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And this wraps up the interlude chapter. Next up: Back to Vigil's Keep, where things are getting more and more messed up. ^^<
Chapter 2: The Blood is the Key First page: [link]
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>.> I was told Maric was the Puppet King. o_o
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!@#$ Alistair ... just... doesn't... get it! But, I can TOTALLY believe this happening. The honeymoon is over. "Happily Ever After," meet cold, harsh reality.
LOVE how you presented this. The monochrome is perfect for the gloom of night flashbacks.
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Indeed. It's kind of heavy, but hey - this has been bubbling inside me for a couple of years now. The things you must do to achieve the happy ending... I know I couldn't live with it. XP
Heh thanks! It's also about 100 times faster than full colour XD There's gonna be another, a bit longer flashback in the next chapter - I'm already planning the palette, I think instead of monochrome a palette of two contrasting colours ^^ Mwahaha can't wait. XD
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"Happily Ever After" never lasts very long. Not if you want a good story, anyway!
I'm looking forward to the next set! 
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Precisely! And so am I! Thanks
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And now I kind of feel bad for both of them. >_> Happy endings are not easy, are they? A Noble girl falls in love with a bastard prince, they save a kingdom together - he becomes the King, and her, a Queen by his side. And they live happily ever after... until life and responsibilities decide for them to drift apart, and they have no other choice but to go a separate way each. ;___; I love the direction you went with it, but at the same time it makes me just so sad...
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it is sad indeed, isn't it? D: But like I said to Niksche, I just had this bubbling inside me for the past couple of years. With the kind of character Victoria is and how I see Alistair, I think it was doomed to go like this, for them to realise it was a youthful folly, and now they're in trouble for it. D:
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So Wynne was right in the end? >_> Heh, I wonder if they knew how it was going to end up, would they pursue their relationship anyways? Though I guess the situation then was one of a kind...
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I guess she was. I always knew she meant well, even though her advice was unwelcome at the time. But THANKS for reminding me about that! D: D: I'd completely forgotten! *plans a scene with Victoria confiding in Wynne... mwahahaha* XD We'll see if I'll do that. But it's an intriguing thought.
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Yes, because who needs old people advice. What do they know?! >__>
Pff, you are welcome.
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Nothing at all, of course. XD Heee
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I feel so bad for them... Although this does open up new opportunities, doesn't it?
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Yes, indeed. I feel a bit bad about making things so complicated for them XD But it must be seen through, I think. X)
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I agree, you should see it through. It's such a well thought out plot for them.
Oh come on, admit it. We all get a kick out of torturing our characters every now and again...
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Yes, I suppose you're right XD Ehehehehe. I've been writing plot for quite a bit now, and I THOROUGLY enjoyed writing the dungeon scene - you know, where Nathaniel gets recruited... EHeheheheheeee xD
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Oh, I'm sure you did! I wonder why...?
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XD And not even because of shirtlessness! XD
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Shirtlessness certainly doesn't harm though...
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Sieltähän sitä tuli kuninkaallisten "avioliittoauvoa" oikein kolmen sivun verran. Kommentoin tunnelmiani tähän viimeiseen.
Tarinankuljetus kulkee kivasti ja flashbackin toteutus harmaasävynä erottaa sen selkeästi "reaaliajasta". Paljon olet käyttänyt erilaisia kuvakulmia ja asentoja. Hyvä, hyvä.
Täytyy sanoa, että tässä "kiistassa" olen hiukan Alistairin puolella (johtuneeko sitten sukupuolestani
Miten muuten tarinassasi, kumman idea naimisiinmeno oli? Pelissähän se on aina pelaaja joka ehdottaa mutta kuinkas olet sen tässä tarinajuonessa pähkäillyt?
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Hih, voiko olla totta että olemme kerrankin eri mieltä jostain XD Mutta hyvä, että olen onnistunut kirjoittamaan molemmille uskottavat argumentit, että voi siis samaistua kumpaan haluaa.
Mä olen kyllä aina ajatellut sen niin, että Alistair oli se joka sitä ehdotti. Juttu on myös siinä, että niin kauan kuin blight oli meneillään, luonteiden erot eivät korostuneet niin paljon kuin nyt, kun molemmilla on toiveita ja velvollisuuksia, jotka vetävät eri suuntiin. Ei kyllä todella olisikaan pitänyt - mutta kuten Eamon sanoi, kun nuo mokomat tekivät numeron asiasta Landsmeetissä, oli jo liian myöhäistä perua. Jollain kierolla tavalla myös Dark Ritual veti heitä enemmän yhteen. Mutta nyt ne siteet alkavat todella särkyä. Eh. Hankalaa - joskin jostain tämä tarina nyt vaan tulee mun pään sisältä. XD
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Uh... how depressing. I hate people fighting like that. But you showed it very realistic when people say things they usually would not say and nothing seems to sound right at the moment. I feel sorry for them, but not every love has happy ending and sometimes preassure is more then people can take.
