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fuzzah — Lacking Sympathy
Published: 2004-11-02 04:27:12 +0000 UTC; Views: 166; Favourites: 1; Downloads: 25
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Send these old notes up in ashesWhen you swore you loved me
But you never swore to tell the truth
And those photographs of you and I
Smiles I wish I could manipulate into frowns
And memories I wish to erase.
Just to pretend it never happened.
I feel like laughing at feelings towards you
Like you deserved what I felt.
Mocking the presence of your spirit
And now locking myself in a room lacking your presence
Just so I can feel alive again
I loathe you
And I loathe how you made me feel.
I hate the way the words flowed off your tongue
Words doesn’t seem like a fair description
More like deceit or lies.
I hate how I tried so hard
I wanted to make you happy
And to do whatever you wished of me
And she just flowed in and won you over
Without any real effort
Now I can finally find meaning in the words
“Nice guys finish last”
Because, I will always finish last in your mind
Finish last to that girl whom you adore.
Looking her over with your eyes.
Those eyes I wish would be gouged out.
And, having her kissing up your neck in a dark room
That neck I wish I could slip into a noose,
Then push you off a looming chair
Laughing at your pain and anguish
And watching you slowly feel how I do now.
No one should ever feel the way that I do now.
Except you.
You want that tramp?
Run away, fall at your knees over her.
I could never be your muse
And somehow, it kills me inside.
I can’t be what you wanted
After putting my all into it for so long
I pulled this charade for too long, in fact.
And you dragged me down for too long as well.
I don’t know what I ever saw in you
And I will never remake that mistake again
Don’t waste your last breath on me.
Just go on and forget I’m here.
I can just make you a figment of my imagination
And pretend you don’t make me feel the way I do.
You don’t exist to me anymore.
And I don’t think I cross your mind either.
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Comments: 9
This is so beautifully written...I can just know how you're feeling in this, like if you were here telling me to my face. It flows very well, and reminds of the things I've wanted to right for a long time.
It also reminds me that I need to start writing more and more...again.
Thanks for this.
"No one should ever feel the way that I do now"
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very powerful, i love the sheer emotion in it
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This is quite awesome Laura. I can't comment on poetry critically because I'm an awful poet. I agree with deKAy32, remake and again don't work well.. it's kind of that double negative thing...
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I don’t know what I ever saw in you
And I will never remake that mistake again
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That bottom line is the only line I don't really like...other then that I absolutly love it. But "rmake that mistake again" seems kind of...off. If you had made it "Make that mistake again" or "Remake that mistake" it would make more sense. Yeh. -hugs-
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