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Published: 2012-09-18 13:38:51 +0000 UTC; Views: 6964; Favourites: 391; Downloads: 49
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Description Do killers dream of oceans -
tucked deep in a cocoon,
spooning their wives
nestled deep in the soft chaos
of their arms?

Do they walk their children
to school, coats neatly
buttoned against strangers,
and take their tiny hands
like wounded birds
in their own,
counting red cars
and clutching bouquets of
daisies for the teacher?

Can they cook chicken soup
like their grandmothers did -
fistfuls of parsley and thyme
to soothe the iron pot,
stirring carrots and potatoes
with the first shift
of autumn's silver maple?

Do they make sandcastles
and leave their footprints
in the middle of July
and count the starfish
that nudge and wink in
the tidepools, their mottled
fingers pointing east?

Or have they only debris -
a life skewed and stretched
beyond human and the
sudden drop of pressure,
a lost companion,
dreading what wells up
from the surface and
sucks them underneath?
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Comments: 127

Poetrymann In reply to ??? [2012-12-16 03:07:25 +0000 UTC]

Another great one - many thanks!

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Michaeldavitt In reply to Poetrymann [2012-12-16 17:15:26 +0000 UTC]

my pleasure see this ~ [link]

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toxic-nebulae [2012-10-30 01:48:44 +0000 UTC]

I'd recommend adding a comma after "strangers" and changing the last period to a question mark. Other than that, it's a lovely piece.

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Poetrymann In reply to toxic-nebulae [2012-11-27 04:14:24 +0000 UTC]

Thanks. I changed it.

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Starkpretty [2012-10-08 16:51:19 +0000 UTC]

Fantastic way to challenge the stereotype!

Lovely words. <3

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Poetrymann In reply to Starkpretty [2012-10-09 20:44:48 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much - I appreciate it.

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Starkpretty In reply to Poetrymann [2012-10-16 20:08:16 +0000 UTC]

No problem!

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Melanie-H-H [2012-10-07 12:40:16 +0000 UTC]

Very thought provoking, brilliantly written.

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HeyThereDelilah20 [2012-10-03 17:17:49 +0000 UTC]

wow...this is beautiful....

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Poetrymann In reply to HeyThereDelilah20 [2012-10-19 21:37:05 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much - I appreciate it.

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HourglassOfLostTime [2012-10-03 10:50:16 +0000 UTC]

If I'm not mistaken I do believe most cereal killers build up in their head a perfect world, this world is imperfect to their cookie cutter image thus they seek out to snuff them out, be it fore vengeance, pleasure.

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Poetrymann In reply to HourglassOfLostTime [2012-10-19 21:36:41 +0000 UTC]

It is the worst possible form of OCD.

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HourglassOfLostTime In reply to Poetrymann [2012-10-21 02:35:55 +0000 UTC]

I love that(the expression). With I thought of it first, lol

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FailedxExperimentx13 [2012-10-02 13:15:17 +0000 UTC]

Sir, you seem to have a bit of a Criminal Minds addiction...
No, wait, that's me.

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Poetrymann In reply to FailedxExperimentx13 [2012-10-02 14:57:13 +0000 UTC]

*Laughs* Actually, I do. The psychology fascinates me.

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FailedxExperimentx13 In reply to Poetrymann [2012-10-03 14:42:39 +0000 UTC]

Wow, really? THought I was the only one thinking like that...

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hahaha789 [2012-09-23 19:40:25 +0000 UTC]

Wow! I love this poem

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Poetrymann In reply to hahaha789 [2012-10-09 20:33:15 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks - I greatly appreciate it!

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intricately-ordinary [2012-09-23 17:52:11 +0000 UTC]

I love this poem so much. I mean, I really can't tell you how much it speaks to me.
Not only does it do the obvious, question the actions of killers, but it goes so much deeper if you look at the mindset of the narrator, too.
We have an ingrained curiosity as people for what we don't understand. The person talking is trying to define the difference between monsters and humans.
The narrator is trying not only to find answers in a killer, but also similarities.

Absolutely beautiful
I love this.

