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R-Doll [2017-04-20 18:02:58 +0000 UTC]

stupendous *o*

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AuburnZero [2017-04-17 14:20:55 +0000 UTC]

Hi from Project Comment.

I want to begin my critique by saying how impressed I am by the visual depth and intriguing color pallet.  Also, your character's proportions and facial architecture are quite good.

Nevertheless, there are some areas in which I believe some improvement could be made, and which it seems would be well within the scope of your already demonstrated acumen.  The first I want to mention is the least significant: the angles of the leaves on the vines.  The leaves all point out to the sides, making them look 2D.  There's no twist, no leave seen on edge, no broken or split leaf.  This is a minor detail, but it's just the sort of thing that can make a good piece great.  There's only one other criticism I'd levy, and that is that the title doesn't fit.  Everything I see in her pose speaks of graceful lifting, not forced restraint.  The ruffle on her dress is lifted either by her suddenly being dropped, or by a strong wind from below, or because it's weightlessly lifting as she rises like a bubble toward the light.  Other indications in the piece lean me toward the latter option, including that there are actual bubbles in the picture.  Mostly, though, it's the arms.  Her right hand is turned downward and open.  When someone lifts a weight (pulling against gravity) they turn their hand palm up to maximize the effectiveness of their biceps.  If she is pulling against the vines, then her hand should also be palm up.  Her left arm is bent gracefully, and her hand is delicately posed.  Person's straining against bonds aren't often either graceful or delicate, but forceful and strained.  The vine being wrapped so loosely around that left arm is not trapping her in the least.  And with it terminating in her open palm, she looks like she's trying to bring the vine to the leaf floating above.  She looks like she's helping the vine.

So the image is well executed and well produced, as an image, but it doesn't communicate--at least not to me--a sense of being "trapped".  To improve you could adjust the image, or you could just change the title.

I hope that was helpful.

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Phosphrous-And-Babel [2017-04-15 00:16:14 +0000 UTC]

Hello! Im from ProjectComment and I wanted to stop by and give some constructive criticism!     

First off, I wanted to say that I think you did a lovely job with the usage of foreground, mid-ground, and background. The sense of depth and layers really pulls the piece together neatly with the three mixing so smoothly. The idea of having seaweed crossing the camera is also a quite unique choice, as they set the pieces tone off. I also like the pose of the woman. It is very natural and has good action. Her clothes are also well done, they are simple and get the point of modest elegance across, with the toned periwinkle matching the general color palette of the image. The usage of colors is lovely, not only keeping the number of colors minimal, but also using soft, smooth colors that compliment one another. What I think you could do to improve the piece is maybe watch the anatomy of the woman more closely. While some things such as her hands, arms, and shoulders have good anatomy, things such as her waist and neck are too skinny, and do not match the rest of her body. Another fixable mistake was to put the image on a black background. While the main focus of the image is wonderful, you can barely see the fish in the background, and I missed them the first 6-8 times I observed the image while typing this comment. Perhaps you could set the background to a slow gradient of navy and deep Prussian blue would give the sense of light fading within the water, and give the fishes more noticeable lines as they really help explain the piece in it's entirety. Overall, the image has a great idea, however getting the point across is a bit of the long stretch as you are almost missing vital details within the background. Great job!  The piece overall!

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theYasha [2017-04-14 23:12:52 +0000 UTC]

Lovely! The shading and colors are great!

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SilverMuttt [2017-04-14 21:30:06 +0000 UTC]

My heavens this is beautiful! 

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