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Published: 2004-08-28 07:38:11 +0000 UTC; Views: 5969; Favourites: 106; Downloads: 1428
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Let them keep their slabs of fortune and safety-there is fine reason
we listen to songs
that make us sad.
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this is so inutterably perfect
there are no words
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Looking back at this, I'm not so fond of the language I used, but it carries the message pretty clearly in a small place, so I'm not going to touch it. I might try and capture the same thing in a different way later though. :j
I'm glad you got the poem.
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I look forward to seing it. it has dawned on me that i never wnet and loked at your page, which is so strange b/c this is one of my favorite poems i have ever read on dA. i must go do that now.
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I am a sucker for the concise, well-written, well-conceived micro poem, and this one succeeds beautifully. Each of the lines is nicely laid out--the longer, dismissive first line, and then the shorter lines which all perfect breaks.
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Damn. Fast smiple. And yet incredabily complex at the same time. You are saying that humans wish to have something to feel bad about? Thats what I got out of it. I love the ideas you put in here. In four lines you mananged to shake peoples minds. Very good. Well written, short, and great ideas.... damn... Very well done.
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im ready and willing to give it all up and persue what i really want... actually im fighting the world to get what i really want... and i will go down fighting if i have to... but i will not give this up... maybe im just crazy... but then again... maybe i just human...
love the lyrics.. what song is that? O_o
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Don't drop the ball,
they said to my stanchion,
flaying the earth with the tips of their ties,
But we know how
Sun drops on the Drava
Pregnant with the crepuscule
Hotter than them.
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For such few of words, you've really conveyed the emotion behind this. Lovely job.
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Oh wow... this is.... so awesome!
Short, sweet, to the point, and so full of meaning. >^-^<
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... Huh. I think I get that.
Moving beyond beleif.
:+Fav: #76
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i find that short poems are often much better than ones that last for pages because they get right to the point. such is the case with this one. congrats on the DD!
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We don't say that to each other, but we should.
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Short and sweet; beautiful and unique... 
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Nobody will get in the way of my dream.
I will make it happen no matter what.
~Mei~
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Oh, gosh.
I looked at this and said, "It's so short. Which means it must be amazing."
Being a DD and all.
Can't say I was disappointed; I'm amazed, truly amazed. So much meaning in so few words.
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ohhhhh....*sigh*
very, very good.
very, very true. and honest about it, too.
thanks for saying it!
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Wow, it reminds me of Carl Sandburg. Amazing.
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This has got to be the best piece of poetry I've read on DeviantArt (on anywhere else to be exact) in quite some time. Short, yet totally meaningful and true. Thank you for improving my day.
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It always amazes me when small things are able to pack a big punch 
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aah,
exactly wht i feel when i do tht myself.
well expressed.
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For something so short, this needs beefing up with more concretes and less telling, imho.
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I am such a fan of short and sweet. And although this is not sweet, it is in its own way very penetrating and sharp. Lovely. And so true.
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Clear & concise. This should be spray-painted on a wall in the middle of town.
If it was, I think it would become my favourite piece of graffiti - even above "Why aren't you DANCING?"
Four lines, & you say all there is to be said.
TALENT.
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This is nice. Only three lines but so much to say.
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Indeed, there is.
Very well developed piece. Loved the imagery in the first line.
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Daaarling. This makes way more sense to me at the moment than I'd like it to. Uncomfortably so. See, sometimes it's the other way around - you (well, I, actually) aren't completely sure whether something is what you want or what people think you should want or what you might want want but are afraid to get 'cause... ah. And then I stop and realise one of those things you mean by your last two lines and go "oh, that's what it really is". You know what I mean
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It's like you take the world and sum it up into a little handful of marbles. And even though we can't see all of them, you describe them for us in a way that is short, sweet, beautiful, and thought invoking. Grrr - I really like your style. (That was a good grr, by the way.)
It's so true though. You can't allow people to tell you what to do, because you'll only be hurt. And if you let them - you can't expect anything more than hurt.
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You know, I actually tell people that all the time...
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let us keep our anonymity.
there is a safety here in the unknown.
[spunj13]
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I like this a lot. Reflects thoughts that I have had often. Poignant. Now that's a funny word.
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Don't wait for anybody to tell you to give it all up and pursue what you really want-- people don't tell people that.
Actually they do. In movies.
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i passed up two job opportunities each offering about $50-$60kUS. why? because it's not what i want to do. my friends think im beyond looney, they think finances are the end all be all. sad really.
maybe we're just crazy, sir
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Feels good to be crazy, dun'nit?
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i hate national anthems...
oh and i strangely like your work.
~fallen~
you say so much in such little space.. it kills me.
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Wow this is soooo awesome.
I love the concise-ness. makes you think.
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Actually, I've always been of the opinion that people enjoy being sad and listen to songs that make them so. Simply because they know they haven't reached that certain point in their life they want to reach, and untill that point, people will always feel bad for themselves. I say look for that point in your life, and stop being self absorbed!! But I end up looking away from the mirror.
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actually I think listening to sad music when you're sad is inherently not self-absorbed. It's about reassurance, because you imagine the person singing the song has been through the exact same thing as you, making your own sadness somewhat more... justifiable to yourself. something like that anyway.
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