Comments: 41
panther420 [2006-10-11 08:40:21 +0000 UTC]
there are a few typos I believe but besides that it is an enjoyable read....perhaps the reason you stopped feeling the way you felt when you began the poem was because you were able to let those nasty emotions flow from your mind onto the paper
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mngamojemo [2004-05-05 17:16:04 +0000 UTC]
In my opinion, this poem would have a smoother flow if you got rid of the commas at the end of many of the lines. These commas make the lines drop off and lend an otherwise fine work an amateur feel.
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broke4ua In reply to celeste718 [2004-04-29 21:24:33 +0000 UTC]
um its not on ur page
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celeste718 In reply to broke4ua [2004-04-29 21:29:43 +0000 UTC]
well damn, my AIM and yahoo sn is gothchef83 and my msn messanger is unicornbaby_718@msn.com
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summitgirl [2004-04-21 15:48:22 +0000 UTC]
thats awesome! your getting a favorite as well!
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broke4ua In reply to AlexxTheX-Echidna [2004-04-08 20:45:38 +0000 UTC]
sorry sprayings just so much more fun *sprays more*
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the-true-beast [2004-03-29 23:22:48 +0000 UTC]
Great work ,keep it coming.
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Broken-Hearted-Again In reply to broke4ua [2003-12-13 01:46:25 +0000 UTC]
i havent sepreated ya work from good o bad yet all i know is all ive seen so far is gfood
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bleedingpairs [2003-11-02 21:58:58 +0000 UTC]
The emotions expressed are very powerful. Bolshy kudos.
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broke4ua In reply to bleedingpairs [2003-11-02 22:17:28 +0000 UTC]
Thanx for the comment im glad you like it
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Silver-Rage [2003-10-12 15:39:28 +0000 UTC]
Wow this is really good stuff.
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loveless-lost [2003-08-21 22:08:29 +0000 UTC]
omg very very emotional and dark really good !!! thanks agin for commenting!!
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brinx- [2003-07-23 00:28:48 +0000 UTC]
Good stuff. Dark but with some interesting stark imagery too.
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-f-e-a-r- [2003-07-03 05:18:57 +0000 UTC]
Excellent poem....it's so sad and powerful. Thanks for the comment too.
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darkcrescendo [2003-07-01 06:14:07 +0000 UTC]
Very dark. I like it.
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