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Zeke1661 [2023-05-10 22:46:10 +0000 UTC]

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GeneralDodders In reply to Zeke1661 [2023-05-10 23:56:15 +0000 UTC]

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komhgirl [2022-03-11 07:09:34 +0000 UTC]

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GeneralDodders In reply to blakesiev [2021-12-13 17:21:29 +0000 UTC]

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Slangolator [2021-01-05 11:57:51 +0000 UTC]

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GeneralDodders In reply to Slangolator [2021-01-05 12:01:21 +0000 UTC]

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michaelcade [2020-10-11 18:20:50 +0000 UTC]

What is your Star Wars fanfiction universe about

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GeneralDodders In reply to michaelcade [2020-10-12 02:33:20 +0000 UTC]

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michaelcade In reply to GeneralDodders [2020-10-12 10:59:36 +0000 UTC]

Oh and btw thanks for adding legends characters like Maris brood, Rahm Kota, Tyber Zann, Durge and Urai Fen to your fanfiction I like those characters

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michaelcade In reply to GeneralDodders [2020-10-12 10:50:07 +0000 UTC]

Ok thanks

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oriondragon1811 [2020-09-01 05:05:02 +0000 UTC]

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GeneralDodders In reply to oriondragon1811 [2020-09-01 11:18:37 +0000 UTC]

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trashtou [2019-09-12 09:44:05 +0000 UTC]

i love you

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Precipitous120 [2019-05-03 18:45:38 +0000 UTC]

Hello

I'm a fan fiction writer, and while that title doesn't hold much I hope you will consider allowing me to use your work and ideas for a future chapter of my work.

I'll of give you credit, and as your work will be the cover art of the chapter I can only hope that will increase traffic to your work and improve both our readerships

Well what do you say?

Does that sound good to you?

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GeneralDodders In reply to Precipitous120 [2019-05-05 02:18:51 +0000 UTC]

Hello, you are more than welcome to use my ideas. I saw your comment on PumiiH's picture. I don't have my own fanficition because I am not a writer so I am unable to put my ideas to paper. As such, the only way I can bring my ideas to life is by commissioning other artists to draw them for me. I have a large assortment of OCs and other stories that you can look at as well if you are interested. I would like to know which of my ideas you are thinking about integrating into your own story. Of course, you are free to use my ideas in whatever way you want as it is your story. I am just curious as to the direction you plan to take.

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Precipitous120 In reply to GeneralDodders [2019-05-05 09:37:12 +0000 UTC]

In my Naruto story, my main character says something to Sakura on the line of improving ones self

My main character was basically unknown to the ninja world before the chunin game tornament.

Anyway...

I thought it would be appropriate if Sakura took his advice to heart.

I find it frustrating in the Naruto series, that whenever a female character is strong you either never see here fight or she gets weak before the action even starts.

Then you get instances where you do see female characters kicking ass, but they go out of their way to give them some emotional complex that stops them from being all they can be

Make them evil
Make them weak
Make them shy
Make them stupid
Make them afraid

It's infuriating!

Anyway your work inspires me to make female roles more, while at the same time not diverting from cannon. Simply creating a canonical reason why we never see them around.

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GeneralDodders In reply to Precipitous120 [2019-05-05 11:57:26 +0000 UTC]

I completely agree with you. I feel Kishimoto screwed a lot of his female characters over, especially Sakura and Hinata. Not only did they have limited chances to shine in comparison to their male counterparts, their jutsu arsenal was very limited. That is why I commissioned other artists to draw my ideas for jutsu they could use and also storylines in which they use them. When I come up with jutsu, I try to take what I see in the anime and expand upon it so that it is not out of character. My current project that PumiiH is working on expands on Tenten's abilities if someone actually put some thought into her. I have a variety of jutsu ideas for Sakura if you are interested in seeing them.

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Precipitous120 In reply to GeneralDodders [2019-05-05 16:42:52 +0000 UTC]

I wanted to focus on Sakur's cherry blossom bombs

Which she uses in one of the anime movies.

Mainly I wanted to consider, where does I come from?

Still I would like to hear any and all ideas you have. Let's both get excited about the possibilities

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GeneralDodders In reply to Precipitous120 [2019-05-05 19:19:18 +0000 UTC]

Interesting thing, in the series Sakura's Oath that PumiiH drew, Kizashi is the one who is performing the Cherry Blossom jutsu. I was inspired for this based on Kizashi's cherry blossom theme he had going for him; his hair is shaped like a cherry blossom, he wears a cherry blossom pendant, and he named his daughter Sakura, so I thought I'd give him cherry blossom jutsu. In my story, Kizashi can summon numerous cherry blossom petals (in a manner similar to how Konan summons pieces of paper instead of using bags of petals) which he can merge his chakra with for multiple purposes, including hardening the petals so as to cut targets as well as create makeshift armor for himself, have them explode on command, and stick to an opponent's body and run chakra into them to paralyze them. Here are links to pictures displaying and explaining Kizashi's jutsu: www.deviantart.com/mattwilson8…, www.deviantart.com/mattwilson8…. In my story, I don't have Sakura performing this jutsu because I wanted her to have her own unique movset. But if you want to have Kizashi teach this jutsu to Sakura in your story, that is your decision.

