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DramaDonkey
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[2010-01-03 17:28:02 +0000 UTC]
"LEVI IS HOT"
(Austria)
# Statistics
Favourites: 148; Deviations: 71; Watchers: 29
Watching: 19; Pageviews: 19270; Comments Made: 241; Friends: 19
# Interests
Favorite movies: High School Musical, Twilight, New Moon, Transformers!!Favorite bands / musical artists: Sido, Justin Bieber, Nikki Minaj, Kay One :)))
Favorite books: Twilight Books
Favorite writers: Stephanie Mayer :D
Favorite games: Naruto games, Candy Crush
Favorite gaming platform: Pc
Other Interests: HSM, shopping, colur pink, Make-up
# About me
HELOOO! Bruni x ITACHI IS AWESOOOOOOOOME!!!!!!!!!!
Current Residence: Salzburg
Favourite genre of music: Rap, R'n'B'
Favourite cartoon character: Itachi, Levi
Personal Quote: I'll clean for you Levi<3
# Comments
Comments: 94
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Okay look people......I agree that this girls oc’s are bad but I have seen people tell this girl that they want to kill her or that she has the IQ of a houseplant. That’s a bit over dramatic. And by saying insults like, you might lead her to kill herself and could get you jail time if your comments are found as a catalyst to her death. Besides, it’s not like she killed your mom or your dog. She just made a bad OC and that’s it. Don’t act like you’ve never done it before! Everybody in the OC community has been there! Instead, we should be guiding her and telling her what she can do to make more realistic, interesting, and well-rounded characters.
Scroll down to the bottom of the page and read ’s comment. It’s the perfect example of how to give criticism to someone in this girl’s position.
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YOU like transformers too? Hey small interweb.
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Warte du wohnst in Salzburg, wenn ich das richtig verstehe. Omg, ich auch *-*
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*opens the door* there's this beautiful phrase called......GET OUT.
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I can't decide either to take this seriously or not... All your oc's are Mary Sues and under weight, they all need a big mac. Go eat some more yourself...
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Okay I'm just going to say something, so please don't fire back, I am honestly trying my hardest to not be rude at all. Your ocs need a lot of work, all of them do. I don't know if you think it's funny but I'm just going to say that your gallery is ticking off a lot of people who love Attack on Titan and Naruto.
For Naruto:
Add some neutral colors in there for pete's sake! All these bright colors do not go well on the eyes, my eyes started to water after looking at those because of all the colors that clashed and didn't go well together at all. Get a color scheme, don't slap random colors in because trust me it doesn't look good at all. I don't even know if you watched the anime at all but Sakura IS NOT older than Madara or his age. That's another thing, breaking canon. You CAN make a few small exceptions but basically changing how the anime is already set is a big no no. If you don't want Itachi to die then have an AU, there is nothing wrong with that at all. The third is god modding, everyone hates ocs that are perfect and have no flaws because no real person is flawless, not even anime characters. And people also hate if an oc is more powerful than a canon character, especially Madara because he is one of the most op characters I have ever seen. Work on their back story and looks, don't have them look like a stripper and I know back stories take a lot of work but it can be done. And finally a Japanese name would be much better than 'Bruni' or 'Raven' plus there were no middle names in Japan. It was only the first name and the surname.
For Attack on Titan:
Again, you need neutral colors. In this universe unlike Naruto, it is generally NOT okay to have unnatural hair colors or eye colors. Stick to natural, if you want natural highlights thats okay but don't have unnatural colors. It is a big no no in this universe. Lisa looks like a Hatsune Miku trace over because of the hair style and hair color, with a few minor adjustments and that is it. Change her clothes, like for your naruto ocs. Girls really didn't wear makeup in this universe and they stuck to natural color clothing, not saying that you can't have ONE small thing that is an unnatural color but a pink shirt that is a lowcut croptop is NOT okay at all. Titan shifters are honestly over-rated in this fandom, its overdone and its overpowering. If you want her to be good or noticed, maybe have her skills be pretty high, of course not like Levi's or any of the captains but you can still increase that and her strength without having to make her a titan shifter. Also, if you want Lisa to be in the army, at LEAST make her of age, at least 18. No one allowed 14 year olds to enter the army and Levi would NOT go for her because of the way she is and because she is WAY too young for him.
