trash60 [2002-12-06 03:45:02 +0000 UTC]

for some reason this is so depressing. but its very well done, and it's different, so thats good.

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spunj13 [2002-05-31 16:40:19 +0000 UTC]

very different imagery here... i like it though..

//spunj13

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tax-chan [2002-05-28 16:14:17 +0000 UTC]

Y'know, I just realized that this was the most comments I've ever gotten on one piece. *blink* I'm sure this has some significance, but I'm too lazy to figure out what

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shinken [2002-05-27 19:57:00 +0000 UTC]

*blinks* Well...there was this one episode of Spongebob Squarepants...and everything was indeed, chrome in the future. *shrug*
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preacha [2002-05-27 09:19:06 +0000 UTC]

different than all of your other pieces, it seems like you are actually trying. i guess something gets lost, the piece is devoid of feeling, perhaps that was the intent. the future is chrome, shiny yet indistinguishable. i still like it though

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xphile [2002-05-27 07:08:06 +0000 UTC]

i like it. its so true i like how "everything is chrome in the future" repeats. its kinda....rythmic or somethin. very nice, i likes

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tax-chan [2002-05-27 06:31:12 +0000 UTC]

Noooo! What if what?

I kinda do want to extend it, but it has to fit on a wallpaper so I'm trying to limit the length.... Maybe a longer version later, or a smaller font *devilish grin*
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sixwings [2002-05-27 06:26:10 +0000 UTC]

Pretty cool
Has some really nice lines.
Seems like you could go further with it though.
Nahh... it's fine as is. But what if.... ahh forget it.

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tax-chan [2002-05-27 06:02:45 +0000 UTC]

*does a dance of joy* Yes! You got where I was trying to go! It was kind of 2 parts ekud wall, 2 parts future-Tokyo, and 2 parts of my own style.....
So it's okay as is? Sweet. I'm still neurotic about this, though
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03 [2002-05-27 05:59:54 +0000 UTC]

actually. i'd say that it was already done and badass enough as is.
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03 [2002-05-27 05:58:28 +0000 UTC]

i really like it. it's very new Tokyo. japanese text would look great mixed into the wall, if you were so bold as to suggest it to him. this is going to look great on an ekud wall. but it stands on its own quite nicely. i'll definetely fav this when its out of its beta stages. but..hmm..i really can't think of anything to suggest. you're going in the right direction, and doing it well.
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tax-chan [2002-05-27 05:17:10 +0000 UTC]

Uh oh....it's a schtick? It's been done?
*goes ballistic, forces self to calm down*
Now now, if you explode, you'll never see the ekud wp....
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shinken [2002-05-27 05:14:33 +0000 UTC]

I like it, but I'll warn you that I've always, always been a sucker for the "everything is chrome in the future" schtick. ^^
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osiris679 [2002-05-27 05:02:09 +0000 UTC]

very nice
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tax-chan [2002-05-27 04:34:22 +0000 UTC]

Aw c'mon man.....
Okay, lemme put it to you this way- if this poem were visual art, would it look like a "beautiful space womb?" This being an ekud render in layman's terms....
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lycanthropissed [2002-05-27 04:31:30 +0000 UTC]

You ask me for comments..yet I have naught to give. I will say this however:

^^ oooOOooo liquid silvah!! -shiny noise-

That is all ^^.

--Moo

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tax-chan [2002-05-27 04:18:46 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. The line breaks are almost secondary here, since they can be changed to fit the wallpaper. I'm assuming that the wording's sufficient now, though? But thanks much for the comment
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deejbard [2002-05-27 04:13:54 +0000 UTC]

i do think you're saying some really nice things with the words already ... where i do think it could use some work is in the line breaks. right now, they seem to work against the poem, stopping me from being able to read it in a constant stream from one thought to the next.

but it's a great idea. i particularly liked:

Slippery silver mirror-puddles lying on
Tarnished steel sidewalks.

-- Deej
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Martin Luther King, Jr.

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jesusbite [2002-05-27 04:01:00 +0000 UTC]

Damn the fucking bold tag. I wanted a pointy arrow pointing at the period after Rain.

But, I hope you could have figured that out anyway.

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jesusbite [2002-05-27 03:58:44 +0000 UTC]

Oooooh my. Is this what you wanted to hear?

Fuckin' bad-fuckin'-ass fuckin fuck!


Only one nitty-pick - a semi-colon would work better than a period here:

...Even the rain.
Slippery silver mirror-puddles lying on...


Other than that... Im drooling again.

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