Here are some of the jutsu ideas that I came up with for Sakura if you are interested:
www.deviantart.com/mattwilson8…
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Precipitous120 In reply to GeneralDodders [2019-05-06 10:30:06 +0000 UTC]

Very interesting

I like the fact that you didn't just give here all these powers all at once but rather you had them develop through the different instances in her life

The slug powers interested me because it reminded me of pervy sage. Up until his death we never saw him use sage jutsu, and the reason was revealed that he didn't like what the toad nature chakra did to his features. Sakura would equally dislike using slug jutsu for that reason, which means we have a cannon loop hole we can take advantage of. The reason why we never saw her use this jutsu in cannon was because she didn't like what it did to her lady like image, and or the slug was too weak to use in major events of the story line.

In the anime it was explained that Tsunada was the strongest ninja physically, but she was handicapped by the fact that she is slow. This was mentioned by the Rikage

However to me that doesn't make much sense. Tsunada's special seal of a thousand seals, is in essences just a very powerful chakra enhancement and storage. To me that says she can enhance any of her abilities and supply extra chakra to any of her jutsu's. In this regard I'm not willing to follow cannon. TSUNADA WILL FIGHT PAIN!

Perhaps I'll say she can not amplify speed and strength at the same time, but she can still rush to get opponent and punch them changing speed into strength at the last nano second.

If that is the case then so can Sakura.

Anyway now I'm all worked up and eager to get to writing

Thank you once again

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majohnson9191 [2018-05-08 00:03:00 +0000 UTC]

How much did you spend in total on that Haruno's Legacy fanfic?

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GeneralDodders In reply to majohnson9191 [2018-05-08 00:53:33 +0000 UTC]

Sorry but I am not really comfortable saying how much I have spent. I will say that I am not in bankruptcy. Why are you interested if I may ask?

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majohnson9191 In reply to GeneralDodders [2018-05-08 02:50:09 +0000 UTC]

I was interested in seeing how much a series of art pieces like that would cost cause I was interested in seeing if I could do something similar. 

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Thunderland47 [2017-06-12 10:07:09 +0000 UTC]

After seeing a lot of your ideas, I've been wondering what do you have for Sasuke? Like how would you develop him?

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GeneralDodders In reply to Thunderland47 [2017-06-12 11:15:26 +0000 UTC]

Are you asking about development in terms of his abilities or character?

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Thunderland47 In reply to GeneralDodders [2017-06-12 12:27:25 +0000 UTC]

His character

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GeneralDodders In reply to Thunderland47 [2017-06-12 15:17:13 +0000 UTC]

So this is how I develop Sasuke in my story:

After his family is killed, Sasuke is raised by Mikoto's parents. As they are disheartened by their daughter's death, Sasuke's grandparents never discourage Sasuke from seeking vengeance against Itachi. When Sasuke leaves the village to find Orochimaru, his grandparents are overcome with guilt for not being there for him when he needed them. 

When Sasuke leaves the Leaf Village, the leader of the Hidden Shadow Village, Fukushuu Tasogare, infiltrates Orochimaru's base and kills him. He then seizes all of Orochimaru's research and assets. When Sasuke arrives, Fukushuu takes him in to train him to kill Itachi. Fukushuu also uses his special abilities to activate Sasuke's Mangekyo Sharingan without him having to kill a loved one.

The Leaf Village manages to acquire a Bikochu beetle which they use to track Sasuke to the Shadow Village's hideout. Realizing that the Leaf tracked Sasuke to him, Fukushuu orders his apprentice Rensho Atsumori to kill the Uchiha and take his Sharingan. Before Rensho can finish Sasuke, Naruto and Sakura step into protect him. During the brawl, Rensho accuses Sasuke for being no different than Itachi for abandoning his village, severing his bonds with everyone who cared for him, and trying to kill his closest friends for the sake of power. As Sasuke dwells on Rensho's words, he watches Naruto and Sakura risk their lives o protect him even after everything he did to them. He also remembers how during the fight with Gaara he told Naruto that he never wanted to experience losing the people he cared for most again. It is in this moment that Sasuke decide not sever the bonds with his friends; he is still intends to kill Itachi but vows not to become him. Sasuke manages to drive off Rensho and then he is brought back to the Leaf Village, where he stays to learn to use his Mangekyo Sharingan from Kakashi. I feel under these circumstances Sasuke's friendship with Naruto and Sakura would have a stronger foundation than in the canon because they have more time together.

