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[2013-06-01 13:16:34 +0000 UTC]
"Are You Sure You Know..."
(United States)
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//Yao's on his way overΒ
//He's got some leftover dumplings and the like
//so considering America (or at least the one he knows) eats food like there is no tomorrow, he's bringing them here
NΗ hΗo!
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// Alfred looks over
Hey China!
What are you doing here?
// notices the food
// huge grin
Woah~ What are those?
// you've got his attention now-
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I made too much food for myself, so-
//holds out the container
It's just dumplings and bean-buns.
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Oh sweet!
// takes the container
Thanks man!
You wanna have them together?
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bù kè qi!
//looks around
You weren't already busy were you? ;
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// blinks
Wha- oh
// looks around
Nope, was just playing some games to pass the time.
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What kind of games?Β
Is it those lame-o war games where you become like an invincible solider or something
because those are lame.
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A-Alfred I g-gotta admit s-something to y-you
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"Hm?" Alfred looked over at the stuttering girl and raised a brow. He looked around for a moment before looking back at her. "Uhm, yea? What is it?" He asked, starting to vaguely remember the girl from the other day.
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"T-thanks for t-trying to help m-me I'm s-stubborn." Her red eyes looked to the floor and she ran up to him and hugged him. Being twelve she wouldn't expect abuse but it happened to her she hugged him and began crying as she did
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"Oh, uhm..." He looked around again and bit his lower lip, he didn't hug her back as he looked down at her and stood there feeling a little awkward. "Look that's sweet of you but that wasn't me who helped you out, that was my uh...twin. And how is it you know my name anyways? I don't think we've ever talked before." He gently had her let go of him and stepped back once she was off of him, tucking his hands into his pockets.
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O-oh? Wrong twin! No!! *begins crying* he was right! I'm useless! I can't even get a person right!
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He sighed and rubbed the back of his neck. "That's alright...no need to cry, kid. It was a simple mistake...We do look almost identical after all. I can uh...call him over, if he's not busy that is..."
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"Uhm okay..." He got out his cell phone and dialed Jack's number. After waiting a minute, the other line answered. "Hey....Yea I know but that chick from the other day wants to talk to you...." Alfred took a few steps away from the Italian girl and faced the other way as he continued to talk on the phone. "Yea, that one....Well I don't know what to tell her. Are you going to come here or not?....Okay. Bye." He hung up the phone and put it back in his pocket and looked over at the other. "He said he'll be here in a minute but he doesn't have a lot of time to hang out or anything."
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"Yea...So uhm, how do you know my name?" He asked, looking over at her.
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I g-get around to k-know stuff~ no my b-brother t-told me
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"Oh...okay. Well who's your brother?"
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"Really? I thought I knew all of his siblings...he's never mentioned you though. How are you related?"
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W-well he f-found m-me in t-the street
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"Oh...that's strange...so you're human then?"
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Y-yes but I cut m-myself too deep and he g-gave me some of his blood so I'm part c-country I guess
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He looked a little disturbed to hear that. "I don't think it works that way and I think we might be thinking of a different Italy because I know the Italy I know wouldn't do something like that."
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What Italy are you t-thinking of?
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"Italy Veneziano, auburn hair, happy-go-lucky, always saying 've', has a couple of pet cats. Completely sane, wouldn't do some kind of weird thing you just mentioned."
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No not veniciano! Luciano!Β
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"Luciano...? Well I can't say the name rings any bells." He shruugged. "Maybe Jack knows of him."
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I t-think h-he'll k-knowΒ
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W-will he b-be here s-soon?
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"Maybe...and listen, kid. A word of advice, Jack isn't the most uhm...tolerable type of guy so just be careful about what you say or act like around him, okay? And you might want to work on that stutter, he doesn't really like those."
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Β Β Β Alfred nodded and looked around, a few minutes later the sound of a motorcyle could be heard coming down the street and a few seconds later there was the man himself.
Β Β Β Jack parked along the sidewalk and put his kick stand down and took his helmet off, setting it on his seat. He ruffled his hair a bit and put his shades on. He looked at Alfred and raised a brow, pointing his thumb at the young Italian. "This her?"
Β Β Β Alfred nodded. "Yea, so I guess I'll see you around."
Β Β Β Jack nodded in agreement and they shook hands, the brunette did a little mock salute to the other as he walked away. Jack then looked at the girl and smirked a bit. "I see you're not frantically crying and bleeding all over the damn place anymore. So what did you want to see me about, sweetheart?"
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I wanted to thank you for dealing with my stubborn bitchy-ness.
I'm going to kill my abusive boyfriend but I might need your help...
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Jack stared at the young woman in silence for a few moments before he said anything to her. "...You want me to help you kill a guy?"
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Yeah... I'll pay you and everything I just can't live my life like this anymore
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He cleared his throat and looked around, scratching his nose a bit. "Ho-kay, I don't know who you think you are or what kind of guy I am but I'm not going to just help some psycho chick I just met like you help kill her ex. You want this guy out of your life, then call the police and report him, got it?"
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She angrily glared at him "I thought you'd enjoy beating something with your bat jack~ whatever bastard"Β
((ooh playin hard to get!))
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[ What? And doesn't she have a speech problem? Also you should capitalize people's names ]
Jack scoffed and crossed his arms. "Excuse me? I don't even know your name, we're not friends, and you shouldn't say shit like that, as if you knew me. Got it, squirt?"
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((She likes him and is hinting at it. She does but Alfred said to drop it so she's trying and I should capitalize their names...))Β
my my names Jaylynn.Β
I don't care if we're friends.Β
I can say whatever the hell I want bastardΒ
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[ How is she hinting on it, all she's done is asked him to kill a guy and calling him a bastard. Also on you're profile it said that she has a speech problem, and if she has a problem it wouldn't be something she could just drop. ]
"Alright, well Jaylynn. I think you should turn yourself into a psychotic mental hospital and try to deal with your problems like a normal person."
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((Well she's trying to be tougher and that's true))
"w-well there goes my c-crush" she looked down "sorry for b-bothering you" she began walkingΒ
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[ Right...well I think you need to go over your OC and make some major revisions, a lot of stuff doesn't make any sense, like the way she's been acting is just really rediculous to be honest how she goes to a stuttering shy crying girl to being 'tough' and act like she's calling the shots and one second later go back to that stuttering little girl thing again. Your character shouldn't be constantly changing across the spectrum like that, it's not logical in any way, it's confusing and doesn't show any solid characteristics. ]
Jack scoffed and rolled his eyees, going and putting his helmet back on after he took his shades off and got onto his motorcycle. He kicked the stand up and started up the bike, riding away seconds later.
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H-how does it work t-then?
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[ eue tis true- ]
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(( im so happy omg ))
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