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Published: 2012-03-18 15:00:52 +0000 UTC; Views: 7568; Favourites: 142; Downloads: 51
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Description Marceline is sick. Very sick, and Finn knows this. Finn shouldn't have let her take his backpack. He shouldn't have let her see what's inside. He should have stopped her from eating the soup Jake made. Jake didn't know that she would take the soup and drink it, teasing Finn. Then, she got sick. Finn didn't know Jake had put Garlic Powder in the soup, there's no way he could have known. Aren't vampire's supposed to have a sense for these things?!
They'd been stuck under this glob forsaken tree for what seems like hours now. Jake was supposed to be back with the cyclops tears ages ago. What was keeping him? Finn has tried moving her, but she couldn't handle it. He was going to lose her.

"Finn..." She says weakly. He continues to hold her in his arms.
"Yeah," He barely manages the reply.
"Thanks for not leaving me and all..." She says. He can feel her starting to go limp. The garlic is basically melting her from the inside out.
"Marcie?" He says cautiously. Then, panic sets in as he realizes what's happening.
"Marice! No! Hold on, I can get us to the Candy Kingdom in like two seconds! Just hold on!" She puts a finger to his lips.
"Shh...it's ok," She says. This doesn't comfort him, it just makes him worry more.

"Marcie...."
"Sing to me," She says and closes her eyes. "Just do it, weenie." And he does as he is told. He sings the one song that helped him to sleep as a child, the one song that comforted him no matter what was happening. He sings his mother's lullabye.
"That's cute..." She says and smiles. "Except you're not a puppy. Well, maybe you kinda are," She says and pats the ears on his hat. "Thanks for everything, Finn." Then, her hand falls and she's gone.

"Marcie...MARCIE!" Finn shouts as the rain clouds come to play, leaving him with nothing but the sound of water pounding the Earth and the shell of the girl he once loved clutched tightly in his arms.
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Yeah, it's sad. What inspired this is a show called "House", dunno if many of you have heard of it. The particular episode for said inspiration is called "Wilson's Heart" and it has to be the saddest thing I have ever watched.
Also, the songs "Run" by Snow Patrol, "Wasted Years" by Cold, "Tonight" by Seether and "Your Guardian Angel" by The Red Jumpsuit Apparatus helped. (Why does it seem like every song on my Ipod depressing? -_-; haha)
I've also been reading some sad fics here lately...
Another thing, I had a REALLY awesome version of this drawing that I was working on, but my computer decided that it was time to update windows while Heather left for two seconds and shut everything down D= Oh I was so upset! So this is my best replica of it =/ So it's not that great, bah! (ノò__ó)ノ彡┻━┻ But it gets the point across haha. And nobody take this too seriously, like with Vampire logic "She would have known" and stuff, it's just a story. I like doing this whole story thing...I might do more.
Hm. To be continued?
AT owned by PW
~HNRat
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Comments: 66

EternalSummer14 [2015-02-09 01:56:50 +0000 UTC]

* She Dramatically Falls Onto Her Knees And Screams Into The Rain, "Marciii.." *

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Cruciature [2014-07-17 03:02:27 +0000 UTC]

Is it sick that I like sad moments like these?

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arianagrandefan740 [2014-07-07 00:53:36 +0000 UTC]

   

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marclene [2014-04-13 09:36:06 +0000 UTC]

ugh the end why

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marclene [2014-04-13 09:34:52 +0000 UTC]

this is theend for every life and I know that but I'm crying why? stupid jake!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!          

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Kiraskoolcreations [2014-03-03 03:01:14 +0000 UTC]

Why!?!?!

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Kiraskoolcreations [2014-03-03 02:59:34 +0000 UTC]

Noooooooooooooo +cries *

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ichigoku [2013-10-13 18:05:36 +0000 UTC]

JAKE!

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NikDoc22 [2013-05-09 18:47:32 +0000 UTC]

Nooo! Marcy!Dont die!

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meowmeowzz123 [2013-01-24 03:48:37 +0000 UTC]

GREAT YOU MADE ME CRY!!

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HNRat In reply to meowmeowzz123 [2013-02-02 23:01:49 +0000 UTC]

Aw, I'm sorry! *Hands you a tissue* It ends happy so don't cry!

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meowmeowzz123 In reply to HNRat [2013-02-06 01:19:37 +0000 UTC]

*Takes tissue, voice breaks.* How?

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evilex3 [2012-12-15 23:20:31 +0000 UTC]

! Is there a sequel to this? I really want to know what happens next. Love your art btw ^^

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HNRat In reply to evilex3 [2012-12-28 22:01:31 +0000 UTC]

There will be in the future! I just don't know when, I've been uber busy with school crud :/ but thank you so much! I'm glad you like it!!

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lastlife0726 [2012-11-14 02:01:10 +0000 UTC]

What if the Lich is a woman... and Marceline is her daughter? Think about it. If Jake turned into the Lich in the alternate world, then who turned into the lich in the normal world? It would have to be someone durring the time of the Mushroom War.

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andybiersack1 [2012-08-08 17:13:47 +0000 UTC]

House is awesome. But poor marcie )___

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HNRat In reply to andybiersack1 [2012-08-10 06:37:38 +0000 UTC]

I know, I love that show! But yeah But she'll be alright! He'll save her!