While Sasuke trains in the Leaf during the 2.5 year period he ends up developing a relationship with Sakura. Eventually Sasuke leaves the village to kill Itachi, but after that he learns from Tobi the truth of Itachi and why his family was killed. It is then that Sasuke realizes that the friendships and happy memories in the Leaf Village were built on the blood of his clan and he vows revenge. The Naruto/Sasuke relationship here would be more like the Hashirama/Madara relationship: first they were friends, then they were enemies, then they were friends again, then they became enemies again. Also since Sasuke and Sakura would have some more chemistry it would make SasuSaku more believable.

In addition, when Sasuke goes to kill Danzo at the Five Kage Summit, the Shadow Village launches a full scale attack which Sasuke uses as a distraction (thereby eliminating the need for him to kill numerous samurai as in the canon and trying to make him appear less like a psychopath).

Itachi still gets reanimated by Kabuto and freed from his crow he placed in Naruto. He then goes off to find Sasuke and tells him his side of the story. He also tells Sasuke the story of Madara and Hashirama as he heard from Hiruzen who heard it from Hashirama. It is then that Sasuke vows to become the Hokage that Itachi could not become and goes to join the Shinobi Alliance in the war. In order to help gain their trust by saving Sakura who was turned into a puppet by Sasori (you would have to look at the series "The Cherry Blossom Puppet" I commissioned dannex009 to draw. However, his intentions involve killing of the jinchuriki in order to destroy the tailed beasts so that no one can use them for wars again (which would lead to the final fight between Naruto and Sasuke).

When Sasuke ends up fighting the leader of the Shadow Village, Fukushuu, it is revealed that he was the one who orchestrated the Uchiha coup d'état by manipulating Fugaku with the hopes of having the Leaf and Uchiha destroy each other. Long ago, the Tasogare Clan were wiped out by Madara Uchiha while Hashirama Senju and the Leaf failed to do anything. Fukushuu's father was the sole survivor of the massacre and was imbedded with a deep searing hatred for the Uchiha and the Leaf. This hatred was then drilled into his son who was raised to ensure that both the Uchiha and the Leaf paid for what they did to their clan. As Sasuke's actions were driven by avenging his family, Fukushuu's actions were driven by avenging his. Together, Naruto and Sasuke manage to defeat Fukushuu and Sasuke kills him.

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Thunderland47 In reply to GeneralDodders [2020-01-17 03:55:56 +0000 UTC]

Hello Dodders, I want another confirmation on how Satsuki would fair against Fukushuu.

Even with armor ten times stronger than a Version 2 shroud, it won’t help Fukushuu if he gets hit by a Teleportation Projectile, which makes durability irrelevant.  Fukushuu’s best tactic is to maintain a considerable distance from Satsuki in order to keep her from getting a clear shot at him with her Teleportation Projectiles.  While this might sound possible with his massive ice techniques and polar bear, Satsuki’s Susanoo speed, Space-Time ninjutsu, and Chokuo Tomoe won’t exactly make this an easy task.  The polar bear does sound intimidating but it’s also a very big target, keep in mind that Satsuki’s strongest plasma attack can vaporize an entire mountain and leave nothing but a massive scorching crater in its place.

As for the will reduction ability, I was thinking if Satsuki’s mental shield would give her at least some form of resistance to it.  While the mental arm can only reverse Genjutsu, the shield can block all forms of mental attacks.  What do you think of this idea?

An idea I had for defeating the Polar Bear is not something similar to megazords or gundam, but something similar to Attack on Titan, God of War, or Metal Gear.  
Here's a video of the boss fight with Cronos from God of War 3 to see what I mean.
www.youtube.com/watch?v=ki-Nj6…

You said before that Satsuki would have an uphill battle if she were to fight Fukushuu by herself.  But what do you think after seeing what Satsuki is fully capable of?

Also I’ve been wondering, if Sasuke/Satsuki does beat Fukushuu one on one, how would this impact the story?

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GeneralDodders In reply to Thunderland47 [2020-01-17 17:17:30 +0000 UTC]

Hey there. The thing is that Fukushuu is my OC who was tailormade for my story, not yours. The way you made Satsuki so powerful would enable her to defeat Fukushuu easily. I designed Fukushuu and his arsenal of jutsu for fighting my version of Sasuke (whose power is pretty much at the same level as canon). I expressed how overpowered I feel Satsuki is and the fact that she can still easily defeat a character who has 1000 souls sealed inside of himself in single combat pretty much confirms that; it would be like how in Zatch Bell Zeno easily defeated Riou without breaking a sweat. I understand that this is the direction you want to take Satsuki, but if you want to give Fukushuu a fighting chance against Satsuki then you will need to think of something on your own. The abilities I gave Fukushuu are for him fighting my versions of Naruto and Sasuke, not your Satsuki.

As for the will reduction ability, Fukushuu's power affects a person's soul, not their brain. The principle is similar to how Naruto is able to sense people's emotions while in Nine Tails Mode rather than read people's mind; he is more of an empath than a telepath. It seems like a mental shield is something that would protect the brain rather than a soul, but that's just my opinion.

