maybesomeday [2003-08-17 02:38:10 +0000 UTC]

Whoa. I have to agree with the above comment. You have completely turned the concept of pain on its head, but kept it so true.

"...caress me..." It seems like a contradiction to use that phrase with the concept of pain, but it isn't! It actually works!

Excellent piece and the newest member of my fav list.

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unheard-voice [2003-08-16 07:12:22 +0000 UTC]

this is great. you've found the positive aspect of pain and transformed it into a beautiful poem. very nicely done. keep up the writing.

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morbidangel420 [2003-08-11 04:16:55 +0000 UTC]

wow, nice work.

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undefinability [2003-08-10 19:18:59 +0000 UTC]

"so many choices
yet all unwise "

I've been down the path that each journey will always be an unwise one, but you always have to go down at least one of them. I once went down one that resuted in a suicide attempt, and will never go down that path again.
Great piece, I can't wait to read more.

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