000 UTC]

thanks for commenting on "Athleticism in a Noun" - your feedback was greatly appreciated, thanks for the constructive comments.

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krisalynn [2002-11-03 20:59:41 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for your comment on "Ecstasy", I'm glad you're amused, but that's not what I meant at all. I guess I should have been more specific in my description because defyjane is right. The poem is about more than just sex it's about love and sex within a loving relationship. The lines you picked had nothing to do with a male orgasm they are about exactly what they say love expressed through the eyes (which you left out:
Looking deeply in his blue-grey eyes
I see his love for me
As it overflows the banks of his heart
I guess it could be taken that way but the poem goes back to the beginning at that point and so it's an after thought to the sex, not during or related it just while they are still in bed. As for the man falling asleep right after sex as you mentioned,that's also not what I meant. The poem takes on the time frame of a morning and a kind of flash back to the night before, so I wasn't intending it to seem the way you took it. I was intending it to be like they had woke up early in the morning and she was thinking about the night before and then they go back to sleep. I can see how that might not have exactly come off clearly, but that was my thought about it. Perhaps you can have a better understanding as to what I meant for it to be and maybe like it a little better. Thanks again for your comment and insight, I understand how it could have come across that way.

*~Krisalynn~*

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ndifference [2002-10-28 05:06:28 +0000 UTC]

I'm running behind, as usual. Hence, my manners have slipped a bit, but I'm here to atone by saying thanks for the comments on Albert King . I think I've got a couple of yours sitting in my devwatch that I need to read. You suffer somewhat from having your nick start with an "R." By the time I get through all those a-q's, they submit something new and I start back at the top like some simpleton. I'll remedy that - I swear it!

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joyridesunltd [2002-10-26 15:18:15 +0000 UTC]

thanx so much for commenting on [link]

i really appreciate you taking a moment of your time to read it and comment.

take care

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rachael316 [2002-10-26 03:15:26 +0000 UTC]

Nice to see you're back! Things will pick up again as far as comments once people notice you're posting again. I, for one, am WAY behind on my DevWatch reading. I think it's going around.

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white-alcemist [2002-10-19 21:02:45 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for the comment you left on my poem...
I'm glad you liked it....
C U round, take care.

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khao-pete [2002-10-19 13:32:09 +0000 UTC]

thanks for the comment i'll check out ur stuff!

K.o.

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wildmonky [2002-10-19 01:00:20 +0000 UTC]

Actually, you nailed Spiritus exactly.

That pleases me.

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brianf [2002-10-18 23:49:24 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the comment and fav on Mask of Confusion! Its just flattering when I get two favs in a row from someone.. thanks!

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brianf [2002-10-18 17:39:35 +0000 UTC]

I know the swamp mask isnt as good as the last, but it's all about experimentation.

Thanks for the comment on it's overall spookiness. Yea, since it's that season, Ill do crazier stuff. When it's christmas season, Ill do something um... different?

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brianf [2002-10-17 05:24:29 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the wonderful FAV! I just adore those who say more than two syllables in their comments...

Great thanks again, and maybe a poem would be nice... thanks.

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sosinister [2002-09-23 20:48:28 +0000 UTC]

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n03113 [2002-08-14 22:17:30 +0000 UTC]

Question

Is encouragement what the poet needs? Open question. Maybe he needs discouragement. Infact, quite a few of them need more discouragement, the most discouragement possible. ~Robert Fitzgerald (1910-1985)

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wildmonky [2002-07-27 23:01:11 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much for understanding How To Feel Better.

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rachael316 [2002-07-26 13:07:01 +0000 UTC]

Wanted to say special thanks for being not only a very loyal commenter but a very thoughtful and insightful one as well.
I'm glad you're still reading...

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n03113 [2002-07-25 00:30:49 +0000 UTC]

Thanklyou for the favorite ^_^! I had to be completely objective.. my original essay for the assignment was exclusively subjective.. and I had to do a complete global revisioning to make it objective.. the assignment came from an article writing on the victims of Sept 11th.. and schoolin' in NYC... well we're all pretty close to it.. and it was one of my favorite assignments.. I have to thank my proff for this one

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ndifference [2002-07-24 22:17:26 +0000 UTC]

I'm going to repeat the comment below, because it applies once again. Thank you!

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ndifference [2002-07-20 03:48:50 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for the comments and the +fav! I'm not worthy!

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wildmonky [2002-07-16 20:31:19 +0000 UTC]

repetitive yes. I'm currently taking a break from writing, because I'm still repeating things in a repitiive manner.
Ok, I'll stop now

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sosinister [2002-07-15 01:07:13 +0000 UTC]

i don't remember if i said thank you for your comment. i've been away, so....thank you.

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wildmonky [2002-07-14 05:59:44 +0000 UTC]

LOL

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wildmonky [2002-07-09 09:45:22 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. I'm kinda happy with the way the stanza you mentioned turned out myself.

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jadeis5ft [2002-07-08 19:34:06 +0000 UTC]

thanx for ur comment yes the poem is difficult but it was kinda ment to be cuz of the concept of duality being sometimes difficult to handel and accept

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mydeadpony [2002-07-08 06:32:59 +0000 UTC]

Oh yeah thanks a lot for the FAV

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mydeadpony [2002-07-08 06:32:21 +0000 UTC]

Thanks for the comment

I am pretty sure you will find other good artists
It's a nest of creative people down here.


See you around.
Take care.

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feldon [2002-07-08 01:15:02 +0000 UTC]

thanks for the creative comments. i'll revise it, those are some good tips for me. +DevWatch nice poetry on your side as well.

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alum [2002-07-07 20:51:19 +0000 UTC]

Thank you for the comment you left on my poem - and (belated) welcome to devart! Hope to see more of your work.

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lordmarcus [2002-07-07 20:42:36 +0000 UTC]

thank you for the comment. the poem is not really a serious poem, well i dont think it is

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x-a-x [2002-07-07 10:39:06 +0000 UTC]

Thanks For The Comment m8
and welcome to deviantart

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darkwurm [2002-07-07 00:36:03 +0000 UTC]

Thankyou very much for the comment, and might i add welcome to devart! oh look first comments I'm doing alot of those lately

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