Lastly, in my story I would not have Sasuke defeat Fukushuu one on one because that would only serve to reinforce his belief that he can do everything by himself and that he doesn't need friends. Granted, Satsuki isn't an asshole like Sasuke. Also, I feel like it would diminish Naruto's role a bit if he didn't play a part in defeating Fukushuu; it would be like Sasuke defeating Obito, Madara, and Kaguya all by himself.

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Thunderland47 In reply to GeneralDodders [2020-01-19 05:37:13 +0000 UTC]

This is the only form of balance I can think of in regards to Satsuki’s power.  Remember that Naruto is not a series about simply being stronger that your enemy, it’s also about match up, compatibility and strategy.  Power-wise, I don’t think Satsuki and Fukushuu are tiers apart from each other.  Any reason for Satsuki winning is more likely due to match up and strategy rather than being straight up stronger.  If there’s anything else you want to know about Satsuki’s power, feel free to ask.

I’m starting to concede that still need Naruto’s help to beat Fukushuu.  While Satsuki can counter most of Fukushuu’s moveset, I feel that the will reduction ability is going a constant thorn in Satsuki’s side.  I suppose your right about it being weird if Naruto doesn’t get involved with taking down Fukushuu.  The art of Sasuke vs Fukushuu is where I got the impression of the fight being one vs one.  Fukushuu’s profile almost hypes him up to Sasuke’s enemy.  It even feels like Sasuke has more of a personal reason than Naruto to fight Fukushuu.

I guess you and I simply have different directions when making with how to take Sasuke’s power.  What was your motive for designing Sasuke’s powers?  Here are my reasons for developing Satsuki’s powers.  Sasuke in canon is practically the Madara of his generation, he was even hyped to have greater potential than individuals like Itachi, Obito, and Nagato.  I found the way this was displayed in canon to be a disappointment.  I said before that I was tired of Sasuke being in the shadow of other Uchiha, so I became determined to make things different with Satsuki.  From that motive, I decided to make Satsuki’s potential unmatched amongst the Uchiha clan, with the only exception being Madara.

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GeneralDodders In reply to Thunderland47 [2020-01-19 14:57:03 +0000 UTC]

That art I commissioned of Sasuke and Fukushuu was just something I wanted to see the two of them together. Initially, Sasuke does fight Fukushuu alone but when it is clear he is outmatched Naruto chimes in. Also, Naruto does have multiple personal reasons for fighting Fukushuu in my story (granted not all of them will be in yours):

1.) Fukushuu corrupted the soul of Naruto's grandfather Gozen to help him in destroying the Lead Village.
2.) Fukushuu helped Sasori capture Sakura and turn her into a living puppet and forced her to fight for him.
3.) Fukushuu abducted Hinata's clan, including Neji, and enslaved them to obtain his unlimited power.
4.) Fukushuu killed Tsunade and the other Kage (except for Garaa)
5.) Fukushuu kidnapped all of the other jinchuriki and released all their inner anger to be evil and also broke the wills of the tailed beasts in order to enable the jinchuriki to use their powers.
6.) Fukushuu is responsible for the destruction of Sasuke's clan
7.) Naruto blames Fukushuu for Hanabi's death. Even though Rensho was the one who killed her, Naruto affirms that Fukushuu was the one who used his powers to corrupt Rensho's soul to turn him into a monster whereas the real Rensho would never have done that. In Naruto's eyes, Fukushuu killed Hanabi and Rensho was merely the weapon he used.
8.) Fukushuu resurrects Minato and breaks his spirit to be his servant so that he could use the Flying Thunder God jutsu to aid him in his plans. This is something I came up with recently. Gozen uses his insights into the Uzumaki clan to figure out how to undo the Reaper Death Seal and release Minato's soul. Because he doesn't trust Kabuto using the Reanimation Jutsu, Fukushuu has Tokage develop a machine that can resurrect someone by transferring the life force of a living person (I was inspired for this by how in the anime the Village of Artisans were able to resurrect Seimei by siphoning Shukaku's chakra and sacrificing Hoki). Fukushuu uses Minato's Flying Thunder God to transport all of the Side Branch Hyuga back to his base. He also uses Minato to infiltrate the Shinobi Alliance headquarters so he and the jinchuriki can kill the Kage.

Despite all these things that Fukushuu has done, Naruto is not being driven by revenge but by a desire to prevent Fukushuu from hurting anyone else. To Naruto, if Fukushuu has the power to read people's emotions and feel their pain then he should've been able to help them. Instead, Fukushuu just took advantage of their pain and turned them into either ravage monsters or broken dogs (Note: this does not apply to everyone who serves Fukushuu as most of my OCs joined him out of their own free will. This would apply to Gozen, Rensho, the jinchuriki, the tailed beasts, Karin, Minato, Hiashi, and possibly Neji). While Naruto does have a personal vendetta against Fukushuu, he is not solely driven by selfish motives like Sasuke is.