Spend time on your ocs and make them great, something that people will like. It is only advice so whether you decide to take it or not is completely up to you, I will not force you either way. I just hope you take this into consideration next time you think of an oc. People don't like what you post just to be blunt. I'm not going to say anything about skills because everyone has different levels and so far that they can go.
Good day.
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Still have no clue why people are being so mean to this girl.
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because, when people see oc's like this that make zero sense, it pisses people off.
because this is all people think about when compared to well-made oc's that have actual time and effort put into them, then you see oc's like her's ruining the oc reputation community.
its bad enough there are hate blogs about oc's,created just to bash well-made snd well-written oc that are lumped in with the majority of the mary-sues people see on here.
we don't need oc's like her's running around and ruining the rest of the oc community.
now do you understand why she's getting hate?
but hey, maybe you can giver her tips and help her with her oc's.
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Troll or not, don't you think it's a bit rude to hate on someone because they have different tastes and skills than you? Not anyone can make well made ocs with a great story behind them. Hate on someone that steals art sure i am all for that even though i couldn't care less unless it's my art. But all these comments and for what? Because her ocs have unusual hair colors? Or aren't drawn as well? We all started from somewhere, you can't tell me you just always knew how to draw. You probably did stuff like these, but most likely did not upload them or deleted them. But this girl has some balls if she's not a troll. And she obviously couldn't care less if you don't like her ocs. Plus she gets attention, and isn't that the whole point? The deviantart community is enough cancer as it is, no wonder people are leaving. I still can't believe people act as if they are 10 or care about people that can't draw well. Like shit when i first joined they were given support.
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I don't like her oc's, that's all i'm critiscizing.
yeah, it is rude, but that's how it is if you got an oc like hers, sadly.
i'm not bashing her art skills, i'm only giving my opinion on her oc's.
and this artist is 18 years old, your right, people don't always have the skills.
but at this age, people should be past the horrible mary-sue, weeboo age at least.
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I don't know though, the amount of attention you gave her tells me otherwise. And not really. You've probably been long enough around here to know how many cancerous deviants are on here. Like those weird furry/brony people.
But i assume you haven't been that deep the internet to know that it's pretty common for people above 20 to still be in their weeaboo phase. Some are even worse than this girl. I guess that's why it doesn't surprise me/bother me.
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Thing is this Artist is 18-19.....at that stage in life she should be over her weeaboo otauku phase, and at least take the time to make decent Non-Mary Sue creations.
It's surprisingly not that difficult to make one, especially if you you all the guides and tutorials out there to help
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Like i said not anyone has the skills for it. Not everyone is born talented. Oh please, i have seen people over 20 being into anime. Sure it's sad but not uncommon. There are a lot of artists above 18 with not so good art but they are popular anyways.
NOT anyone is gonna be that good, talented or smart and none of it is their fault, so it's not right hating on them.
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Not everyone has the skills for it....Yet.
No one is born with the ability to be a "Great Artist"
The "Great" Artists became that because they practiced.
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That is somewhat true, but you can never be a great artist if you were born with no talent.
Also if what you say is true, going by that, then these comments are practically forcing her to practice/improve in a bad way, not motivating her. I clearly cannot see how someone would have will to draw if all they get is hate.
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No one is born with any "Talent" when we are born, we are a blank slate. We really don't know much of anything.
We learn things based on our upbringing and experiences AND based on our Physiological abilities.
That's why people with strong atheltic bodies are roped into sports.....they were not born with the talent of being an athelte, but through a series of experiences and good DNA, they learned to become a basketball, football, baseball or soccer star.
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Yeah actually you are born with it. Not anyone can sing good just as not anyone can draw good. You can practice all your life and you may get somewhat good but you will never be good as someone with a talent. And people that tells themselves otherwise live in a lie.
But then again we cannot argue opinions here, so you have yours and i have mine but i think we can all agree hating on this girl is pretty pointless.
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No you aren't. It's a scientific fact. No one is born more talented than anyone else at anything
Anyone can Art. You don't need talent to draw.
