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Published: 2011-07-25 21:13:47 +0000 UTC; Views: 257; Favourites: 5; Downloads: 0
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Here is my first really really really short manga story!
please excuse anything that i accidently BSd. its my first time ;_;. and dont worry, Izuki chan is not an actual rapist. she just looks like one o.o
annnd, i dont have any character reference sheets, because if i made one half the story would be out -.- (thats how short it is....). but just so you know, the light haired one is Izuki and the dark haired one is Haruka.
anyways, enjoy
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Izuki is the creepiest angel I've ever seen 
I'm digging the expressions/body lenguaje and waiting for more!
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ahaha ^^ agreed! and thanks! more coming up soon
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Looking forward to more of this, but seems interesting so far. No storyline as such to comment on yet, drawing is good for the most part with the folds on the gown/ nightdress being especially impressive. Expressions are excellent and characterisation seems good, we already have a basic grasp of personality and style. Background are simple yet fit in nicely and complement the art style. Personally, I also especially love how Haruka is clutching the cloud as if it were a pillow.
In terms of improvement, you might want to play around a bit more with the text and its arrangement, it's good already but doesn't feel quite right. I expect that will progress naturally though. The only other thing is that Izuki seems a little wide in the top panel, but that might just be me.
Overall a wonderful start and I eagerly anticipate more.
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thank you!! ^^ and cloud pillow ftw!
i will try to use text in a better way, cant seem to find a suitable font yet >:/ lol but it will come with time hopefully o.o
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I think it's likely it will, plus everyone has trouble with how to best align the text, which fonts to use, how to best display it... and so forth when they start out. It's just something you improve at with practice.
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YAY, a manga story from you! Even if it's short, it'll be awesome! c: I can't wait for more pages
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