As for Sasuke's powers, I usually stick with what the anime gives me and try to expand on that as I do for all of the characters. That's why I wouldn't give Sasuke any special kind of element like Plasma Release because there is nothing in the anime to suggest that. Here are the changes to Sasuke's powers I made and the reasons for them:

1.) Sasuke has chakra enhanced speed which he learned from Kakashi during the chunin exams. I feel that it doesn't make sense for Sasuke to be naturally as fast as Rock Lee after a month of training when Lee had to spend years getting there so I made his speed jutsu based. In addition, when Kakashi and Guy were racing against each other, Kakashi managed to win despite Guy being naturally faster than him. In order to allow this to make sense in my mind, I came up with that Kakashi utilizes chakra enhanced speed in order to be able to keep up with Guy's natural speed and he teaches this technique to Sasuke. The origin of this technqiue is Shisui Uchiha, who develops and advanced version of the Body Flicker jutsu that allows him to maintain high speeds for extended periods of time while the normal version can only be performed for short moments. Kakashi then uses his Sharingan to copy it for himself. I felt it didn't make sense for Shisui to be renowned for using a D-rank jutsu unless there was something more to it.

2.) I was inspired for Sasuke's Susanoo armor mode by how Sasuke was able to over the Nine Tails in his Susanoo armor so I figured the same could be done to his own body. In addition, I felt Sasuke could be able to cloak his armor in Amaterasu based on how he could cloak his ribs and weapons in the flames.

3.) I feel that Sasuke and Itachi's Mangekyo Sharingan should have the same abilities based on the premise of the Eternal Mangekyo Sharingan. In my mind, if two brothers' Sharingan had different abilities, then when one brother removes his own Sharingan and implants his brothers, he would lose his own Sharingan's powers and gain his brother's. In order to rectify this, I feel that Sasuke and Itachi should have the same Mangekyo Sharingan powers such that Sasuke can use Tsukuyomi and Itachi can use Blaze Release to manipulate his Amaterasu.

4.) In my story, Sasuke inherits the Lightning Swords Kiba which he uses in conjunction with his Chidori. By running his Chidori through the blades, the natural lightning that are imbued within the swords will amplify the power of the Chidori tenfold. I also feel this is probable because in Boruto, Buntan was able to channel chakra into the blades and amplify it before returning it to her. I gave Sasuke these swords because in my story he doesn't get the Sword of Kusanagi and I didn't want to cheat him out of a cool sword.

5.) I decided not to give Sasuke the Rinnegan because, as I stated before, I feel it could only be obtained by mixing Uchiha and Senju/Uzumaki chakra together which doesn't happen to Sasuke at this point. I was also thinking about doing away the the Sage of the Six Paths meeting Naruto and Sasuke.


In addition, I made some efforts to alter Madara's power to make seem a little less overpowered:

1.) Madara only has one Rinnegan instead of two. I deduce this own how Obito said he was only able to use one Rinnegan because he did not have Senju/Uzumaki chakra. As such Madara should only be able to utilize one Rinnegan. When using Limbo: Border Jail, Madara is therefore only able to create a single shadow of himself instead of four.

2.) Madara's Rinnegan can't perform the Blocking Technique Absorption Seal. I feel that this jutsu should remain purely Nagato's technique in order to make it more unique. As I previously stated, Madara's Rinnegan is distinct from Nagato's in that Madara inputted into Nagato his original eyes before he took Izuna's, which respond to Nagato's Uzumaki chakra and both evolve into the Rinnegan.

3.) Madara is unable to us Tengai Shinsei to drop meteorites on the battlefield simply because there are no nearby meteorites orbiting the Earth. Even if the meteorites Madara used came from the moon, I just feel it is too much and too far a distance.

4.) Madara's personal Mangekyo Sharingan power is that he can manipulate gravity to crush someone or something similar to Brago from Zatch Bell or Fujitora from One Piece. I was inspired for this by Madara's power to pull meteorites and noted Fujitora had a similar ability.

5.) Madara is unable to utilize his Susanoo with his wood clones because I feel that is just too much. Fighting 25 Susanoos at once just seems ridiculous to me. My rationalization for this is because Madara does not possess Senju/Uzumaki chakra. During his final fight with Sasuke, Naruto was able to perform his Shadow Clone Jutsu in conjunction with his Nine Tailed form to create clones of the Nine Tails. I deduced that Naruto was able to do this because of his Uzumaki chakra whereas a normal jinchuriki would be unable to create clones of their tailed beast.

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Thunderland47 In reply to GeneralDodders [2020-01-22 05:23:49 +0000 UTC]

Some of those reasons Naruto has for fighting Fukushuu could be shared with Satsuki.  Aside from Naruto and Takeru, Hinata is another person Satsuki becomes close with, though I consider the bond with the former two to be the deeper one.  Fukushuu caused the near destruction of the Uchiha clan by trying to use them as pawns, finding out that he attempted to do something similar to the families of Naruto and Hinata is not something that will sit well with Satsuki.  I saw that in your story that Naruto is the one who kills Sasori, I feel like Satsuki and/or Takeru should be the ones to deal with Sasori.


