losttoon [2004-01-19 02:54:22 +0000 UTC]
Very cool. I love the emotion it expresses, the sorrow and that. Very neat. And the last part, really amazing. Though you broke the stanzas you kept in the rhyme creating an amazing effect. Nice use of wordage too. This is going in my favs.
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