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andybiersack1 In reply to HNRat [2012-08-10 11:40:21 +0000 UTC]

Yeah he will.

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K-El-Amrani [2012-07-28 01:53:06 +0000 UTC]

What an emotional picture. Nice work.

It's quite striking.

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HNRat In reply to K-El-Amrani [2012-07-28 02:27:23 +0000 UTC]

Thank you so much!! I'm glad you like it!!

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HinataHyugaKonoha [2012-05-24 01:42:06 +0000 UTC]

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Stacey104201 [2012-04-21 01:39:36 +0000 UTC]

Y U Make me cry forever?!
I SHIP THEM!

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HNRat In reply to Stacey104201 [2012-04-23 16:04:15 +0000 UTC]

D'aw ,don't cry! There is a second part I'm making coming out next month sometime that will make everything better

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Stacey104201 In reply to HNRat [2012-04-24 03:35:26 +0000 UTC]

YES!!!

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King-Mettaton [2012-03-31 14:38:24 +0000 UTC]

*panics* oh shit! FINN IM A DOCTOR!!!!!!

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HNRat In reply to King-Mettaton [2012-04-01 03:04:27 +0000 UTC]

haha! Oh goodness. Save'em Chiaki!! You can do it!

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King-Mettaton In reply to HNRat [2012-04-01 03:18:26 +0000 UTC]

what the hell did finn feed her?!

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HNRat In reply to King-Mettaton [2012-04-01 03:44:16 +0000 UTC]

Jake made some soup that had Garlic powder in it and she drank it. Finn didn't fed it to her, she was teasing him and drank it, he tried to stop her.

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King-Mettaton In reply to HNRat [2012-04-01 03:58:36 +0000 UTC]

oh for the love of jesus......i need an eppy pen

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BlackRose666666 [2012-03-22 19:13:52 +0000 UTC]

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Righteous-Darkness [2012-03-20 00:53:13 +0000 UTC]

:_( *falls on knees dramatically* NOOOOOOOO!!!!! WHYYY MARCIE!!!! SHE WAS MY FAVORITE FRICKIN CHARACTER!! DAMN YOU JAKE!!!! OK Im done with the drama bombs. xD wow i just love the accents you did with the background and Marcie's hair and the tears...I shan't forget Finn's rare tears...:_( awesome, I'm anxiously waiting for the next part.

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HNRat In reply to Righteous-Darkness [2012-03-20 15:28:21 +0000 UTC]

Poor Jakey just didn't think Marcie would eat the soup =[ And thank you so much! It will be up...someday soon hopefully...haha.

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MeheToxic [2012-03-19 07:09:46 +0000 UTC]

AWWW please continue.. I don't want Marcy to die!!!

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HNRat In reply to MeheToxic [2012-03-19 22:02:39 +0000 UTC]

It shall be continued...soonish. Just gotta keep an eye out for it.

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MeheToxic In reply to HNRat [2012-03-19 23:15:39 +0000 UTC]

Ok coolio

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DeepC [2012-03-19 05:37:40 +0000 UTC]

Wait, WHY JAKE?!

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HNRat In reply to DeepC [2012-03-19 22:01:13 +0000 UTC]

He didn't know man, he didn't know. D,= It was a simple mistake...

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DeepC In reply to HNRat [2012-03-19 23:05:25 +0000 UTC]

Poor Jake, Finn, and Marceline.

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Purplestar31 [2012-03-19 03:32:39 +0000 UTC]

I meant write

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Purplestar31 [2012-03-19 03:32:08 +0000 UTC]

Noooo noooo Marcy please don't leave. WE LOVE YOU!!

Waaaaaaah she's gone!!

How sad. And you can really right.

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HNRat In reply to Purplestar31 [2012-03-19 21:59:27 +0000 UTC]

Aw, don't worry! Come back for the next part! It'll be up...soonish... And thank you so much!

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Purplestar31 In reply to HNRat [2012-03-20 00:40:20 +0000 UTC]

Wait?!
THERE's ANOTHER PART??!!

Woah I can't wait.

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sunny0509 [2012-03-19 01:45:26 +0000 UTC]

NOOOOOO!! she was my favorite! marcie please oh please be ok

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fireangel20 [2012-03-19 00:12:13 +0000 UTC]

*tear*

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soraxbabe [2012-03-18 21:24:17 +0000 UTC]

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misterpanque [2012-03-18 20:25:13 +0000 UTC]

IM NOT CRYING!! IM JUST SWEATING THROUGH THE EYES!!

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Kikomazumi [2012-03-18 20:24:14 +0000 UTC]

NNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNNOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!! :C

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poofiedogg [2012-03-18 20:18:35 +0000 UTC]

*sniff* POOR MARCELINE!!! *sob*

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Cybermon [2012-03-18 18:57:11 +0000 UTC]

who kill her anyway?. is it doctor doom or M.O.D.O.K?.

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HNRat In reply to Cybermon [2012-03-18 19:53:07 +0000 UTC]

Um, if you read the story in the description it says that she ate some soup that had garlic in it. And the show has never really said specifically that garlic can kill Vampires (Though Jake throws some at Marcie in Henchman) but I'm assuming it would since the shows writer's have gone with all the other myths on how to kill Vampires.

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