What type of villain would you say Fukushuu is? Something like a tragic villain or monster with no redeeming qualities, etc.?  Where would you say he crosses it beyond redemption?


In your story where would you say Sakura stands in terms power compared to Naruto and Sasuke?  I find it sad how Sakura was left far behind compared to her teammates.  An idea I have for how strong I make Takeru is that while Naruto and Satsuki are above him in overall power, they aren’t tiers apart and Takeru may even have a fair chance of beating them under ideal conditions.  I like all of the abilities you made for Sakura, but the one I’m most interested in is the Slug Fusion.  How does this compare to transformations like Sage Mode or Jinchuuriki cloaks?  Would this fusion be able to work with two slugs?  I know the fusion requires Katsuyu, but I’m also planning on giving Takeru his own slug.

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GeneralDodders In reply to Thunderland47 [2020-01-23 01:32:23 +0000 UTC]

I would say Fukushuu is a mix of a tragic villain and a monster with no redeeming qualities. Remember that Fukushuu was conceived by his father Eguchi for the sole purpose of carrying on his quest for vengeance; Fukushuu's name is Japanese for "revenge". From the moment Fukushuu was born, Eguchi drilled into his child his undying hatred of the Leaf and Uchiha. Eguchi would use his emotion manipulating powers to have Fukushuu experience all the feelings that Eguchi did as we watched Madara slaughter his people. By doing this, Fukushuu experienced all the fear, anger, hatred, and pain of the Tasogare clan's destruction as if he experienced it firsthand. Ultimately, Eguchi sees Fukushuu as nothing more than an instrument to carry on his own desire for vengeance; Fukushuu is little more than an empty shell for his father's hatred to live on in. It is because of this that Fukushuu lived his whole life without ever knowing love or friendship. Fukushuu is living his life for the sole purpose of finishing what his father started and fulfilling the reason why he was born. While the life that Fukushuu has known is said, it is because of his determination to fulfill his father's wishes that he is able to do all the horrible things he does so easily. Fukushuu is similar to Sumire Kakei from Boruto, who was raised by her father to avenge Danzo and Root by destroying the Leaf Village. Although she strives to follow her father's quest for vengeance, she turns away from this through remembering her mother's love and the bonds she developed with her classmates. Fukushuu, on the other hand, never had any of these bonds with anyone.


The concept of when a character is beyond redemption I feel is complicated. In the canon series, there are a lot of characters who were redeemed that I feel got off way too easy:

1.) Orochimaru -  He spent his whole life torturing and killing countless people for the sake of satisfying his thirst for knowledge and power. He even attempted to destroy the Leaf Village which resulted in the deaths of many people including the Third Hokage. Yet, at the end his is allowed to roam freely while being monitored by Yamato and other Leaf ninja.
2.) Kabuto - Not only did he aide Orochimaru in torturing and kill countless people, but he also personally killed hundreds of people whom he sacrificed to create his army of Reanimation Ninja. At the end, he is allowed to run his old orphanage as if he didn't do anything. Granted that he did safe Sasuke's life which ultimately played a role in saving the world, but that doesn't erase all of the people he killed beforehand.
3.) Obito - This is my biggest problem. He caused large scale death and destruction all because his love interest died. Unlike Nagato who did what he thought was necessary to create a world of peace, Obito has a lame excuse for causing widespread suffering. The man orchestrated a full scale war that resulted in the deaths of tens of thousands of people, which is not something you can wipe of the slate. Again, Obito ultimately helped save Naruto and Sasuke which saved the world, but that doesn't erase all he did. I mean, Rin greeted Obito in the afterlife and said "I'm sure you did your best" which involved mass death and destruction. I can't buy Naruto saying Obito was "the coolest guy ever", who was responsible for the deaths of his parents and the reason he grew up hated his entired life.
4.) Sasuke - My biggest problem here is how everyone forgot about how Sasuke killed a bunch of samurai. Obviously Danzo deserved to die which is why Sasuke can be forgiven for that, but the samurai were innocent victims of Sasuke's rampage.

I find myself able to forgive Nagato because he was able to erase his sins by sacrificing himself to restore the Leaf Village. The concept of forgiveness when it comes to taking another person's life is difficult because killing just one person is horrible. I feel my OCs Gozen and Rensho are more redeemable in that they only did the things they did because Fukushuu corrupted their souls to be evil.


