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Published: 2018-12-04 10:11:22 +0000 UTC; Views: 2043; Favourites: 25; Downloads: 0
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Okay, so this is a bit embarrassing. I never get along well with line art so I said whatever and decided not to use it. So this is how it turned out. I'm sorry for the sudden change of art style. Lol. So what do you think about this? Should I continue drawing using this style or should I go back? It's certainly faster using the other style. I might have gone a bit overboard painting this page....
By the way, I'll post each page immediately after I'm done. It gets a bit hectic posting several pages at once. I'll try to update once a week.
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I think your art looks better with outlines! Not saying you shouldn't experiment with other styles, but the previous pages of the comic looked much more atmospheric.
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hm. both art styles look amazing to me! Even if I preffer lineart because it's easier for me to draw, it seems you don't have any trouble with drawing without lineart so do as you wish! Is your art after all!
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I like it better with lineart. Sorry, not to say that this doesn't look good, but it's exactly the kind of art I avoid when I look for comic/anime based stories. Until now the story did not convince me, so I can't really say whether it will get better/more exciting with more pages or if it stays with this kind of slow narrative. I do not know what to expect here and I can't promise whether I keep reading. Nothing has really happened and having a rather soft colored art-style takes away the impact. But that's only me and my preference. Like mentioned, I don't even know whether I stay to read through the end, so maybe you souldn't pay attention to me. xD
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Thank you for your response. It's alright that you don't like this style everyone has their preferences. Though, I don't understand how it can be slow considering there are only several pages.
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This is difficult to explain, since English isn't my native language. I'll try, but I can't promise that I'll use the right words.
Like, when telling stories you usually try to catch the viewers/readers attention in the beginning. You start with something that hooks the reader and makes them come back. If you start with a character asking several questions or telling what have happened without getting too specific, the reader will wonder what actually happened.
Example: "The world has changed...", the reader would want to know what precisely has changed. That certain change has not been addressed and is thus unclear. The facial expression of the protagonist or the setting of the scene (background/atmosphere) will also help to emphasize this question.
We see lots of dark here. No words. No one explaning. The door opens, Sans asks the child whether they want to get out, but the answer to this is already given and clear.Β The first page is mostly black and one panel in the bottom. The first three pages could also be self-contained/completed (the child was captured in the dark and gets out with the help of someone else, this works perfectly as symbolism and describes the setting of the game and is open to interpretation, like I see this as a metaphor of the game and not as the begining of a long story.) The door opening, the child sitting in the dark and Sans coming to get them, it's clear to the reader what has happened and there is not the desire within the reader to get to know what is going on as the first pages already tell enough. To me it feels like you're trying to say that Sans helped Frisk to get out of their darkness and together they go into the light.
Darkness = hopeless, there is no way out and everything seems pointless
The child could have made a mistake (genocide) and feels empty (dark) and needs help from the outside to break the circle.
Light = a new future awaits, a new possible route (pacifist)
Sans offers his hand and this could also mean that the child gets the help from the outside they need to get it right this time. As in the game, it's Sans who watches over you and appear several times which also makes him your guidance. He is the judge after all.
The attention span of people these days is extremely low and just like in music, you need to get the audience feel interested within the first 15 seconds (manga 3-4 pages | movies 10 minutes) in order to make them want more. This is what I mean by slow. The first three pages tell enough story, there is no actual need to get deeper into the story. There are no new questions established. It feels finished. This is how I see it, but like mentioned, it's just my opinion.
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Thank you for taking the time to answer my question. I believe my story simply doesn't interest you or hook you rather than being slow paced. π
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I really like both your style! I agree line art is a fking Biiiiiiitttch ;3; I like all the lvl of colors and how nothing really is just a flat color in this drawing, but in your past chapters the less excessive details actually made it feel like an anime comic, not too harsh coloring but still gets the picture out there.
IDK LOL! I like both the styles c: though this one will make the comic more unique since you add so much detail to everything
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Thank you for your input! I'll most likely keep using this style.
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Did ya know lineart makes it easier to draw?
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For some people, maybe. But for me line art is more tedious since if I want to edit I've to fix the line art and then the color.
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You know you could use the magic wand right?
Just draw line art then magic wand wherever places you want to color. Then go to the color layer and fill it in. Easy
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I know magic wand and I've used it. I just prefer using shadow and shape over line art and plenty other illustrators do this too. I don't quite understand why you are trying so hard to convince me to use line art.
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Its just a suggestion. just to remind if you forgot so yeah.
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