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comatose-comet β€” moon.tether
Published: 2019-01-26 19:47:26 +0000 UTC; Views: 440; Favourites: 32; Downloads: 0
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Description impetuous dreams of
seashores and your scarf
billowing in open breezes,
granulated images dusted
with salt and the rinds
of leftover tides,
your footprints stark
in miles of wet sand.

I have all these dreams
of running, to Paris or
Bali, never stopping until
we run out of air
to breathe or reach
the very edges
of the map.

I’m convinced the lines
on my palms are a mess
of co-ordinates,
the longitudes
and latitudes
of all the seashores
we should stand at,
our toes in the ocean
and our heels
on solid ground,
my hair
wild and buffeted,
your scarf
streaming,
as we take
one last
moonshine breath
and run our way
off the map
entirely.

coral fibres left imprinted
on our cheeks, we could
drown in the reefs beneath
the dinner-plates
of the earth, or perhaps
slip into another realm
of currents and moon-tether
and sea-storms,
where we start with
no air and no place
left to run,
but all this time
to hold,
all this time
to stay,
dancing to the tune
of whale-song
slowly receding,
as we sing back
in happier keys.
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Comments: 14

hopeburnsblue [2019-02-05 00:08:11 +0000 UTC]

Love the image of running to the edge of the map and then eventually off the map entirely--pushing a boundary and then breaking it. I also was seeing this play out like a movie, but with the map metaphors, my ind's eye literally panned from footage to a 2D animation. It was great. Beautiful imagery.

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comatose-comet In reply to hopeburnsblue [2019-05-23 18:55:41 +0000 UTC]

Thank you Mel! All of your kind comments have been sat in my inbox waiting for a sunny day like today to finally be replied to (I have read them many times over mulling over how to reply beyond massive all-caps shouting THANK YOU for your support and feedback which never fails to lift me and inspire me. I will do my best to put this sentiment in other words, but the intention is the same). Hope you are doing well and enjoying a moment of sunshine wherever you are today

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rialovesfanfic [2019-02-03 23:58:23 +0000 UTC]

this is gorgeous!! fills me with wanderlustΒ 

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comatose-comet In reply to rialovesfanfic [2019-03-27 22:31:09 +0000 UTC]

thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it

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rialovesfanfic In reply to comatose-comet [2019-03-28 03:37:56 +0000 UTC]

of course!

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LittleStarKid [2019-01-27 04:20:18 +0000 UTC]

This is more minimalist than I recall seeing in much of your stuff. I like it, I think the short lines add a feeling of urgency.

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comatose-comet In reply to LittleStarKid [2019-03-27 22:32:09 +0000 UTC]

I was aiming for minimalist so I'm glad you noticed (and didn't hate it!!!) I have less to say these days, so shorter lines will become a Thing in future

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beeswingblue [2019-01-27 01:29:23 +0000 UTC]

Lovely.

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comatose-comet In reply to beeswingblue [2019-03-27 22:30:50 +0000 UTC]

thank you

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YouInventedMe [2019-01-26 20:49:19 +0000 UTC]

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comatose-comet In reply to YouInventedMe [2019-03-27 22:32:28 +0000 UTC]

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dark-n-bright [2019-01-26 20:30:42 +0000 UTC]

Β 

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comatose-comet In reply to dark-n-bright [2019-03-27 22:30:43 +0000 UTC]

thank you for reading

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dark-n-bright In reply to comatose-comet [2019-03-28 13:12:41 +0000 UTC]

my pleasure - thank you for sharing

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