In my story, Sakura is able to become strong enough for her to hold her own against Naruto or Sasuke in a fight (remember my commission series Sasuke vs Sakura). Her Slug Fusion jutsu enables her to reach chakra levels on par with a jinchuriki. When she uses Chakra Enhanced Strength while being amplified by Katsuyu's chakra, her attack and defensive power is on par with a Version 2 Tailed Beast Cloak. When Sakura uses Slug Hardening to harden her body, she is capable of withstanding a Rasengan or a Chidori. When Slug Hardening is combined with Chakra Enhanced Strenght amplified by Katusyu's chakra receives, Sakura is capable of withstanding a Rasenshuriken and Amaterasu. Which other of the Sakura jutsu ideas are you interested? The Slug Fusion jutsu can only be done with a single slug as only one slug can be fused to a person's DNA at a time. Slug Fusion doesn't need Katsuyu to perform it, assuming that your new slug is as large as Katsuyu and is able to split into smaller clones.

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Thunderland47 In reply to GeneralDodders [2020-01-23 13:59:53 +0000 UTC]

Maybe this can help you with telling if a character is beyond redemption.
tvtropes.org/pmwiki/pmwiki.php…

The explanations on the pages for the abilities you gave Sakura are pretty clear.  I first said that I was mixed about the Emotion ability because while I think it works well with Sakura's personality, I can't say the same for Takeru.

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Thunderland47 In reply to GeneralDodders [2019-08-30 06:26:54 +0000 UTC]

Hello Dodders, where would you say Rensho stands amongst the Jinchuuriki power wise?  From what I’ve read it looks like Rensho could give even Killer Bee a difficult fight, as it feels like he has more ways to hurt Bee than vice versa.  It says he can telekinetically manipulate his diamond, can you please give examples of how he uses this?

I read that Gaara gets back Shukaku in your story.  Does Gaara become a perfect Jinchuuriki?  It sounds like he would be a real high tier Jinchuuriki if he did, especially in the desert.

There’s something I want to ask about your version of Sasuke power wise.  Would you say he’s a better match for Naruto than canon Sasuke?  I want to know how he fares against the power of a Tailed-Beast, he’ll need some serious firepower and defences to match a Perfect Jinchuuriki.  I’m actually kinda disappointed that Sasuke needed the Tailed Beasts to match half Kurama Naruto.

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GeneralDodders In reply to Thunderland47 [2019-09-07 13:33:33 +0000 UTC]

Hey there, here are my answers to your questions:

1.) On his own, Rensho is able to withstand almost anything with his diamond mimicry jutsu. It is said that Kakuzu's Earth Spear jutsu makes his body as hard as diamond; since Rensho's diamond is chakra based, his technique would be stronger than Kakuzu's Earth Spear. In a fight between Rensho and Killer Bee (without tailed beast chakra), Bee would be helpless to do any damage to Rensho with his lightning swords for two reasons: 1) diamond is extremely resistant to cutting and 2) diamond is an electrical insulator. However, in the real world diamond is not indestructible as it can be shattered with sufficient force. In Rensho's case, his diamond body can be broken if it was hit with enough power. If Killer Bee did go into his Version 2 state, he would have the strength to crack Rensho's diamond body although it wouldn't be a one-hit KO; Bee would need to struck Rensho repeatedly in Version 2 in order to eventually break him. Rensho is able to defeat any of the jinchuuriki on his own unless they use Version 2 to overcome his defenses, but this scenario pertains to Rensho before he becomes the Four Tails jinchuuriki.

After the Four Tails is sealed with him, Rensho is able to fuse the tailed beast cloak with his diamond body such that is merges with his body rather than simply surround it, which creates the red coloring. This is because the hot nature of the Four Tails lava chakra is able to merge with Rensho's diamond which is a strong conductor of heat. This increases Rensho's strength and speed beyond a normal jinchuuriki's Version 2 state, enabling him to overpower any jinchuuriki he faces (again no one-hit KO). In addition, the heat conducting nature of his diamond body enables him to utilize the Four Tails lava chakra more efficiently so as to make his lava attacks more powerful than Roshi's usage. Lastly, when he transforms into the four tails, he can combine his diamond jutsu with it to turn the entire Four Tails body into diamond. The only weakness is that the transformed Four Tails will have the same weak spot in his throat as Rensho when he utilizes the diamond jutsu. Rensho and the Four Tails together would be stronger than any jinchuuriki they fought. The only exception would be Naruto when he combines Sage Mode with his Nine Tails Chakra Mode which would enable him to surpass Rensho's power (again no one-hit KO).

Rensho is able to telekinetically control the diamonds he creates. After he fires diamond shards from his body or creates diamond spikes in the soil, Rensho is able to manipulate the shards to throw them at his opponents. He is also able to break down his diamond constructs into diamond dust to enable him to unleash a blizzard of little diamond fragments at his enemies which are difficult to block and avoid. He can also create a platform of diamond from the soil and use it to transport himself around (like Terra from Teen Titans). Remember that he can only turn objects/substances that have carbon in them into diamonds.

2.) In my story, after Naruto frees all the jinchuuriki and their tailed beasts from Fukushuu's influence, they essentially all become perfect jinchuuriki because they all develop bonds with each other as Naruto and Bee did with the Nine Tails and Eight Tails respectively. Prior to this, the jinchuuriki aren't perfect because Fukushuu uses his soul manipulating powers to break the spirits of the Tailed Beasts in order to enable their jinchuuriki to draw on their power without succumbing to madness.