Just like anyone can kick a ball
Or add 2+2
And it is not pointless to Hate Nikki..... it is a natural consequences of her sheer stupidity, her baltent art theft and because she an utter douche-muffin. She brought it all on herself....so she really can't complain about, cause at this point she all but deserves it.
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You saying it's a scientific fact all you want but that won't change things how they are. You notice talent at a young age, and yeah people are born gifted and there is nothing weird or wrong about that. Sure you can teach someone to kick a ball, but it would take such a long time for them to learn and even so they will never be as good as someone naturally born with it. And as for 2+2 part, that is not true at all. Everyone knows basic math, I know you just gave it an example but I'm gonna go along with it. My close friend, no matter how many times you tell how example how much 8 x 6 is, she never learns it, and some people lack the certain potential to know math in this case, and that doesn't make them any worse or better. It's just how people work. Like example not everyone is born with a natural voice to sing well. Sure with autotune you can, but it will never be the same as a natural born talent. It's very true that practice makes people improve but you just cannot deny the fact that talent plays a big role. Everyone is gifted in something, if everyone could become a good artist without talent then we would have many more artists than what we have now.
You don't make fun of people with mental or physical disabilities right? I mean sure you can if you're into that stuff, but not in front of everyone else, because you will be viewed as a jerk. It's the same case with this girl, maybe I got a bit deeper than I should have but just because she lacks the talent, skill, or whatever you want to call it that really doesn't give anyone the right to just bash her on her profile. Besides all that I think it's a troll, so you're basically doing what she expects you to do. No one deserves to be bullied over something that's not their own fault. Not everyone is bright, and you wouldn't do this in real life, you're doing it online like every other person here for absolutely no reason, as if it matters.
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What the fuck is with your tagline? "LEVI IS HOT"? More like overrated.
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I wuv yo art, senpai, it's mu drem 4 yuo to fullow me. Plz fellow me black plz senpai plz dont thik im thristy xoxoxo
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eyyy thanks for using my stamp as an example. 8)
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No problem! LEVI HAS NO TIME FOR MARY SUES.
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Please take your misguided opinions and disgusting, saturated colours elsewhere.
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oemg your derman too
bbut, levi istt mine hoe dare you take him ist iss minaer and you can't have him onemg what aere you fdoing!!!!! uhg m i'm s0 omand right nowaw, whats wrong eiwth you doid n't levi tel you he's alreasdy have done the ptrons twith me?!!!!?!?!?!?!?! ughD:<
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Oh, boy, um.....where to start here?
I had been searching AoT OC and ran into Lisa and from the start I noticed there were too many issues with her. After seeing her, though, I had decided to check out the rest or your characters to see if they were all like that or if it was a one time fluke. Unfortunately, I was sorely mistaken and ALL of your characters had issues from what I could tell.
I did factor in that you seem to very obviously not be a native English speaker or American or anything like that, in fact it was painfully obvious to see that you were German from the start. So, for that, I'm not going to rag on your writing, though I do have one thing to say. It gets rather annoying when people see way too many question marks or exclamation marks, so I advice sticking to one for each of those. Though if it's an overly dramatic response, then it would be a good idea to limit the number. Perhaps two or three of them.
Moving on to the actual art. Most of them are poorly done and I apologize for saying that. I would suggest practicing more starting with traditional art using pencil and paper. Maybe get a few books and watch a few videos on how to draw. This can be both helpful to learn the basics if you're struggling as well as be a good reference even after you get better.
Next up, if you want to make a character for a series, it's best to do your research. I don't actually know if you do or don't, but for the sake of advice, I'll explain this anyway. Certain series abide by different rules then others, obviously. But this also transfers over to even simple details such as hair and eyes.
For example, in Attack on Titan, they are very logical in that respect. Normal, natural hair colors and eye colors for each of the characters. Blonde, black, brown, red, grey for hair colors. Blue, brown, grey, green, some people even have red or silver-ish eyes. Of course, red and silver are rare in this time and you need to factor that in as well.
Following this, you also need to be aware of the colors you use for your characters cloths. Bright colors can be nice in theory, though really burn and strain a persons eyes if they're over done. It's best in those cases to balance those colors out with darker, more neutral colors. Keep the neon and overly bright colors to a minimum and perhaps you can actually have MORE fun with the different mixing and match of dark colors as well as light colors.
