Stephie99 [2013-05-03 18:19:29 +0000 UTC]
This is really good. I really enjoyed it's many levels, particularly it's realistic parallels in the psychology of an obsessive gamer - the family issues, the social behaviour (loved the bus scene's tangible awkwardness and discomfort for her, and his complete lack of interest, the general anger at nothing in particular, and yet at everything too, and his wild, gadget-consumed sister). I think the wonders of technology and the effects of it overpowering one's life really comes through here - It has a great sense of realism. The technology itself seemed plausible and your detail provided a clear imagery. As for the confrontation of any hardcore gamer's dream, and the cost he’ll pay for this decision, well, it was very chilling. This is a fantastic idea, it’s beautifully written and your passion comes through.
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