In my story when Gaara has Shukaku pulled out of him by the Akatsuki, Naruto, Sasuke, Sakura, Kakashi, and Chiyo are able to reach him into before Shukaku is completely extracted. This results in Gaara being left with a small fragment of Shukaku's chakra which prevents him from dying (like how Killer Bee was able to survive after Madara extracted the Eight Tails from him). Later on after the Shadow Village takes Shukaku from the Akatsuki, they seal it in Nagare (an anime filler character) to be its new jinchuuriki. During the war when Gaara and Nagare met, Gaara is able to extract Shukaku from Nagare and seal it within his own body due to the sliver of tailed beast chakra that remains inside him (the scenario would be similar to when Obito extracts tailed beast chakra from Madara when he was the ten tails jinchuuriki). An idea I also had was for Gaara's mother Karura to have transferred her soul to a newborn Gaara before she died so as to protect him with her sand jutsu, but she is unable to talk to him due to Shukaku's seal. Gaara is only able to meet his mother after Shukaku is extracted and the seal is undone. Karura is also there to help Gaara pull Shukaku out of Nagare and into his own body. Seeing the lengths Gaara went to save Shukaku causes them to bond and become perfect jinchuuriki.

3.) Obviously my version of Sasuke doesn't have all the powers your version does because I feel that is too much and he doesn't need them. As I stated before, Sasuke's Susanoo shroud is the counterpart of the Tailed Beast Cloak and it is as strong as the Version 2 state. His complete Susanoo has the same level of power as a fully transformed Tailed Beast. The only thing is if Naruto combines his Tailed Beast Mode with Sage Mode, Sasuke is able to counter by engulfing his Susanoo in Amaterasu as he does here in order to increase its attack power: www.deviantart.com/vicio-kun/a…. Sasuke is also able to cover his entire complete Susanoo with Amaterasu. I feel that the power of Sasuke's Amaterasu Susanoo would be equal to Naruto's Tailed Beast Sage Mode.

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Thunderland47 In reply to GeneralDodders [2019-09-15 01:42:33 +0000 UTC]

 Thanks for the info Dodders, though I’m wondering how your version of Sasuke would beat Itachi, it doesn’t look like he has any counter to Totsuka blade and Yata Mirror. He doesn't seem to have any counter to Danzo's genjutsu either.

How strong do you think your version of Sasuke would be if he got the Rinnegan?

Here are my ideas if Satsuki got the Rinnegan:

The Susanoo shroud gains wings for flight and makes the user physically comparable to a Juubi Jinchuuriki.

The Teleportation Projectiles can now be guided in flight.  The user can also create special swords that cut via teleportation.  The swords share the projectile’s advantages such as immunity to absorption, ability to damage Truth-Seeking    Balls, and bypass the Kamui defense.  The swords can even fire crescent waves for more ranged cutting, albeit only to Mid-range.

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GeneralDodders In reply to Thunderland47 [2019-09-15 02:53:48 +0000 UTC]

Well in my story Itachi's Susanoo doesn't have the Totsuka Bland and Yata Mirror. To me it appears none of the other Susanoos had special weapons like that; they only has standard swords and bows and the likes (Granted Kakashi had Kamui shuriken but to me that is just an ability of having both of Obito's sharigan). Itachi's Susanoo is just a normal Susanoo like everyone else's. As Sasuke has his Mangekyo Sharingan by the time he faces Itachi, it is basically an equal fight with a battle to total exhaustion with Sasuke just coming out slightly ahead. Also I got rid of Itachi's illness so that Sasuke actually defeats Itachi.

If Sasuke did get the Rinnegan, he would just have the same abilities as in the cannon.

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Thunderland47 In reply to GeneralDodders [2019-09-20 10:25:51 +0000 UTC]

Another thing I want to ask is how would Satsuki fair against Hanago.

Here’s my analysis:

The only thing I think that truly puts Satsuki above Hanago is her mastery of Susanoo.  Other than that, I feel that Hanago would be a pretty challenging opponent for Satsuki.  Plasma release should give Satsuki the CQC advantage and even defend against Amaterasu to an extent, but if she gets hit by the flames, it will be very bad or game over.  Teleportation should also help against Amaterasu and the Time reduction ability, though she may have little to no room to use the projectiles because she cannot use both aspects of her teleportation simultaneously.  The rotting ability means that Satsuki can’t afford to get touched even once.  Hanago also has healing while Satsuki doesn’t.

What do you think, is there anything else that would give Hanago an advantage or disadvantage?

Also do Sasuke and Sakura have any role when Naruto goes to rescue Hinata?  I know that it would make perfect sense for Satsuki and Takeru to help Naruto with something like that.  I’ve said before that I intend to remove the rivalry between Naruto and Sasuke, as such Naruto and Satsuki never have a final battle.

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