Along with this, slutty does NOT equal sexy. In fact, the best way to have a character with sex appeal is to leave a good amount to the imagination. Typically in the real world, no one would dress that way and these characters would be called out. This, though I don't support it or think it's too rational, is also what causes a lot of people in the real world to get jump, being robbed and possibly even raped.
A great idea to give a character sex appeal (if you REALLY want to) is to give them an out fit that might not bee too tight, but shows the aspects you want. emphasizing the curves while still keeping them covered. This would not give the character then that 'slutty' look and still be able to catch the eyes of the characters and even real people.
Another good idea is to perhaps not have it where so many people like the characters and unreasonably hate other characters. For example, you state in Lisa's bio that you think (or she think's) Mikasa is evil. In truth, she's merely a bit disconnected from her emotions for the most part, but is a truly caring friend. She also CANONICALLY has show feeling for Eren AND is technically like Eren's adoptive sister since Eren's family took care of her after her family was killed.
Along with this, you also hate Armin and where, yes his character was a bit of a cry baby, he also changes over time. He's one of those characters that was shy and that held up in his character, that was part of his struggle and something he eventually fixes in himself. Both Mikasa and Armin are Eren's friends, though, so it's illogical that someone would be friends with one person (let along best friends) while hating and considering their friends their enemies.
Also, you can feel free to ship your character with Levi, though your character is actually far too young. She would be a cadet no matter what you say, merely due to her age, and Levi is a character that the creator of Attack on Titan says is older than he appears. Most people even believe that he's somewhere in his thirties. This would therefore be considered Pedophilia for Levi to be with your character who is 14. You could, of course, easily fix this issue by bumping up her age, perhaps to her twenties. She appears that old anyway, so it's not as though you would have to change the pictures you have of her for that then.
On top of that, though, Levi CANONICALLY doesn't typically show too much emotion towards anything through his facial expression. He's also rather stern and very blunt, not a person afraid to curse and beat a person around like he had Eren. He IS humanities strongest, after all, and is perfectly capable of doing this. As well as the fact that he's a squad leader and is SUPPOSED to push his squad around to get better....though Levi also is just a very abrasive type of person. These type of things should be noted BEFORE you ship a character with someone like that and, in fact, you should really aim to fully understand the character you're shipping with before you try to do that and make sure there is even possible chemistry between the characters.
Next, work more on making the characters seem like actual people. It's annoying to see someone who's too perfect and yet even more so for someone who's useless. That's when you need to work on finding a balance and, though this is hard, it CAN be achieved. The best way to do this is to go through and ask yourself if someone like that were real, would I hate them? Or, even better, CAN someone like that even exist within the real world with the personality and characteristics they have.
Continuing, don't be afraid of criticism. Yes, a lot of people can be jerks and really yell at you for seemingly no reason, but with in those comments and shouts, you can usually find a bit of advice in there. You don't have to do EVERYTHING people say, but it's generally a good idea to change something if multiple people say the same thing.
Also, never be afraid to revise your characters. Trust me, a lot of really good characters go through a process that had them starting out one way and ending completely different. (This part mostly comes from my personal experience and I currently have 165 OC whom all have gone through this.)
As a last note, I believe that the Mary-Sue Test might help you with figuring out if a character is or isn't a Mary-Sue. It can also be a good way to brainstorm and think up ideas for your characters no matter what the series you're putting the characters in.
Here's a link to the test - www.springhole.net/writing/mar…
I hope that this all can help you with making better characters and that you can make a character that not only you are proud of, but also allows others to share your enjoyment of the character. Also, I apologize once again if any of this offended you, I just hate to see someone who clearly enjoys making characters as much as you do to end up being forced to look back at this and wonder what it was you were doing or basically be chased out of Deviantart because of the characters you've made so far.
So, good luck! ^_^
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ah, thank you?
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my god please tell me this account is supposed to be a funny "troll fangirl stereotype"
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Don't mind me, just dying of laughter in the corner over here.
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Meine Augeeeeeeeeeeeen!! Meine Augeeeen! *hysterisch rumkreisch* Was bist du!? Dein Charakter ist ne Mary Sue!!! UND ITACHI GEHÖRT MIR!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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