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I know... I hate it too. But it's also what my headcanon says happens here. X__X I especially hate the "does our love mean so little to you" argument, and I've been at the receiving end of it too. Too much of it and it will kill whatever love remained. X__X
Heh, I guess I want to just thoroughly show how the Happily Ever After isn't the only possible outcome if you marry Alistair. It can very well be, like in your story, it works wonderfully! But my heart takes me this way. X)
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Well in their situation your scenario is far more possible I'm afraid.
And this is your story and I like the sparks between her and Nathaniel.
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Indeed. And the sparks will not be ignored. XD Too strong!
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ahhh what does he mean by entertain. XD Oh well Victoria deserves better anyways, it seems like he cares more about making babies and doesnt even think about how it effects her knowing that she probably cant. Poor girl needs a hug and a bath to get the alistair coodies off.
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Heh, nothing like THAT, I assure you. XD At least he doesn't think so XD
Anyway yeah, the thing about Alistair, well the thing I've given to him, is that he'll repeat basically anything stronger people tell him. Plus he really wants to be a good king, now that he's been given the crown. I don't think there's enough space in his head to consider Victoria's feelings, he doesn't even realise they might differ from his. Plus, of course he's shocked and hurt that Victoria didn't tell him the whole truth about the Dark Ritual.
TBH, with that whole thing looming over their heads, it requires a VERY different sort of a Cousland to keep the marriage together after that. XD
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yeah your cousland is a strong one. A normal person would explode from all the stress.
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I think she soon might, though. XD
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I feel so bad for the couple. Now what? Alistair was right about the heirs of course, and I feel like Victoria could have been a little more supportive of him, even if she is right about defending Amaranthine. I'm so conflicted! Love your work though! Excellent!
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In an ideal situation, I suppose she could have been. It's also a bit hard to realise you actually can't have children, for real. X__X
Now what? We'll see.
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I could see that. I don't know what I would do if I had that realization. I am excited to see where you take this!!
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Yeah...
Heh, I'm really excited about what happens next again! I'm always a bit weary by the end of a chapter, whether it's a long or a short one. But when I start fleshing out the new script from the skeleton I keep in the 'closet' - I'm really excited all over again! It's what keeps me going, really.
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Ooooh this is getting tasty. Also golden tunic and matching trousers!! Oooh the anticipation!!
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Heh, I'm leaving them to your imagination XD
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Poor Alistair... being Alistair. 
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I'm happy to oblige! I wish I was as quick to colour full colour pages as these monochrome ones. *sigh*
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This is marvellous. Visually, I especially like Victoria's expression on panel 4 and 6. I like the way you're starting to shape the DA canon to your own story even more evidently (hey - that's the biggest fun!!!), so I'm only calling aloud: 'Change it all and make it huge!'
Poor Alistair.....feeling like being dragged down by Eamon's influence on the one side and Victoria's on the other is not exactly a help for his kingly confidence. And Couslands are obsessed with duty - those love-and-duty-and-life opinions of them both roots in their different origins - yeah, pretty cool, they'll never agree on those.
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I think it'll have to go there eventually, to keep my creative spirit active. XD I'm glad to find support though!
Alistair had such a different upbringing from Victoria, that'll indeed cause them never to see eye to eye about these things. During the blight it was all fine and dandy, but Alistair has a LOT of growing up to do to be a good king. Then again it was a bit irresponsible of Victoria to go through with the marriage, knowing what she did. Then again she was really young (20 at the beginning of the blight) and probably truly hoped she might defeat the odds.
I read the whole chapter through today, and it still amuses me how I unconsciously or no mimick our family discussions. Eamon (like my mum) likes to state his arguments over and over again, like the discussion never happened before (because obviously it has, since Alistair is talking in his voice to Victoria). Then Alistair, like, say, well maybe more like some of my friends, is parroting the opinions and arguments of people with stronger convictions, and returns to Eamon giving him Victoria's arguments almost as his own. X) Even though he initally disagreed with her. Poor dear, he really needs to grow a spine. XD
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Ha, that's if I heard myself speaking!
Love it
Yeah, forming the characters according to people you know is quite normal - and necessary, I suppose 
Heeee for your mum!
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Oooohhh, I still haven't played a game where I would've recruited Loghain (though I've long planned to do so! D
Yes, I don't know if it's obvious, but the timeline is in fact: Alistair gets first scolding from Eamon - goes to Vigil's keep to check on Victoria and brings it up, as in the memory - returns to Denerim to deliver the news to Eamon, who repeats his arguments and introduces Celene. ^^
Heh, I almost feel bad for Alistair. XD
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Neither have I, but I had to check all his dialogues anyway!
Oh, don't worry, I got the timeline right! Perhaps I just wrote it typically chaotically for me....
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It's okay, I just wanted to make sure... It was a bit confusing even for me. XD But I guess it needed to be done XD
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And this is where the importance of fastening your pants (or whatever you're wearing) comes into play.
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or wearing some actual clothing instead of a modesty-ensuring bedsheet ^^
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The man is only (half) human, plus he can't think five minutes ahead after that XD
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