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Published: 2003-11-14 15:22:06 +0000 UTC; Views: 123; Favourites: 0; Downloads: 166
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Description Fire,burning in my heart,
It's heat tearing me apart,
Right now I am dying in your arms,
A mark of love is left inside your palms,
Remember this poem gave to you,
By one who loves you dear and true,
My whole life is set on you.
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Comments: 5

wernstrum [2003-11-22 22:01:42 +0000 UTC]

hmm, this poem is quite strange. all your saying is "here is a poem for you", which is basically a continuous loop. Like "the song that never ends" or like looking at two mirrors facing each other. interesting

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e1even [2003-11-21 16:17:41 +0000 UTC]

I have a question. When you make a picture for your poem...how do you do it????

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icespider [2003-11-16 23:14:30 +0000 UTC]

nice one but id edit it rite now........sept its not mine and i cant but if you ignore the spelling its pretty decent! you go girl!

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chameleonice [2003-11-15 22:05:44 +0000 UTC]

It's very nice. The meaning is something a lot of people can relate to, and it gets its point across. If I may suggest, though, try going over it with a spell checker, unless you intended to have the words "daer" and "lofe" spelled like that.
All in all, it sounds nice, and I'd like to look at more of your poems.

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squib In reply to chameleonice [2003-11-16 13:30:58 +0000 UTC]

sorry about the spelling i shall do an improved version spelt correctly

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