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FoxGirlStephanie
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[2005-05-30 14:02:29 +0000 UTC]
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Favourites: 2404; Deviations: 78; Watchers: 36
Watching: 343; Pageviews: 19316; Comments Made: 1564; Friends: 343
# Comments
Comments: 773
Rewatching ^u^ but never-the-less your very welcome. Keep up the awesome art work, I love seeing it. And really thank you for taking time to send a thank you message ^u^ might sound stupid but means a lot to your watchers.
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Aha, thank you then
Aw, no problem! I feel selfish if I don't thank you guys personally, so no probemoo 
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Confused.
Anyhow great start to the story...are you going to finish it?
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My OLD Invader Zim story? I wasn't going to, no one seemed to really like it so I drooped it.the story seems to have been done million time just in different ways.
As of today your the only person to comment about it.
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try fanfiction.net.
Also your punctuation and spelling needs a little work.
As far as stories go I am one for ORIGINALITY and Creativity. There is nothing wrong with doing the same idea as everyone else. The trick is making yours stand out from everyone else.
To do that look at what everyone does and take it a step further or a different direction.
You have Dib in a tank to be transformed...that is classic!
Go into depth on how Dib is taking the transformation and his reactions and Zim's. Is there a struggle for Dib mentally? Does he feel like he is transforming inside and out?
Look at the difference.
24 hours later...OMG! You turned me into an Irken! I hate you! I hate you!
Though he was infected mere moments ago, the virus had begun it's relentless assult. Already he could see a decidedly green tint appearing on his pale skin. Shaking his head furiously he closed his eyes tightly willingly it all to be some ungodly nightmare...It was only when he opened them again that it finally sunk in. Outside the tank Zim grinned wickedly as he held his hand out, watching with unrepressed glee as Dib let out a scream at the sight of his own newly improved digit.
Ever heard of the sayings you lose yourself in the transformation or you walk a mile in someone else's shoes to understand them?
The more you can keep true to the characters you write about the better your writing becomes.
That and NEVER write a half page and post it as a chapter. The more serious readers will pass your story by if it's less then 500.
Hope I've helped some.
Good luck.
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yeah I know it's rough, I did when I was 15 I think, and I had six people look it over so how they could have missed stuff . . . I guess I need a better editor.
I do like the story I have; its a slow 'infection' of Dib's dna where I stopped he was getting his PAK ports installed but his PAK would have come in much later, he wouldn't really lose himself,per-say more 'find the human flaws' and grow to hate them. In the end hmm never gave it to much thought I don't really know I guess Dib would take charge and Zim would forced back, I could see a bit 'love' or the Irken equivalent blooming.
I don't want to say to much if I'm going to keep writing it, but I'll need a new editor and my chapters would be much longer (10 page's in word, for most of them ) I've gotten much better at writing since I did that and if I can find someone to proof read I think I will finish it on AF.
You really are a big help, I didn't think anyone read that thing never got any favs or comments. I thought I took it down.
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True. You can find those on ff.net. 
Like I said you can request for editors on ff.net. 
That's why I said at least 500 words. For me with my old Corpse Bride stories it was 3 pages on average and if it went further all the better.
Total Drama varies but the longest I think was 19 pages in a chapter.
Anyhow not everyone reviews, but you can see how many people visit your story on ff.net.
Good luck.
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your welcome x3 keep up the good work.
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Hey shedad~
Listen I try my best to get on Iscribble but when I do it neer loads. I'm just not able to get on it lately. And when I do get on you guys usually aren't on. Im sorry for abondoning you guys. I didnt mean to :C
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no worries I'll EEL..... she said its okay and she misses you
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well plus i have the flu and might have strept throaght. Tell Eel I said I miss her too :C
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I will when shes on her lunch, if your sick you should be in bed resting you know.
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i am. I jusst woke up
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good take it easy okay? I don't want you making your self more sick. (wow this is way easier to type why didn't i do this in the first place geez not wonder i was typing so slow )
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stephhh when is the next day you are freeezzzzzzzzz
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now I don't know I have doctor appt. Tuesday so it depends when I get out what your time frame?
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ahh so far donno if im starting work tomrow so its kinda the whole day now but my grandma is working tomrow so thats good well i think she is xD so ya so far just got the full day
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k well let me know when you free then i guess. where you working?
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hey how did the doc's go
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hey in case i am sleeping call me to make sure im awake or just messge alot i shall get my lappy truned up
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kk should be good grandma is leaveing to go baby sitting around 12 ish and going back to bellwood DX my mom is going to be talking to the boss i dont think i will be working tomorow thou xD you should come on skype <_<
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If i need shots i cant cut hair my arms will be shot
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haha ok just come over to hang out then
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lol im just saying i dont know yet XD look down at joes commest
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welp we are all on meds so we don't die when we go and they all taste like poop
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hahahaha xD nice xD so you gonna be able to make it here today?
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i cant come days my mom dosent works tomaorw?
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so what im cunfuzed xD
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Kay no offense, but after what happened with your sister I don't think we should talk.
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What do you mean? What does she have to do with me?
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Well quite frankly I'm not pissed at her you did jack shit I got grounded for four weeks and can't dive now. You could have told her to take a pill it was stupid book. Ashley was crying her eyes out and I had NO back up what so ever.Even Justin was your side, you sister claims to be her friend but she just bitched- look I'm not going to rant but someone else should have been behind Ashley, not just me. Its sad my friends don't know the meaning of friendship,I guess non you of ever did, what ever I don't have to explain myself I don't think its in our best interest,we are different people now or perhaps I just see who we are, the point is it wont end well.
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First of all, I didn't know anything about that I just knew she lent her a book. Next thing I knew, Ashley wasn't even in amherstburg. I don't pay any attention to my sister's private life, because, frankly, it bores me. Nobody told me what was going on so I couldn't do anything about it anyway. To blame and punish me for something my sister did is just wrong anyway.
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I'm not blaming you I'm pissed. Ashley was at my house doing her laundry your sister said we had 10 minutes to bring her the dame book, I was called more then a bitch for telling her she could fucking wait! I had to drive from my house, amherstburg, then back to my place, THEN back to Ashley's house! Do you know how much shit Im still in for that! Then I get there to find your sister jess and fucking justin I thought for sure there was going to be a fight. I don't need your sister's drama, beside i was told "Your not welcome you little bitch your rude and ignorant. If you come on my property again I'm calling cops" I don't want to deal with her if she thinks I'm bitch for saying jess look lez when she was touching Ash's boobs what ever I don't care I just don't anymore I'm not going to deal with the cops joe I'm just not, she doesn't want me around.
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She also doesn't have a say anyway as to who is around in my life
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First of all she can't call the cops without a reason. Second of all, that shouldn't stop us from just talking. And lastly, I'm sorry you had to go through that. I tell her all the time she needs to calm down and she flips out. It's the reason she only has 2 friends. Jessica and Justin :S And as far as hanging out...I can ride to you for that no need ot even come here ^^ My mom even told her she needed to chill the hell out about it. She's probably gonna die young from high blood pressure or something :S
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