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Poetrymann In reply to intricately-ordinary [2012-10-09 20:33:10 +0000 UTC]

You are correct on all counts. Then again, I have always found myself wondering about the lives of strangers. Thanks.

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NinjAPixiEX3 [2012-09-23 15:18:46 +0000 UTC]

Wow....That was amazing.

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Poetrymann In reply to NinjAPixiEX3 [2012-10-02 14:56:17 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much - I appreciate that!

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bewilderedconfused [2012-09-23 05:36:55 +0000 UTC]

Awesome poem!

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Poetrymann In reply to bewilderedconfused [2012-10-02 14:56:12 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much - I appreciate that!

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bewilderedconfused In reply to Poetrymann [2012-10-04 04:08:40 +0000 UTC]

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leyghan [2012-09-23 03:55:19 +0000 UTC]

I think this is my new favourite. This is simply superb!

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Poetrymann In reply to leyghan [2012-10-02 14:56:07 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much - I appreciate that!

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TheLearningArtist [2012-09-21 21:30:44 +0000 UTC]

This is really good.

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Poetrymann In reply to TheLearningArtist [2012-10-02 14:55:57 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much - I appreciate that!

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TheLearningArtist In reply to TheLearningArtist [2012-09-21 21:30:54 +0000 UTC]

Have you read Death Note?

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Shannon-Sweeney [2012-09-21 19:46:00 +0000 UTC]

Featured [link]

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Poetrymann In reply to Shannon-Sweeney [2012-10-02 14:55:35 +0000 UTC]

Many thanks!

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Shannon-Sweeney In reply to Poetrymann [2012-10-02 18:44:19 +0000 UTC]

You're welcome

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SavageInsight [2012-09-21 14:25:28 +0000 UTC]

One of the better poems I've read, and I've read some of the best

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Poetrymann In reply to SavageInsight [2012-10-02 14:54:45 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much - I appreciate that.

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TalentlessArtlover [2012-09-21 13:06:39 +0000 UTC]

This beautifully written piece makes it even more difficult to refrain from smiting.

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Poetrymann In reply to TalentlessArtlover [2012-10-02 14:54:40 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much - I appreciate that.

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TalentlessArtlover In reply to Poetrymann [2012-10-03 16:18:18 +0000 UTC]

Killers are people too, my friend.

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drawitout [2012-09-21 04:08:01 +0000 UTC]

So poignant and haunting, this is wonderful writing!

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Poetrymann In reply to drawitout [2012-10-02 14:53:53 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much - I appreciate that.

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Shiver-In-Shadows20 [2012-09-21 01:45:53 +0000 UTC]

Im very impressed. This takes a look at how we see killers. The takers of life. What goes througj their mind? What would they dream of or risk throwing away when they have shed blood? It certainly wouldn't be of oceans. It would be of that moment when they watched a person drift away. They wonder if that will be how they meet their end. You painted a wonderful and thoughtful picture. Great job!

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Poetrymann In reply to Shiver-In-Shadows20 [2012-10-02 14:53:48 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much - I appreciate that. I am sure many of them have the same experiences as the rest of us.

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Leo821 [2012-09-20 21:02:54 +0000 UTC]

Thats.....wow. Very nice

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Poetrymann In reply to Leo821 [2012-10-02 14:52:55 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much - I appreciate that.

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Sigma-Echo-Seven [2012-09-20 04:32:01 +0000 UTC]

Was reading some poetry today out of a recent issue of The New Yorker. This was better.

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Poetrymann In reply to Sigma-Echo-Seven [2012-10-02 14:52:50 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much - I appreciate that. I am working up the nerve to send them some of my work...

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NoriMori [2012-09-20 02:48:47 +0000 UTC]

Wow.

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Poetrymann In reply to NoriMori [2012-10-02 14:52:12 +0000 UTC]

Thanks very much - I appreciate that.

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timeraider [2012-09-20 01:33:29 +0000 UTC]

This had me pondering my own humanity, and just how fragile the line between the surface and the underneath might be.

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Poetrymann In reply to timeraider [2012-10-02 14:51:49 +0000 UTC]

It was inspired by a poem about Hitler. And while I despise the man and everything he stood for, he was at one time a child...and experienced many things the rest of us did and do.

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